TOMORROW MAYBE FOR THE MOON

08 11 13

The powder blue of morning
was somewhat uplifting

The caloric sun made marvelous
use of the clouds'
incompatible design and
hurled at the flimsy white
patchwork its essence of
illumined effervescence

And the dawn came down
like a comb on the frizz
of the wind-tickled brook
spreading Lilliputan shambles of
fluorescent marbles
like dandruff flakes shaken
off the shoulders of the sun

More uplifting was
the blue July's selling out
to evening cloud cover
regrouped and not to be
outdone or outshone
by the tambourine moon man's
after-hours entertainment

Little time was spared in
the clamping of empowered fluff
onto the betrayed scenery below

Somewhere up there was Apollo
choking on a rust tint
retching on the hapless scenery
smarting yet from the blue betrayal

And an orange stress ball
was hurled over a disgusted shoulder
for an aimless stroll around
the sky's newly-minted mattress

Let the moon man march
to his own nocturnal beat
like his telescopic throng of stalkers
Let them just forget about
today until tomorrow when
the sun regroups and may be
seeking out a rhythm for
a taking of the blue

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

An almost surrealistic portrayal! I glean from this you are saying we are but specks in the universe. We can never do or create what the moon, the sun, the stars create on a daily basis. We are impotent compared to the magnificence of their accomplishments. I think you can juggle adjectives better than most and the imagery they create is incredible. I could almost see people following the moon across the universe....doing his bidding. The sun is bright and shining and people think all light originates with the sun, but you are pointing out the moon has his own brand of light. You pack so much into every one of your poems. I feel I could study one of them for months and not garner all you meant to say. Excellent work, Kubla. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

You humble with your kind words my friend, and have brought a smile to my face in the process. It means so much to have someone dial into my words with this kind of depth and understanding. You've truly captured the essence of the piece in your review, thank you so much :)

[quixotic_rose]

I found this one pretty interesting, it's like you just paint a really awesome scene with your words. I took them literally, because sometimes I just have a hard time searching for the deeper meanings, but on that note! Just wanted to say that I found the ending very hilarious and this piece amusing. Thanks again for being awesome :)

[kublakhan27]

This one is actually pretty straightforward, just a scene I observed from my window. I've lost count of the number of poems that have come to me while looking out that window haha I'm glad I was able to amuse you with my words. Thanks bud :)

[PANTHER811]

Your mind does range a myriad of images through a kaleidoscope of thoughts and place upon the paper true poetic inspiration. Weather the weather be miracle or science you have made it art. Tom

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it, many thanks :)

[EMMIE]

Well, wow! Your imagery here is out of this world...you painted a master piece, go head, Picasso! Lol, so much meaning within those images. Great work!

[kublakhan27]

Emmie, long time no see :) So glad you liked this piece...it was not without its frustrations haha Many thanks :)

[dw817]

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This is - unusual - in that you are saying the simplest of miracles here on Earth far outweigh the scientific achievements of man. At least - that is what I am reading into this.

And - perhaps you are right. We call things miracles quite simply because we - as a human species - are incapable of reproducing or in many cases even fathoming what it is that has taken place.

Some of the greatest miracles do in fact come in very small amounts. Clearly - it will take us a lifetime and then some to discover them all ... :)

[kublakhan27]

I have an obsession with weather and the changing of the seasons in particular...there is miracle enough in those phenomena for me...I do believe the true miracles are the ones that happen right under our noses...thanks for reading my friend :)

[dw817]

Well the biggest miracle of weather I can think of is SNOW and SNOWFLAKES. To me (next to Teddy Bears and Tinkerbell of course) they are indeed the most magical thing in all the world. :7

[kublakhan27]

Winter just happens to be my favourite season...I never go too long without writing something winter-related...stay tuned long enough and another one will surface ;P

[dw817]

I have a bit of a wait. When it's Summer here in the states, it lingers, and - it's uncomfortable. Winter never lasts long enough for me ...

[kublakhan27]

Oh you've never seen any of my earlier stuff my friend...it's no coincidence that my angstiest work (I don't think that's a word but I'll pretend it is haha) comes from the summer months...bad things tend to happen to me in the summer...

[dw817]

I tend to stay insides. The medication I'm on - and a few other conditions - make me very sensitive to sunlight.

[kublakhan27]

I get you...I think we have a few things in common.

[dw817]

Oh ? Are you sensitive to sunlight too ?

[kublakhan27]

Yes but it's related to my mood which could be traced back to my meds but I'm not sure...I know I get easily agitated when it's hot out to the point that I hate going out in it...then I get depressed if it rains too much so, welcome to my head haha

[dw817]

I'm always fond of rain. The negative ions rainstorms produce always put people in a better state of mind.

[kublakhan27]

I like a soft rain, well I guess I don't mind heavy rain either if it doesn't last long...but rain and wind are not a good combination for me...

[dw817]

Without wind, the rain will be caught, like a fly in amber, floating in the sky, serving no purpose other than to remind us - we all need the wind. :)

[MOON]

I love his mix bag of emotions penned in your unique lovely style your last stanza a poem on its own. Designing the cover of your book, well done Dear Friend! Take care all the best!

[kublakhan27]

Thank so much my friend, I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, and thank you for the congrats on the book...I've got work to do before it becomes a finished article but it's exciting...you take care as well,and all the best to you :)

[Kleio13]

Lovethe vocab, senses, similes, and metaphors
Great imagination

[kublakhan27]

Glad you liked it, thank you Kleio :)

[MoriartyMesa]

And when did you channel Mr. Sinatra or the 'Chairman' as I call him?

[kublakhan27]

I have friends who like him so I was quite possibly influenced by him through them :P

[Robbie~xoxo~]

For me the moon has it's own nocturnal beat, unlike Time ticking away into another wasted day...
this is a new kind of blue (My optimistic point of view sees this as "hopeful and recharging") waiting for tomorrow...

"Let the moon man march
to his own nocturnal beat
like his telescopic throng of stalkers
Let them just forget about
today until tomorrow when
the sun regroups and may be
seeking out a rhythm for
a taking of the blue"

~ I enjoyed the kaleidoscope of thoughts in which you have painted in my mind...
Well penned, sweet poet!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you darling, I'm glad I was able to evoke a kaleidoscope in your mind :) Writing this piece was such a frustrating ordeal that I don't even know if I can convey its intentions in colloquial language...the moon is a lonely thing to me...I think most people view it as a hindrance to the light rather than seeking out the light in it...the night is a source of fear to many, but the moon is a source of security for me...were my social anxieties not so ominous, perhaps I would enjoy the sun more, as most people do, but only at night do I feel safe...I don't even know how to explain it any better, hopefully I'm making a bit of sense here ;P Thank you again my sweet for your kind words and you inspiration :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I truly understand... I too find comfort under the veil of the moonlight... to me it's a magical thing, especially during a full moon... I'm so enchanted by the light, just as much as my first love, the Sun. :)
You know I adore your kaleidoscope of colors... every prism reflects a brilliant piece of your mind.
It may have been frustrating for you to finish this piec, but you pulled it off Sweetie! I'm impressed!~xoxo~:)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

*piece*~typo

[kublakhan27]

Thanks love, I need every bit of encouragement I can get these days...Love and hugs to you :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I'm always in your corner Steve...I want nothing more than to see you flourish in your writing, my dearest...(((hugs)))~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

I know my friend, and trust me, I never lose sight of that...your support brings a smile to my face and confidence to my heart...it means everything...thank you Robbie (((hugs))) :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

There's a reason why you have a loyal following... your work conveys your heart and soul... no matter how cryptic it is, we get the essence of you, your charm, and humble approach (so adorable)...~xoxo~ :)

[kublakhan27]

My following is not really as widespread as many others here, and that really gets me down, I'm not gonna lie, but thankfully I have you to keep things in perspective, and be thankful for the people I do reach out to, as opposed to lamenting the ones I don't, and feeling ashamed and selfish for that in the process...I only hope I can continue to write things that inspire you as you do me :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You do inspire me, and you will continue to inspire others... you have to believe in yourself and not waste time on doubts... I fully believe the ones that see your work know you are well worth following....and that, my friend will be noticed! ;)

[kublakhan27]

I agree wholeheartedly love...I am guilty at times of not being appreciative enough of what I have...if I were more honest with myself, I'd learn to be more grateful and let my friends know more often how much they mean to me...who knows if I'd even be writing without the support of you and Eli and the rest of my small but incredibly supportive group of friends...you understand me on a level that few others do, and it's often the one and only thing that keeps me going ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

well, you better keep writing, Mister!... I will await your next masterpiece, my dear friend!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

This one will be a tough act to follow but I'll do my best ;) xoxo :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

oh please!...you know you're just getting started. ;)

~xoxo~ :D

[Ravyne Hawke]

I really love this.. I think it's perhaps the best piece of yours to date. Your imagery is outstanding.

And the dawn came down
like a comb on the frizz
of the wind-tickled brook

Let the moon man march
to his own nocturnal beat
like his telescopic throng of stalkers

Those are two of my favorite images. Such amazing work! Definitely a new favorite!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Lori, you have made my night with this review :) I felt pretty good about this one but I had no idea it would rank among my best...I'm so glad you liked it as much as you do...I should also mention that I've been planning to read more of your work and will do so very soon, things have just been a little hectic away from the site lately and I'm waiting for things to settle down a bit :P

[Ravyne Hawke]

When you post something, you never know how people will react to it.. I am glad this one is getting positive feedback.. No worries about getting to my work hun.. when time and circumstance allows, your words will be appreciated. Oh.. just something I realized.. Tommorow is misspelled. It should be Tomorrow =)

[kublakhan27]

Oh geez, how did I miss that all this time haha Thanks for the heads-up...it will be taken care of promptly ;)