SWALLOWED STANZAS (V-VI)

Parts I-IV included below. 07 15 13 - 08 14 13

V.

Ice cream headache of humidity ensues
A metropolis of flavours soil my tongue with backward blues
for my cream is in my inkwell and my ice is in my pen
I would rather eat the summer green than grow an oxymoron glen

VI.

Freeze-frame my incendiary tendencies
if you will.  Think of them as literary tapestries
helpless in their waterproof array of consequential thirst
Paper in my presence can be burned or can be good as cursed

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I.

Brimstone sentiments accrue between my ears
Infernos of intent evaporate the frazzled tears
I was collecting for a pool of solace in which I could dip
my flaming head when hot environments unlocked my frozen lip

II.

Sometimes I think my stomach imitates a salt mine
when I swallow the prescribed advice on which I daily dine
Nightly I receive the water from the serpent glass I swear
is filled by no one but replenished by sin vapors hiding in my air

III.

Lip balm loopholes agree with my unworthy fingers
on the manner in which solemn moods impale lipstick bringers
but with nothing keen to paint with, bluntness is my only hope
though the words are always sharper than the shiniest erection scope

IV.

Incense shivers up its spiny stairway to the air
circulates a coat of cloud and hits the highway of my hair
I can rip a wafting route into a rash of tributaries
and apply a sigh of smog to each commute and breathe obituaries

Reviews

[quixotic_rose]

SERIOUSLY, ARE YOU SERIOUS! REALLY! It's just the ultimately unique way you word things that makes them all the more inherently awesome. I can't take it anymore, you are just one hell of a writer and the awesomeness you bestow upon me in your readings is just too much to digest. I just want to take your words and eat them. no matter how creepy that may sound to you or anyone else. They are just so divine. the way you just take a phrase and turn it to your wish is just so amazing. Honestly, I wish I could write like you.

[kublakhan27]

Haha I love what you said about eating my words, that brought a smile to my face. I think you also made me blush a bit with your praise here :) I am humbled beyond description by your support and your kind words. It took me many years to get where I'm at now, and still I am insecure upon completing every piece I write. I never know how relate-able they will be. But you've set my mind at ease considerably, and left me speechless really :) This is one of the coolest reviews I've ever gotten. Thank you so much :)

[quixotic_rose]

well. I speak the truth, those years were very worth it

[Pax]

I'm speechless.... totally!

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks my friend...always nice to know I can have that effect :)

[Pax]

you do my friend... your talented... and your most welcome!

[Traci]

"Ice cream headache of humidity ensues
A metropolis of flavours soil my tongue with backward blues
for my cream is in my inkwell and my ice is in my pen
I would rather eat the summer green than grow an oxymoron glen"

The more I read of you the more I become truly impressed with your talent to weave together such a beautiful series of thoughts and emotions that resonate with readers. So much of you is portrayed in this personal write. Well done my friend.

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind words dear friend...I've said it before, but it's only the support and friendship of those here that make such works possible...you personally are an inspiration, you replace my insecurity with comfort, my loneliness with love, and from that comes poetry, which I'd never imagine being as well-received as it has been here...thank you Traci :)

[noone]

Amazing word choice. I like your use of stanzas. You really manage to describe a scene and idea in each different stanza. You also have good word flow. There's an easy cadence to the stanzas. It makes them sound classically poetic.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Sammi, your kind words mean a lot :) I do try to give each part its own identity...at some point I may sit down and alter the order but for now I just add to it when the notion hits.

[Kleio13]

This is f*****g wicked and a serious wordplay of emotions. Similar to my poetry, and i feel all of yur mixed feelings, certainties and insecurities, sexual innuendos, sexual frustration, lack of sleep, i see that a huge play, always awake and deep inside the mind over and over again. Daunting of whatever trauma, yet not scared to use words that have power. You have found your element and planet earth is faded.
i f*****g love this poem

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Kleio...there is definitely a lot of me in this poem, with each verse depicting the state of mind I was in when it was written...this is a running project and I revisit it once a season...it's nice (and kinda scary in a way) to go through them and compare them...but yes, all those things you referred to are here in full force...so glad that I was able to get such an enthusiastic review from you, and I agree, it does have a bit of your style in it...many thanks again.

[Kleio13]

hahaha my pleasure Kubby

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Your tapestry is a uniquely woven ensemble of intriguing metaphors...each thread symbolizes your colorful thoughts...
I enjoy standing back and absorbing the beauty of each stanza, it's an abstract masterpiece within itself...

"Ice cream headache of humidity ensues
A metropolis of flavours soil my tongue with backward blues
for my cream is in my inkwell and my ice is in my pen
I would rather eat the summer green than grow an oxymoron glen"~ THIS Is my favorite stanza, very gratifying to read... I love it.

Astounding!!!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

My dear Robbie, you never fail to bring a smile to my face and inspire me with you reviews...it's humbling and an honour to be able to inspire you in turn with my words...people seem to like the ice cream stanza, I suppose it lends itself well to the summer spirit, something I'm not good at conveying usually ;P Love and thanks to you as always my dear...I can't wait to get back to your library and absorb myself in your exotic world...your words bring a smile to my face too, a big smile ;) xoxo :)

[Pete Langley]

It`s interesting you tell Rita you revisit this periodically...almost as if you want to re-inspect your introspection to see if it is still valid for you....the grains of salty guilt are palpable and you continually give yourself a hard time, Steve!....despite all this self-flagellation, your whole poem demands to be read and reread, with so many lines memorable. P.

[kublakhan27]

It's become an interesting endeavour for sure, and the longer I work on it, the more personal it gets, to the extent that it may be one of my most personal works to date...I'm truly humbled that you and the others have taken such a liking to it...as always, your support is huge and means the world..thank you my friend :)

[s y e]

This is great, Steve - I loved the rhyme in your stanzas, it adds to the rhythm of this piece, and the imagery is magnificent. :)

"Lip balm loopholes agree with my unworthy fingers
on the manner in which solemn moods impale lipstick bringers
but with nothing keen to paint with, bluntness is my only hope
though the words are always sharper than the shiniest erection scope"

Loved this stanza, well done.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, I'm glad you liked it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so hard to pick a favorite...but i really relate to number one...

you make rhyming agreeable...

my sentiments accrue between my ears...even when i think there is really nothing there at all.

you have such a talent...it shines with every piece you write.

i am in awe of your words, my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Jacob for the kind words, I don't do rhyme too often, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

(I should mention too that I haven't forgotten about your work...things have been hectic these days but I'll back to read more soon)