UNFAIR GROUNDS

06 18 13

I. What If I Wish

What if I wish
not to sleep
What if I endeavour
not to invest
in the optimism of
the digital finality of
midnight pills and
cloudy glasses
What if I pretend
to live numberless
and pulverize
integer conformity
What if I could
What then
if I did

What a joke

II. To Forget Midnight

I write
to forget midnight

(New Year's Eve
Are you listening?)

Keep the stars
Screw the mysteries
and theories that
impale the firmament
like a junkie dart
in a dead callus

III. For Cotton Candy?

What if cotton candy
penetrated self-inflicted
metaphors of malaise
with a lemon-shaded
downpour of sucrose
instead of ashen
thunderclouds evaporating
like amusement park
con artists

Keep the embryonic
morning quilt of clouds
seasoned with the
cross-breed insinuation
of swiss cheese and
cotton candy

New Year's Eve
Are you listening?

IV. What A Joke, or 12:01

I write
to get on with
the next day at a time

Author's Note

Captcha: overfear

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

A lot to ponder here, amazing. What if the numbers on that clock had no meaning, and time did not dictate our existence... if everything that looked sweet actually was... if one day at a time didn't need to be one minute at a time.

Some thoughts your words have given me - I don't know if these were the intended concepts, but that's what is so great about poetry. I am impressed with this!

[kublakhan27]

There were many things swirling around in my head when I wrote this one, none of them good unfortunately but I felt a little better after I got it off my chest...time is certainly a huge player here and your ideas certainly line up with some of the sentiments I was trying to get across...I guess the predominant theme was the monotony of everyday life and how we are indeed slaves to the clock, be it consciously or not...it's a pretty personal piece so I'm really glad you liked it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i seem to write to stave off morning...midnight comes and goes and there i am at the computer banging away at the keys..

i like that idea, what if i wish not to sleep...how coincidental you should post this tonight...

i have had a restless night, and haven't slept for more than an hour...tossing and turning...only this night it is not the muse keeping me awake...just thoughts of things i would like to push aside.

damn midnight, damn three in the morning, damn five o'clock in the morning, damn me...


i usually write to get on with the next day...but maybe not tonight.

ah, we all relate in our own ways...

this is a really good piece of poetry...cotton candy ideas...sugar high...worry high...awake awake awake.

jacob

[kublakhan27]

I know exactly what you mean my friend...after two days of labouring over this one, I absolutely had to get it out on the third night/morning, and I finally got it done at around 2am...by the time it was finished, I was too tired and tormented to even sleep...I was also motivated by things that I wish I could wish away, yet they are all too real...being such a personal piece, I wasn't sure if anyone would relate to it, so it means a lot to me to know that you did in your own way...again, I thank you.

[Traci]

Your words never cease to amaze me my friend, as Sarah said this piece is brilliant. It is quite unlike previous work of yours, and leaves me with many ponderings. Definitely a favorite, and you should be very proud of this!! 100/100

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Traci, for reading, absorbing, and ultimately enjoying this one...it was three days in the making, and not without its frustrations, but it comes from the deepest depths of my heart at a turbulent time, and just knowing that it is a favourite of yours is enough to instill a sense of personal pride in it...thank you so much :)

[Traci]

It was my pleasure. This poem really struck a chord with me and I could tell it came from the deepest depths of your heart. It is during turbulent times that our hearts bleed so honestly. Three days well spent on such a beautiful piece, that I am still in awe over this morning. Love you my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much my friend...you have my love as well.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is an engaging piece!.... and for me that's a hefty statement, because it's almost 2am and I can barely keep my eyes open! lol
Your writing has given me a momentary jolt. I feel your need to pour the ink, so you can give your mind the rest it deserves... so much going on with the "cross-breed insinuation of swiss cheese and cotton candy", WOW! ~working overtime, no doubt!... Sweet dreams and good night~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

Robbie, thank you for taking the time and feigning sleep to read and comment on this piece :) It is exactly 4am here and my mind is reeling in the wake of the sentiments you have read about here...I should have been sleeping a long time ago but I'm in the midst of some circumstances that are not conducive to sleep...that's where this piece came from...I'm sure you've already signed off but I say good night and wish you the sweetest of dreams just the same...hopefully you've found a comfortable corner in dreamland by now :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I did find a comfortable corner in dreamland... and you really gave my mind a work out....as always... ;)
Clever write!

[kublakhan27]

;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

;D

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This was absolutely brilliant, my friend. Wow...maybe it is because my clock is approaching midnight and I have been working on the same three poems on and off for the last two hours and can make nothing of the words, or maybe it is because I know that I won't be sleeping more than an hour or two tonight...whatever the reason, I was drawn to this like a drunken moth to a flame. I'm not going to go into a long, technical diatribe about why this is fantastic...it just is. A favorite, my friend!

[kublakhan27]

These are difficult days my dear friend, and I know just how you feel, struggling to put the words together at a late hour...if your creative process is like mine, you get to a point when you refuse to give into sleep until you get the muse to co-operate, and sometimes that stubbornness wins out, but there are other times when sleep refuses to take a back seat to the muse, and you just hope you can get back to the checkpoint you made it to the night before when you wake up...this is something I've been working on for the last three nights, culminating in a heap of despondent scribblings that finally got fused together at around 2am...my current state-of-mind is rather turbulent due to various circumstances, and I'm sure this piece sounds like that, but I can at least go to sleep knowing that this piece spoke to you in such a resonant way...you are often the first person to offer a review to my works, and that means a lot...I've said it before, but I'm rarely confident in a freshly-finished piece, especially something like this...your input has a way of setting my mind at ease...the fact that you consider it "brilliant" is just the kicker really...we both know you'll get your poems together tonight or tomorrow or sometime in the not-too-distant future...you're too talented to settle for anything less...again, thank you Sarah :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

"...your input has a way of setting my mind at ease" - yes, she's good at that, isn't she? You and Sarah could be a new line of lumametics in sea-glass bottles. I think they'd fly off the shelves.

[kublakhan27]

Haha I don't know but I'm sure she'd outsell me on a book shelf :P

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Haha I just saw this right now...made my day. :) You guys crack me up.