A YES-MAN'S MOMENT OF CLARITY

12 09 13

The grains with
which I accept
all insistences are
disassembled
assemblages
of the sweetest salt

Nothing like an oxymoron
to consign
a benign blackball
to the trifle of silence
deemed to be awkward
by the insisters

And by benign
I mean
merciful

In my circumstantial mercy
they'll find an ante-inflating
irony hungry for the hand
of the oxymorons
I am capable of spawning

The ruins of the bed
in which I made nullified
love to my precious Psyche
are what they should be
studying

If they aspire to prolong
their insistent rhetoric
in my verbal vicinity
I will poison them
with the sweet salt left
behind by my beloved
Psyche
when the flower of her being
was inhaled with a failed
vacuum of vengeance

Satisfaction and timidity
I thought I could
comingle to seduce
I won't make that mistake
again

Author's Note

All I can say is interpret at will. It's been a long time since I've written an "inspired" piece. Everything I've written going back to the Fall has been forced, and when I force things, they tend to come out as self-indulgent. On that note, this piece makes perfect sense to me. But yeah, until I finally rediscover my inspiration, all I can say to a reader is interpret at well.

Psyche: (Classical Mythology) ...a personification of the soul, which in the form of a beautiful girl was loved by Eros.

Reviews

[Kleio13]

"Satisfaction and timidity
I thought I could
comingle to seduce
I won't make that mistake
again". These lines made me think of yesterday when my ex boyfriend assaulted me. I'm glad your'e back and i love how someone else can speak through me , because right now I'm still trying to fit my words with my experiences in the past couple of months

[kublakhan27]

I have not had the opportunity to really talk to you about this incident, and I hope I can touch base with you on it sometime soon. I do have some things to say about it (of which you can probably guess) but I'll wait. Regarding the poem, I guess I have mixed feelings toward you being able to relate to it so well in light of this incident. Of course, I'm always happy when you relate to my writing but this is a little different. Thanks so much Kleio, as always, for stopping by and taking the time to read between my lines.

[TL Boehm]

The ruins of the bed
in which I made nullified
love to my precious Psyche
are what they should be
studying

HOLY COW. I wish I wrote that.....

[kublakhan27]

Wow, I don't think I've ever written one stanza that's been praised by every single person that's reviewed it haha But trust me, I probably come across a poem every couple of days that I wish I wrote. Such is the nature of poetry I suppose...we're never totally happy with our own work. Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it :)

[icelandicblue]

Our souls long to make sense of these oxymorons we live and the connections and discoveries we make through our love affair with the quill.

The ruins of the bed
in which I made nullified
love to my precious Psyche
are what they should be
studying

We salt what we reject and we pick the beauty that grows around it for salt can only reach so far.

[kublakhan27]

True words for sure. It's been pretty amazing to see this one stanza cited by everyone as the most prominent part. Given my lover's quarrel with the quill these days, the oxymorons just seemed like my best hope at getting anything solid across. Many thanks as always, I'm glad you enjoyed and understood.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I know what you mean by not having an inspired piece lately.
I really like your choice of words and I'll put together I feel as if this is about past mistakes and not willing wanting to make them again- it is a bit mystifying.
I like it very much.

[kublakhan27]

I seem to write my most mystifying work when I am hurting for words. The odd thing about this piece is, I'm not even sure I know what mistakes I'm talking about, that's how bad I've been struggling lately. I just know I've made a lot of them. I'm relieved that this piece has gotten positive reviews though. Hopefully it inspires me, and if I can find my inspiration again, then I know you can. Maybe we can inspire each other haha Thank you as always Chloe, for reading and taking the time to think about my work.

[kublakhan27]

We as writers, always have to write dear, sometimes it comes spontaneously, other times, we feel stuck, and think nothing good will ever come out of our pen. To me this piece was about all together that made this write, so unique, your feelings, mingled with perfection, and also with the rush, that you feel inside you, to get something out of your pen. I love that you refer here to Mythology, and Eros. We should have such a love affair with our quill, to make the musing work. Brilliant piece brother, Much love xoxo :)

- Elisa

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much my dear sister, you've truly touched me with these words. It's as though you understand my state-of-mind better than I do myself ;P The frustrating thing for me at the moment is that I do have things (two to be exact) that I HAVE to write about, and they must be written within the next week. It's true that I am a perfectionist, and many have called me on that as well. Perhaps that is what slows my creative drive, and yet it's part of the very fabric of who I am, and it cannot be changed. But what you have said here has truly opened my eyes in a way that I can't explain. I'm just happy that you understand. So glad you enjoyed this piece sis, as always, I send my love and thanks :) xoxo

You're so welcome dear, ever. Know that I truly enjoy your work, and learn so much from it. There is nothing wrong with being a perfectionist, as long as it doesn't kill you. (myself, I know all about it, and try to balance it as much as I can)... but sometimes, esp. when you're having it as a profession, there is pressure, and need to write on time... and that's maybe one thing I never will a writing carreer myself, (how strange that may sound), for I find it not natural to do things with pressure and on purpose, for it kills the creativity. Anyhow, I do appreciate those immensely who can... like you, and for example Sarah on here :D

[s y e]

I really like the way you write Steveroo - You always tell a story with your words and imagery... it's great.

"Satisfaction and timidity
I thought I could
comingle to seduce
I won't make that mistake
again"

-- to me, this is the best stanza! I loved it. Well done.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Noodlebop, I'm happy and relieved that you can relate, for my fear has been that I've lost that element lately, and I fear that my recent work makes sense to nobody but myself. You've brought a smile to my face with your words here, and that's saying something :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Been away for a while, and I have to say that I have truly missed your writing. You are one of the few writers here who I feel a certain kinship with in terms of our choices in poetry. I love the connections that you have made here, and the way that you take a quietly brave stance with everything that you pen.

The ruins of the bed
in which I made nullified
love to my precious Psyche
are what they should be
studying

--Love this bit...really remarkable in so many ways.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, and you know those feelings are mutual. You are one writer who I truly look up to, and I consider you a great influence on my own work, probably more so than any other poet here. The words have not been easy to come by lately, it's been a real struggle, so it means a lot to earn and receive your praise and support. It's just a relief to know that a writer of your pedigree is on the same page as me (no pun intended). Thank you as always.

[costa siwale]

wow! this piece is a pure intriguer !
so philosophical! captivating! and darn right poetry!
fantastic stuff!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for kind words, they really mean a lot :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A writer insists on writing, whether his Muse is ready or not... "Take my work with a grain of proverbial salt, since without her, my words lack flavor..." This is what I hear in the background of this piece, K. I love your word choices here. I certainly do not see a lack of inspiration in this piece, though I understand the feeling of "forcing" a write.

[kublakhan27]

I have to say you nailed it with your assessment Rita...I'm not sure I could have put it any better myself. Well actually I didn't put it any better because your review makes such perfect sense to me haha So glad you were able to tap into this piece on a deep level, it gives me a little confidence boost :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think there was an interlude with the muse that is regretted..because she sucked him dry of words...

and his life became an oxymoron...he found himself fluently not writing...every thought disassembled...

in a vacuum of vengeance

and there seems to be a resentment towards those who are verbose...and he is warning them..get near me and you will lose your muse.

so much in here is conflict between silence and words being spoken or written...

the conflict works well in the poem.

i find when the muse leaves...i just patiently wait for her to come back...don't try to force it...i see that in this piece.

if it's forced, it doesn't work...and this piece does seem very natural...good that your inspiration came back.

i didn't write for two weeks...and three days ago came 8 pieces in a day and a half.

she comes back...or she leaves and is replaced by another...

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks for taking the time to explore this piece so thoroughly my friend. Your assessments are essentially spot-on, which I never anticipated just in light of the way the words came out. I wasn't sure how much meaning it would hold for anyone beyond myself. I'm glad to know that I was still able to speak to someone with this piece. Thank you Jacob.