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Beautiful and strong images here dear brother, your poetry itself is the spectrum, I love the title of your poem, also. (Strong).
You contradiction in your second stanza says a lot, it gives me the idea, you're not happy in the chosen moment ... perhaps consciously, perhaps unconsciously ... (sleepwalking).
You imagine yourself slowly deeper into your imagination and dream world,
I find the irony and awareness somehow very wonderful as you paint it here.
You give us a glimpse into your thought process. (very interesting).
I am curious about those nicknames though ;) ...
Wonderfully done! ((HUGS))
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm not even sure where to begin dear sis...as usual, you have a very firm grasp on what I'm trying .. read moreI'm not even sure where to begin dear sis...as usual, you have a very firm grasp on what I'm trying to say, and the mindset I was in when I was trying to say it. It is easier for me to choose the unhappy moments as there are so many more of those to choose from. My circumstances just don't allow me to be happy all the time, try as I may to fight off that reality. Sometimes the dream world doesn't even do it for me as I run into a lot of nightmares when I'm there. So that pretty much leaves me with my imagination, which can go either way depending on what kind of day I'm having.
The nicknames were my attempt to associate an emotion with each colour. It was kind of a take on Snow White's dwarfs, who were all names after their most obvious emotions haha
Thank you as always dear Eli, not just for reading but for supporting and understanding. You know it means the world. Wishing you a happy Sunday, or whatever day you happen to see this haha :) (((HUGS)))
It wouldn't be healthy dear, if we would only smile, :) I'm happy you are like you are. I totally un.. read moreIt wouldn't be healthy dear, if we would only smile, :) I'm happy you are like you are. I totally understand you... you're so clever, and visual. You're welcome it was a pleasure to read... (((HUGS))) x
11 Years Ago
You do understand me sis, more than either of our words can say. Your support keeps me going in my .. read moreYou do understand me sis, more than either of our words can say. Your support keeps me going in my darkest times :) (((love and hugs))) xo
11 Years Ago
As your words do me, love... take good care of yourself Bro... in my thoughts, through all times x
Steveroo, there is so much power in your words. I honestly loved this one.
"Having a nickname
means you've commanded
conscious acknowledgement
and got away with it
If you manipulate
cleverly enough
it will flourish to respect"
-- I did love this stanza, says so much. Your best yet, bud. :-)
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow...I know how that wow felt now when I told you how much I liked your last one ;P Well, it's as d.. read moreWow...I know how that wow felt now when I told you how much I liked your last one ;P Well, it's as deeply personal as I think I can get, so obviously it means everything to know it resonates with my friends. So glad you enjoyed it Noodlebop, thanks so much :)
I would rather circumvent
the tangible side of time
by lauding a known imposter
than by martyring my ears
to the sleepwalking kraken
of real-time silence
I'm a fool
It will be the same
forever
There is so much power in your words. You truly are a brilliant writer and your talent shines here!
:) Julie
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much my friend...I cannot articulate how much your kind words mean :)
Beautiful and strong images here dear brother, your poetry itself is the spectrum, I love the title of your poem, also. (Strong).
You contradiction in your second stanza says a lot, it gives me the idea, you're not happy in the chosen moment ... perhaps consciously, perhaps unconsciously ... (sleepwalking).
You imagine yourself slowly deeper into your imagination and dream world,
I find the irony and awareness somehow very wonderful as you paint it here.
You give us a glimpse into your thought process. (very interesting).
I am curious about those nicknames though ;) ...
Wonderfully done! ((HUGS))
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm not even sure where to begin dear sis...as usual, you have a very firm grasp on what I'm trying .. read moreI'm not even sure where to begin dear sis...as usual, you have a very firm grasp on what I'm trying to say, and the mindset I was in when I was trying to say it. It is easier for me to choose the unhappy moments as there are so many more of those to choose from. My circumstances just don't allow me to be happy all the time, try as I may to fight off that reality. Sometimes the dream world doesn't even do it for me as I run into a lot of nightmares when I'm there. So that pretty much leaves me with my imagination, which can go either way depending on what kind of day I'm having.
The nicknames were my attempt to associate an emotion with each colour. It was kind of a take on Snow White's dwarfs, who were all names after their most obvious emotions haha
Thank you as always dear Eli, not just for reading but for supporting and understanding. You know it means the world. Wishing you a happy Sunday, or whatever day you happen to see this haha :) (((HUGS)))
It wouldn't be healthy dear, if we would only smile, :) I'm happy you are like you are. I totally un.. read moreIt wouldn't be healthy dear, if we would only smile, :) I'm happy you are like you are. I totally understand you... you're so clever, and visual. You're welcome it was a pleasure to read... (((HUGS))) x
11 Years Ago
You do understand me sis, more than either of our words can say. Your support keeps me going in my .. read moreYou do understand me sis, more than either of our words can say. Your support keeps me going in my darkest times :) (((love and hugs))) xo
11 Years Ago
As your words do me, love... take good care of yourself Bro... in my thoughts, through all times x
Colors seperated or blended, straight lines or curved, in order or random, they come at us from every angle, every day and they all represent us and the shades we drawl on our thinking and mindset. To give them nicknames, in my mind, (a term of endearment) means the we have accepted these colors for what they are, tints of our lives, window dressings we've found lingering about our hearts and steam induced treasures that power or might. This is deep Steve and vibrant, even if it is written in black on white.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I could not have summed it up any more succinctly my friend. Thank you as always for the support.
pokes holes in my own"~ It only hinders your positive aura if you feed into the darkest colours of the spectrum...Giving them a nickname can help pinpoint their identity and find the weakness, for which you can combat the manipulation....that's when the "respect" takes place.
Intriguing write, my dear... as always, Well penned!~xoxo~
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow, you have truly opened my eyes with your thoughts here my dear; I'm not sure I've looked at the .. read moreWow, you have truly opened my eyes with your thoughts here my dear; I'm not sure I've looked at the situation in this light before. I was certainly trying to balance the light and the dark here, but I never realized how symbolic the nicknaming gesture really was. I've often been frustrated by the fact that many people seem to know me better than I know myself. I try to convince myself that I'm simply being enigmatic, but I fail to realize that there is no way I could be enigmatic writing the way that I do...it's too personal. I cannot articulate how much your understanding means to me. Thank you my sweet (((hugs))) :)
11 Years Ago
I often feel the same... there are multiple sides of our spectrum... (depending on which colours you.. read moreI often feel the same... there are multiple sides of our spectrum... (depending on which colours you choose to absorb)..it reflects our personality..that's what makes us colourful and unique.
This is a hell of a pondering, K. These "dwarves" are a part of you, and you are wise to cautiously acknowledge each one. The beginnings of respect, yes - but I am reminded of the story in Genesis, when Adam names the animals... you have dominion over that which you name - there is power in the naming. I am constantly impressed with your ability to hold up such an honest mirror, and share what you see.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
The older I get, and the more that I write, the more necessary it feels to me to hold that mirror up.. read moreThe older I get, and the more that I write, the more necessary it feels to me to hold that mirror up. Looking back at the last six months or so, I cannot recall another stretch of time in the past when my writing was so personal for such a sustained period of time. The Genesis story hadn't even crossed my mind when I was writing this, but that doesn't mean it wasn't lurking about in my subconscious, as the parallels are certainly there, I just needed someone to point it out to me haha Thank you Rita, as always, for your support :)
We are multilayered and multifaceted and so very complex. We truly encompass the spectrum. We cannot excise those less desirable gremlins but we do work hard on keeping them caged. Escape at times they do and we must deal with them the best we can and cage them once again. I am so enthralled by this stanza:
I would rather circumvent
the tangible side of time
by lauding a known imposter
than by martyring my ears
to the sleepwalking kraken
of real-time silence
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Well said my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed it; thank you for reading and relating.
Feeding those little devils on a regular basis only makes them stronger. I would nurture Optimistic, Organic and Passionate. Those three could push the others to the end of the line, Steve. Make it so they always trail behind. You know, I have been skirting this one for hours now. I have yet to give names to my own. If truth be told this one has my gut in knots! I best acknowledge the little effers and get em in line. Angi~
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
The funny thing about this piece is that I never hit upon the nickname analogy till after I wrote th.. read moreThe funny thing about this piece is that I never hit upon the nickname analogy till after I wrote those emotions down. That's how it started, with each colour being given an emotion that I associated it with, and of course, they had to apply to me as well. Some of them were positive, some negative. They must certainly be acknowledged my friend, they are a stubborn and ornery lot if they aren't. Optimism is the toughest one for me, but everything you've said is true...I have to master those positive ones or at least manipulate them and bend them to my will. But we'll live my friend...we survived yesterday, we're managing today, and we'll apply both of those qualities to tomorrow when it arrives. Thank you Angi, for reading and for understanding.
I would rather circumvent
the tangible side of time
by lauding a known imposter
than by martyring my ears
to the sleepwalking kraken
of real-time silence
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