BETRAYAL ON THE ROCKS

BETRAYAL ON THE ROCKS

A Poem by kublakhan27
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This orgasm

begging to get out

of my system

will have to wait

till the final mouthful

of salvation

is eliminated from

the dream of

the final glass

that forebodes

emptiness

What comes first?

An imagination

drowned in loneliness

or a drunken

sleep of resignation

coated in the salivation

of a drool

limp and damp

clamming up a cheek

immune to comfort

sleeping off

the slavery of realism?

© 2013 kublakhan27


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HOLY, THIS IS WHAT LOVE IS. Seriously, this was just so....idk I feel like it just grabbed ahold of me and would not let go. I read this four times over. The imagery I got from this was amazing, the emotions so provocative and astonishing. The whole meaning I got out of this was just...Complete awe right now. I read it and found two different perspectives in it, I love each one I had. The beginning really dragged me in haha "This orgasm" wow packed that punch! 5 stars, thumbs up, pat on the back, bravo my friend!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Wow, you have left me humbled and speechless my friend. There are no words to express how tickled I.. read more
quixotic_rose

11 Years Ago

I'm glad my words at least give a positive impact. When I really enjoy a writing I try to let the wr.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha Well your spazzing has made my day ;)



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sleeping off
the slavery of realism...

Damn. We go along with this delusion that we are in control. Even our precious creativity, our very ego, must bow to the limits of reality. Power in your words, K.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Very true...and that delusion becomes a burden after a while...thank you Rita, for reading and under.. read more
"the slavery of realism" wow..to that line..i bow!
this is so frustrating...all that we want to do, all that we want to get out of our system...achieve..

but the dream is stifled to resignation..the orgasm will only get close...but it will never happen.

wonderful write. that hopelessness, that resignation...the dream that commits suicide. or is choked to death by circumstance beyond our control.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend, you've really tapped into the spirit of this piece, and your kind words al.. read more
You write with an intensity that comes full force, my dear Steve!

I felt the demise, the drowning of your loneliness... you captured the isolation and drew me in...
to peer into the darkest corners of your mind.

"the slavery of realism"~ Such a powerful ending!

Amazing write!~xoxo~

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much my sweet friend :) You really tapped into the essence of this piece...loneliness i.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

11 Years Ago

It's always a pleasure to read your work of art.. and I get your melancholy emotions... it's powerfu.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

(((hugs))) :)

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Added on September 10, 2013
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Tags: loneliness, depression, resignation, imagination, salvation, emptiness

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kublakhan27
kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review. www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..

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