CIRCUMSTANCES, OH

CIRCUMSTANCES, OH

A Poem by kublakhan27
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02 06 14

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Circumstances, oh
how they bludgeon me like nails
to a bed of poisoned taffy
and the torture it entails

Holy water I would swear
is in her sweat, it pools and falls
drop by drop on my recessed
identity till reason calls

Absolution, oh
how I crave it in this state
of hypothetical hand washings
and the touches they sedate

Enlightenment will not strike twice
and can't be bottled, for she's shattered
all the bottles I was hiding
for a bender on what mattered

So I'm sobered and deprived
of all aplomb; it paints the drain
of days I count with scratches on the wall
between me and her comfort's reign

© 2014 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
A rare instance in which I said 'whatever, just write.'

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I gotta tell you... you are one amazing free-form writer!

This struck a nerve... I felt the impending spiral of alcoholism...
the disappointment of disappointing... the shame...the torture of cravings....
It can ruin you... It can ruin lives....It can ruin your integrity, and sense of self....

I am very familiar with this theme (not of my own turmoil, but from another)...
It's painful, nevertheless....

Well penned, my sweet!... you always keep my mind and heart reeling!~xoxo~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Robbie :) I wasn't sure how this one was going to pan out cuz I didn't ponder over it.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

It means the world to me too... you did not bring me pain... but acknowledgement, for those who stil.. read more



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Powerful imagery that moved me. Absolution does not ever come from hand washing and holy waters. My favorite verse here ...

"Enlightenment will not strike twice
and can't be bottled, for she's shattered
all the bottles I was hiding
for a bender on what mattered "

Truly impressive!


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Divya :)
Enlightenment will not strike twice
and can't be bottled, for she's shattered
all the bottles I was hiding
for a bender on what mattered

Some really clever and original turn of phrase, Steve.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks very much Pryde.
You have such heavy thought and imagery here. Each stanza demands attention... Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you :)

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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