IMPERFECT STORM (Collab with Melobldnfr)

02 04 14

I have love, if it be returned
I have fire, for whom I've yet to learn
But it's taken an angel to break the spell
of an angel tonight

I saw the turbulence of trepidation
in your reaching out to
stroke my wings
Your senses stumped by the unrest
in your once-indestructible
cherubic innocence
An epiphany in the presence of a
new and undiscovered breed of
heavenly body

My sight of you beyond optical
speaking without words
in a vernacular more sensed than heard
How can you not know who you are?
What you are?
How is it I am to let you see me
but you'd have me blind to you?
You offer me your struggle,
melt into me
then shake me off like a lost sock
You'd have walk away
Smiling...

...crying...laughing...

You're my spectrum
blinding under cover of an atmosphere
tormenting the weather
in my sky of realism with a serpentine
campaign for an unfurling
of your perfect storm of ideals
I must shade my eyes in a plethora of angles
just to keep track of your pedantic
body language

And sure enough you looked at me
and stuttered
Now you've talked yourself into
an imperfect storm
locked yourself to the ground
with a dilemma-driven puncture
of your cloud of escape
We are equals now
too lacking in our own confidence
in flight to dare the other
to initiate direction

Author's Note

The second collab between Mel and I. Be sure to check out her writing as well...she is one of the more underrated poets in these parts :)

writerscafe.org/melobldnfr

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I'm wondering which is better, a perfect storm or an imperfect one, if this is an example, then you won my vote, great collaboration you two.

My favorite has to be...

I saw the turbulence of trepidation
in your reaching out to
stroke my wings

And the third stanza is so apropos, sets the tone for the whole 'weather' scheme and turbulence. Bravo!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much love...I now feel a little relevant by receiving a review haha So glad you enjoyed it...the third stanza is hers so she will be glad to see that. Thank you again Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

I tried to get here earlier but the cafe wouldn't permit it, someone needs to smash those damn gremlins in a blender. You work splendidly together, she must be a bit abstract also. ;-) Was my pleasure Benji! Kudos Mel!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yeah the glitches make me wanna grate my nails on a chalkboard at times...our voices do compliment each other well :) Thanks again love :)

[Frieda P]

Well I actually want to scratch Mel's eyes out for hogging you but I won't say cause her feelings might get hurt ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Wow, Mrs.R is wide-awake today ;P You don't have a thing to worry about :)

[Frieda P]

Ha it's Frisky Frieday, I lost my head ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha frisky indeed ;)

[Jack...]

Steve and Mel...I really don't know what to say, this is top of the ladder good. Man I can see for miles inside of this fine collaboration. You two, from what I read are completely in sync with one another, your words mesh like fine cotton sheets and a satin comforter. An Imperfect Storm, so much can be read into those few words and obviously so much can be written to them as well. You two have carved up the sky and had it rain on me as I read.

Very nicely done to you both. As someone who enjoys the hell out of writing colaborations with our mutual friend Frieda, I know how much this must please you to write and then see completed. Very good.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend. Our voices just seem to intertwine, as do yours and Frieda's. You two were (and are) certainly an influence and an inspiration to me, not just with your collabs but your respective solo work. It truly means a lot to know that the two of you liked this one so much. Thank you Jack.

[Anand Sehgal]

And sure enough you looked at me
and stuttered
Now you've talked yourself into
an imperfect storm
locked yourself to the ground
with a dilemma-driven puncture



so nicely penned emotional complex. great !
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[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Anand :)