NO IRONY WHATSOEVER

02 11 14

There are times when I get so
fixated on a concrete message
that mirth extraneously manifests
in my aura like menthol
in the cavern of a sore throat
The medicine of rolling eyes
scold me for self-imposed sickness
My lens of disposition is hi-def clear
yet my fingertips have been dulled
by my oral chainsaw rendering it
impossible to get the cap off
Am I bearing my poetic soul in the hope
of fusing with coincidental souls?
Or am I hiding my insecurities behind it
while luring innocent witnesses into
the brainwash booth of my shortcomings?
Colloquial communication is an alien to me
camouflaged in the company
of smartphone-equipped commuters
I am not a touch screen but
the signal that defines its purpose
Sometimes

Author's Note

Captcha: overveil

Reviews

[Renée]

Sometimes I read a piece.. and it is like I need to savor it for all the "flavors" ( for lack of a better word) it contains.. I read pieces aloud..(several times btw) this one rolls off my tongue so easily and with each line leaves me with cells of a movie before my eyes.. I love your last line.. for me it seems to want to scream "hey look I am human see me… then insecurity quietly steps in with "sometimes" ..
just my thoughts… but it is a great piece !

[kublakhan27]

So glad I could write something that spoke to you on a deep level...it was a deep piece to write too, and took a few days for me to get it where I felt comfortable with it. Thanks so much for the support Renee :)

[Renée]

the depth from where this came shows. the waiting till you are comfortable.. I think of that period as a "proofing period" that is what we call the resting and rising of bread before it is baked..( pottery is another example) things that are a true part of us..need that time..
It was my pleasure to read your thoughts ( :

[TL Boehm]

is that like laughing at someone who died a horrible death due to terminal stupidity acted out with a camera rolling? I am guilty of doing that. My brain is a hot mess along with the rest of me.

[kublakhan27]

I hear you on that haha Thank you TL.

[Blue]

"Or am I hiding my insecurities behind it
while luring innocent witnesses into
the brainwash booth of my shortcomings?
Colloquial communication is an alien to me"

The way you play with words is commendable! For some reasons, I felt like I want to know you more. Maybe it's because I can relate to this piece.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Arzel, I'm glad you could relate to this piece...I hold this one close to the heart :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Or am I hiding my insecurities behind it
while luring innocent witnesses into
the brainwash booth of my shortcomings

I think it is this personal second guessing that puts the human in us. Without doubt, we would be monsters. Fabulous work, here.

[kublakhan27]

So true my friend, thank you as always for the kind words.

[Raymond Federle]

wonderful, deep and complex...I like it! :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks Raymond, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[icelandicblue]

Sometimes it's hard enough to figure out our own motivations than to figure out the motivations of others. We all long to make connections to be understood and we can sometimes do that through the eyes of others. This feels like a poem that came from somewhere deep. We all suffer insecurities and if we say we don't we're lying.

[kublakhan27]

This is indeed the deepest and most personal thing I've written in quite some time...that's just the way it's been. I'm so glad this one spoke to you, thank you.

[BlackRose]

Great! Trying to figure someone else out let alone figuring out who we are can be hard. This says alot dependibg to the reader. Can tell this has got more personal meaning behind it, and nothing wrong with that. :o)

[kublakhan27]

I know just what you mean...this is definitely the most personal thing I've written in a while. So glad you enjoyed it :)

[BlackRose]

Your very welcome. I too have some personal ones I've put here and there. But hasn't anyone, ha.

[Listmaker]

Very introspective. Trying to figure ourselves out is sometimes more difficult than trying to figure out others. It's good that you can catch yourself being too serious and laugh. I think all we poets question how much of ourselves to bare in our work. Yes, it is easy to hide ourselves behind our computer and smart phone screens. Thank you for a thought provoking poem.

[kublakhan27]

All true points for sure...thanks, I'm glad it made you think :)

[Listmaker]

You are a gifted writer. Thanks for this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Behind rolling eyes, there is often an empty shell... We all struggle to be heard and understood, and our tweety-twit culture thinks that hey have found a way to "reach out"... In your poetry, Steve, you do indeed fuse with souls, coincidental or not.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita, this is the most personal thing I've written in a while, I'm happy that it spoke to you :)

[AYVID N]

I am not a touch screen but
the signal that defines its purpose
Sometimes


The poem says a lot...it is brilliantly done...

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Divya :)