KHAN'S BLUES

01 27 14

Not a single messenger
of solid clarity is safe
beneath my senses

The most trivial of visual
acknowledgements
shrivel windows into
nominal extinction
before me

Poor Winter windows
sentinels of colour gone stark
I'm afraid I must
declare you all mirrors now
tethered in the wayward
blisters of an inconsistent rain

Poor Winter poles
all your schoolyard tricks
of adhesion will be numbed
by the leather of my chapped lips
while my eyes blur your icy
emblems into epitaphs

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kleio13]

"I'm afraid I must
declare you all mirrors now
tethered in the wayward
blisters of an inconsistent rain"
These lines make me think of someone I used to know and hate. Someone who I thought I loved. that is just a reflection of what I abhor . Nice write Kubby

[kublakhan27]

Well, it isn't an ode to the carefree idylls of childhood to begin with my friend. This was written on a cynical day for cynical readers who know where I'm coming from, which you do. Glad you enjoyed it Kleio.

[TL Boehm]

Poor Winter windows
sentinels of colour gone stark
I'm afraid I must
declare you all mirrors now
tethered in the wayward
blisters of an inconsistent rain
HOLY COW that's poetic.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you TL :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Rich in metaphor and open to interpretation. A strong piece.:)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you KL, much appreciated :)

[KAOlmsted]

This is fantastic. I got a shiver reading it. Not sure what the deal is with Mr. Loaf but...I actually have that album and listen to it on occasion...xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I have the record as well and it's one of my favourites ;) I can't really explain the connection but there is a subconscious one there. I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece, I went deep down inside myself for this one. I can only say that these are melancholy days. But your return and the support you bring with it is definitely a pick-me-up ;) Thanks again my dear. xo

[KAOlmsted]

My absolute pleasure...and thank you xoxo

[Anand Sehgal]

lovely, lovely write. Brilliant use of language :)

pen on :)
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[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Anand, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

A chilling write, your closing lines left me still. Great, great imagery.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much PH, your compliments mean a lot.

[Rachelle]

Chilly and chilling........

[kublakhan27]

Thank you sweetbing :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Poor Winter poles
all your schoolyard tricks
of adhesion will be numbed
by the leather of my chapped lips
while my eyes blur your icy
emblems into epitaphs

There's a break-up poem and a half. Sure shooting, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

I reckon it is a poem for many occasions my friend, alas, not many good ones haha Glad you enjoyed it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this Steve...

i see it more as winter meaning that life itself has gone cold and numb...and i have too...i don't feel much anymore, i am just an image of feelings...a reflection from a mirror of what used to be...

the colors have gone stark...yes the hue is fading, and i just don't care much anymore.

really strong poem.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for understanding my sentiments my friend, and I'm glad that you could relate. As I've been telling the others, the Winter has always been my most creative time of year but it's been dulled as of late by the cold rains that have replaced the snow this year and the celestial state of mind I derive from it. This is the kind of stuff that gets written as a result. So glad you enjoyed my journey into the melancholy, thanks again.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

When it rains, it pours...and with the winter blues, it can be blistering!

"Poor Winter windows
sentinels of colour gone stark
I'm afraid I must
declare you all mirrors now
tethered in the wayward
blisters of an inconsistent rain"~ You never cease to amaze me, Stevie!!

I felt the freezing rain...

Dark emotions expressed to perfection!! Excellent!! :)

[kublakhan27]

The ironic thing here Robbie, is that I eagerly await the Winter every year cuz it is by far my most creative season, and the one which offers me the most inner piece. But the cold wind and freezing rain has trumped the celestial atmosphere that I covet so much at this time of year, and this is the kind of writing that comes from that mindset. But I'm happy to see that people have related to it, and I'm so grateful to hear your interpretations. Thanks so much my sweet friend :) xo

[kublakhan27]

*inner peace that is haha

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It is my pleasure to read you, always...
I know the winter can take a toll on your spirit... and the celestial atmosphere suffers...
But take heart, you will get through it...for your art has never been sacrificed...
it's moments like these, when you paint in another vortex...
working around the cold wind and freezing rain...

You are brilliant, my sweet! :))

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my sweet friend, your support and compliments will continue to inspire me and reinforce my always-fragile confidence...it means more than I can say :) xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

you are a great support to me, as well... bigtime!...hugs! :)))))))))))