BETRAYAL ON THE ROCKS

BETRAYAL ON THE ROCKS

A Poem by kublakhan27
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This orgasm

begging to get out

of my system

will have to wait

till the final mouthful

of salvation

is eliminated from

the dream of

the final glass

that forebodes

emptiness

What comes first?

An imagination

drowned in loneliness

or a drunken

sleep of resignation

coated in the salivation

of a drool

limp and damp

clamming up a cheek

immune to comfort

sleeping off

the slavery of realism?

© 2013 kublakhan27


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HOLY, THIS IS WHAT LOVE IS. Seriously, this was just so....idk I feel like it just grabbed ahold of me and would not let go. I read this four times over. The imagery I got from this was amazing, the emotions so provocative and astonishing. The whole meaning I got out of this was just...Complete awe right now. I read it and found two different perspectives in it, I love each one I had. The beginning really dragged me in haha "This orgasm" wow packed that punch! 5 stars, thumbs up, pat on the back, bravo my friend!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Wow, you have left me humbled and speechless my friend. There are no words to express how tickled I.. read more
quixotic_rose

11 Years Ago

I'm glad my words at least give a positive impact. When I really enjoy a writing I try to let the wr.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha Well your spazzing has made my day ;)



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Damn damn damn, . It's like that "im only happy when it rains" song by Garbage.
i lovehow you just speak it and nothing else in this poem. i love your Metafisica.
This is another treat piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha that's true, it probably would have been a good clip to add here...I actually wrote this poem i.. read more
Very compelling emotional write, here Mr. K. -- you captured the feelings, emotions one has while
trying to escape the mundane dismal reality one deals with at times, very eloquently, with your
brilliant use of your knowledge (aye, i'm redundant!) of language. maybe i'm wrong? but i read this and i think of two contradicting emotions going on, happy in illusioning oneself due to the alcohol,
*escapism*
but only to then crash down at the end when one realizes that the drink has only helped them for a moment, enter reality again. anyhow...great rhythm and fluidity and well as concept, one
(myself included) can relate to. excellent write (as usual) -- thanks for sharing! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ms. barrie

11 Years Ago

Best to you'd too, Steve!
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Sounds good Miss Barrie :) xo
ms. barrie

11 Years Ago

Xo :)) ten characters
I can relate to this 99%...all but the orgasm bit...mine wait for no man! Least of all...the boozes xD Just kidding, Steve...I sincerely feel the emotion in this, and you know how I feel about your ink...you are a true poet, sir, and I enjoyed this, rather bittersweetly, quite a lot. Thanks for sharing it with us. xoxo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Hahaha I'll go as long as it takes my dear, as stated in previous pieces ;) Really though, I'm glad .. read more
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

;-) My absolute pleasure...xoxo
I feel that impact of the emotions here. I get a picture of someone drinking in order to self medicate and forget about their troubles rather than deal with them, something I can relate to. Good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Alcohol is certainly a factor here...I think it's a case of turning to it for release, only to be le.. read more
The impotence of depression, robs from the body, mind and soul. Brave write,

Posted 11 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

That sums it up pretty well...glad you enjoyed it, thank you Plum.
So down you don't want to feel up again. A very emotional and deep write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you Pryde, it's an emotional write for sure so I'm glad you were able to tap into that.
Nobody likes being lonely, Steve -- It damn well sucks but your poem does not (imagine me saying that in a British Accent ) This was an amazing write, very well written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

s y e

11 Years Ago

Bahaha, try Scottish then.... Or Irish. Preferably Scottish 'cause I am Scottish. LOL. And hey, you .. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

LOL Well my surname originated in Scotland, so there's a bit of a parallel in our roots ;P Thanks ag.. read more
s y e

11 Years Ago

Ooooo funky! I don't know it though. .....
Lovely stuff man, I like how you really kept up a pace with this piece, it felt like forward moving action in the way it's written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks man, I put a lot of stock into pace when I'm writing something...glad to know it came through.. read more
Loneliness is a natural human emotion and it affects many of us from time to time, but you wrap your abstruse pen around it like Salvador Dali would paint the emotion, genius in your own complexities Steve, already told how I felt about this one, but I'll say it again-very cool, you're brilliant....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Wow, me and Dali...you certainly know how to humble me Mrs.R...seriously, my face is hot ;P It's a v.. read more
Why is it that so many creative people suffer this way? There has to be something in the genes, Steve. When I am feeling depressed and lonely and resigned, sleep is a very real thing (escape) I feel it start at the top of my head and weigh me down until I am barely upright. I totally feel the drool, mister. Angi~

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Very little of the great art through the centuries has been produced in a good mood...it probably ha.. read more

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Added on September 10, 2013
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Tags: loneliness, depression, resignation, imagination, salvation, emptiness

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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