TWO POETS AND THE RAIN (Collab with Melobldnfr)

09 28 13

A game implies a winner,

Which in turn implies an end.

Yet the players in this pulsing

Game of heart monopoly

Remain relentless in their quest

To win in perpetuity.

Tonight we take back the rule book.

Two poets and the rain

Will compose a requiem for hurt

And part our lips to emulate

The firmament's torrent of

A life story's tears.

Your head in my lap,

I run my fingers through your hair.

I want to take every tear

To be your ink and page.

I rummage through your pain.

Let it not make me sway.

I hurt with you, but take it,

Disengage it, and honorably stay.

My shoulders are big enough

To play upon your stage.

Let the crickets sing

Something akin to our names,

And try to not let the doors slam

With our windows from their panes.

A night like tonight, I encourage

You to exorcise your eyes

So eroded from the salt of

Drama's stinging weight.

Lay your notebook next to mine.

Out we'll run into the holy rivulets

Of the heavens.

When you smile we'll retreat

To the humanity of home,

Struck by a inkling to test

Each others' senses.

A night like tonight, I reach out.

You, who's felt more in my words,

Hear my whispered shouts.

Take my cup, make it yours.

I'll be your downpour

But not your fall.

 

Author's Note

Don't forget to visit Mel, she's a very soulful writer who doesn't get as much attention as she should. We had a lot of fun with this, it took about a week to put together. She picked the artwork as well :)

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Beautiful, and a stunning collab!! I love it all, but particularly the last -"I'll be your downpour, but not your fall". I am not familiar enough with either of you to know which part is yours, and which belongs to Mel but the two of you mesh in a fashion that makes it difficult to determine where the dividing line is -and that to me is a successful collab!

[kublakhan27]

We did work very hard at weaving and mixing our lines so that even those who knew us would not be able to distinguish who wrote which parts. I can tell you the last line is hers though :) So glad you enjoyed it, thank you Sheila from both of us :)

[Melobldnfr]

Thank you Sheila.

[SAYED THANGAL]

very attractive lines, your comparisons and images are highly qualitative and enjoyed them well
all the best, sayed thangal

[kublakhan27]

Thank you for the kind words Sayed, much appreciated.

[Kleio13]

you soulful sprout of wisdom and passion in one body of words. you continue to be one of my favorite wordless stones. This is a very well-written tale of pure love and intimacy that i can't even compare to.Although, i can relate to it.

I apologize for not being on here lately and that i have reviewed not sosoon. i am a very busy woman. haha


I'm still looking for compatible publishers and submitting unto magazines. But you, my frind, never fail. this is a lovely piece Kubby

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my dear, I'm glad you enjoyed it and were able to relate to it. That's okay about being busy...I haven't been on much lately either, though for different reasons. Nice to hear from you again, and remember what I said about publishing...keep at it ;)

[Kleio13]

I am. Thanx for the support Kubby. I'm performing poetry tonight

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure bud. Very cool that you're reading tonight...good luck if I haven't missed you haha If you did, I hope it was a good night :)

[Androglossia]

Wow, simply stunning. The word choice is so Mel but the arrangement is kublakhan27. I can really see two personalities here, or shall we call it style. And I can say that it worked perfectly well. I know that because I am very familiar with both your works. It's surprising to see a great collab from my two good friends :)

[kublakhan27]

That's pretty cool, as I'm not sure it's been read by many who actually know the both of us. Your assessment is pretty much spot-on :) We did a lot of weaving and mixing and matching, in the hopes of producing something that would be seamless enough to leave people guessing as to who said what. I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I know she'll be too. You should send her a note telling her you read it though in case she misses it here ;)

[Melobldnfr]

Maryanne, I am thrilled you've read and reviewed our piece! Thank you for this!

[Androglossia]

But how can I I 't let something as good as this pass? I had to let everyone know how impressive it is and of course, I need to showcase out friendship :D

[Androglossia]

can I let *

[Melobldnfr]

Just when I didn't think I could grin any wider! :-D

[Androglossia]

* _ ^

[B-poet]

An epic & marvelous masterpiece between the both of you. A seamlessly flawless work of written art by two uniquely talented poets. Great work again you two. A compelling read. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, we spent a long time rewriting and reworking this piece to a point where it flowed smoothly without making it obvious as to who wrote which parts :)

[Muse]

What a gorgeous collab! Passionate and full of poise. Every word demanding the readers attention:




A night like tonight, I encourage

You to exorcise your eyes

So eroded from the salt of

Drama's stinging weight.

Lay your notebook next to mine.

Out we'll run into the holy rivulets

Of the heavens.

Will there be another collab? Two talents create twice the intrigue. Bravo!

[kublakhan27]

We actually haven't talked about the possibility of an encore but I'm sure we will sometime. So glad you enjoyed our piece...thank you Muse :)

[Melobldnfr]

Yes, thank you so much. Super glad to see your review!

[Felicity's Eve]

You both definitely have writing chemistry! I'll be sure to check her out since I love this little preview of her work so much. I loved the aspect of partnership and harmony. To be there for each other hand help one another reach our goals in this endless game of life...

A well-deserved 100/100 :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Nora, that means a lot :) She is definitely worth checking out, and doesn't get near as much attention as she should. So glad you enjoyed this :)

[Melobldnfr]

Ya'll are too sweet. Thank you.

[Mizo4]

very nice & romantic imagery. beautifully written

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Marion^^

[Mizo4]

no problemo, have a good day

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was a gorgeous poem and you both did wonderful. xo Winter

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Winter^^