ONE LINE

08 21 13

A symphony of sighs
is the first line that came to me
followed by one page of
murdered gibberish
followed by a second page of
murdered gibberish
followed by a third page
invading an ill-fated fourth page
with the puncture
of a page-encompassing black X
So it's back to the symphony of sighs
hushing galleries of cries
like a falling tree in an
uninhabited forest
How does one go about
wanting to make sense
and not wanting any part of the senses
at the same time?

Author's Note

A rubbish day deserves a rubbish write I guess...captcha: overseer, if that means anything

Reviews

[Kenaz]

Haha, I searched through your poems trying to find ones that I could understand fully. Your vocabulary is astounding, which I suppose is to be expected given your education. This poem is no exception to the other wonderful pieces you have written. I laugh at the beginning because this piece reminds me of how I feel when I write an academic paper. My ideas start so strong and then dissipate. Then I continue to murder the original idea with unoriginal, meaningless blather. Good writing my friend...

[kublakhan27]

I can relate to that for sure. Even though this was a fairly spur-of-the-moment piece written in the frustration of writer's block, I know just where you're coming from in terms of writing papers. Perhaps a bit of that was lurking in my subconscious when I wrote it. Many thanks for the kind words, they are much appreciated.

[Bowers]

This was great, a very intriguing piece, I found that I was entranced with your words, a great write!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Bowers, so glad this one spoke to you :)

[Sheila Kline]

There are those days when we seem to have the ideas, the desire to put it into form and yet no matter how hard we try, those thoughts remain scattered and don't end up being a completed piece. Yet, there is always another day for them to emerge again and break free of the ties that bind them.
I can find the tombstone for your murdered gibberish in a cemetery of good intentions.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the wonderful review Sheila...your last line should be in a poem :) So glad you enjoyed it, and understood where I'm coming from.

[FlamingPhoenix]

"How does one go about
Wanting to make sense
And not wanting any part of the senses
At the same time?"
I rather enjoyed these lines and I find the question worth my reflection. So I shall reflect upon it for awhile.

[kublakhan27]

I suppose it's just a case of a writer straining for different ways of looking at things when the traditional sources of inspiration let him down...having said that, I hope there is still room for interpretation and reflections in those lines...so glad you enjoyed it my friend, thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

Not quite sure where this is coming from, perhaps a scathing review of work or writing? Nevertheless, it is successful in its sarcasm.:)

[kublakhan27]

This, my friend, is what I sound like with writer's block :)

[redflutterby]

I have about a dozen poems and three story ideas that ended up like this. Ughh..but what can you do? Either it happens or it doesn't..just set aside and move on to something else. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha My thoughts exactly, thank you Red ;)

[Kleio13]

racing thoughts, cannabalistic to metaphors and creases in time yetsimultaneously hating and loving life.
I likethis Kubby

[kublakhan27]

Glad you liked it my friend...among my recent stuff, this is the best representation of my currents state of mind.

[Kleio13]

Definitely more than One Line, hun :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha very true, but I was stuck on that one line for a very long time ;)

[Corset]

This pretty much happens with everything i write :P But ...what can you do but try?

[kublakhan27]

Oh it happens almost everyday with me, I was just in a bad enough mood that day to broadcast it haha

[Corset]

lol, I hear ya :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha... :)

[Corset]

I thought it was even better the second time around :P

[kublakhan27]

Haha thanks my friend...I thought I was getting things off my chest with this piece but it's only starting to gain its full meaning for me :P

[Corset]

"A symphony of sighs" is the kind of line ships are sailed with, it's a grand line worthy of 4 page effort, you could have just wrote the one line, it's a poem all by itself.

[kublakhan27]

In a sense, that really was the only line I wrote that day :P Thank you Corset :)

[Corset]

my pleasure for sure :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

well done, my friend!
Straight to the point!!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Kejara, glad you liked it :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

so many times i've written pages and pages and pages of garbage to find maybe two lines somewhere that i like. as you've so kindly told me though, if you're writing anything at all it is most definitely worth scavenging through the trash. i think the repetition of 'murdered gibberish' really works here. to give that ad nauseum feeling of routine and frustration.

this piece felt very free to me and i like that. emotions most definitely felt.

[kublakhan27]

Well, this just may be the rawest piece I've ever written which is saying something after fifteen years of writing haha I was just having one of those down days and I really wanted to capture it in the heat of the moment, but I've always been a reflective writer and have never been good at heat-of-the-moment writing...but it does speak to that philosophy I have, and even though I thought of this (and still do) as self-indulgent drivel, I've been pleasantly surprised by the number of good reviews it has gotten, so it just goes to show how wrong we can be about our own work at times, something I've told you about many times ;) It's hardly a poem I would rank high on my most technically-sound list, but it seems it was still good enough to be reviewed positively...I'm glad you were able to tap into the emotion of it, but I'm not surprised by that haha Thanks again Dana :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

sometimes it's best to just let your pen take over for a while. many poets tend to be more reflective than in the moment just as you described, but you've captured something raw here. and although you may think it to be self-indulgent, it is powerful. never a problem :)

[kublakhan27]

It happens once in a while for me but rarely...I really struggle with opening lines...if I come with something I think I can start with, the poem will generally take shape from there, but I spend an explicable amount of time just staring at a blank page, I mean hours, waiting for that first line...it's probably creepy to watch me write sometimes haha I'm either gawking at a blank page or doing the things I described in this piece...my last resort is to just start scribbling my name down ad nauseum...I've probably killed a few trees doing just that haha

[Dana Alsamsam]

i mean i barely ever write the first lines of a poem first...i start anywhere and sometimes everything comes out backwards and i rearrange it. it's really interesting to hear how different people go about their writing process, but if you watched me write it's usually a frenzy of scribbling haha! my notebook is far from elegant and organized.

[kublakhan27]

I think the only way my mind knows how to work is linear...I can only do one poem at a time, and I have to know what line I'm starting with...I still raid old notebooks and merge old stuff with new stuff sometimes, but once I settle on a beginning it rarely gets altered...I think our notebooks may have a lot in common though haha I'm always writing little things in margins and between lines and sometimes I can barely read my own writing cuz it's so small :P