A LOVE LETTER FROM A FAILED GENERATOR

A LOVE LETTER FROM A FAILED GENERATOR

A Poem by kublakhan27
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I.

Inside a meltdown
of aggrieved metaphors
we met and made the best
of icy memories

You were the apex
of a sullen candle wick's
heated umbrella
passing for protection
from the typhoon
of toxicity corroding
the artificial lights
I resorted to in search
of happiness

II.

Sickened by the cynicism
I could never conquer
without aid
the shrill wheeze
in my lungs stabbed
the air of my resigned
ignition like an acid
rain-rusted fork

Prongs of erosion
incinerated the dimensions
of my Great Pretender mask

I was open to the prospect
of a meltdown

III.

A power outage smirked
on the verge of threatening
my need for Winter white
to blind the pile-up of humid
months eroding my incentive
for an age's elevation

Then you came
puncturing the black aura
I was all too ready to adopt

I am already obligated to
the grey threshold 
it would appear
yet the parasol of your
embrace stifled my
corrosion of closure like
the blinders of a race horse

Simply through your place 
in my obstructed vision's show
you have won me
until I realize I'm out of candles
and the metaphors incline me
to reach around until I clutch
your heated cage of 
nightvision

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27


It took every ounce of my creative willpower to get this out. An abundance of things to say in recent weeks, but no words. Anyways I'll resist the urge to milk my self-pity any further.

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I wholeheartedly agree with Pax. I too experience this: whenever I read your words, I'm in a completely different world and sense things that can't be perceived in reality. Your poetry is very deep, beautiful, and uniquely crafted with a fine mastery of language. Bravo, once again!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So glad you could relate, thanks very much :)
Gleb Zavlanov

10 Years Ago

My pleasure.



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Candles needed in a generator, not really, my friend. Time to power up. This poem sure has some. Well done, Steve.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

The recharging period is long and laborious, but of course I must stick with it. Thank you Pryde, a.. read more
This is very good better than good
All your metaphors I would've never thought
of using the words you use to describe a blotched love affair
This seems to stay with you
I am really speechless this is wonderful writing
I also like the song and the singer

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Chloe, it means a lot to know that you were able to tap into this piece...I feared it.. read more
Chloe..Across the Universe

11 Years Ago

You are very welcome I can see the difference between the male and female outlook on such a break up.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Interesting...I never thought of it that way but it does make sense...many thanks again.
Bravo!! You wrote this, after admitting your muse had left you in recent days, and WOW, what a write it is!!

Your creative energy is zapping like a zillion kw all over the page!
Excellent metaphors - really, really good with the many references to rust, erosion, power, renewed energy!!!

A favorite!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

There are no words to express how grateful I am for these kind words, except to say they brought a s.. read more

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Added on November 20, 2013
Last Updated on November 23, 2013
Tags: depression, loneliness, darkness, artificial, cynicism, resignation, erosion, mask, meltdown, Winter, embrace, nightvision

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kublakhan27
kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review. www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..

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