VELVETEEN MACHINATIONS?

06 11 13

Are the goosebumps
an authorization
of velveteen machinations?

Sweat envelops you
into its litmus sarong
threading you with more chic
than Le Freak set on repeat

Are the goosebumps
a chilled phalanx of resentment
beneath the A/C rendered
unattended in my new
pantheon of spontaneity?

Seduction is an insult
to my imagination
and my imagination
makes a mockery
of my intentions

Make the demand
for a skinnydip
in the hot oil springs
of July humidity
and I will gladly offer you my nudity
like sandpaper for your bristle

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack...]

My friend, this bleeds before my eyes. Seduction is an insult to my imagination. well, left out in the cold there is no telling where the imagination is bound go...slip sliding down to that oil based hot tub perhaps.
Now, Le Freak on repeat may be ging just a bit too far I think...oh the thought...I think my mind might explode sending my imagination to an old shut down disco on the east side.

Still I get this and it hits home...on that empty street where doorbells have been outlawed and that's not a knock on anyone.

Very cool my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well it took a while to dislodge my tongue from my cheek after writing this one. This came from a part of my psyche that is not easily accessed, which is unfortunate because it appears to be the part that people most like to visit, myself included. Hedonism was safe in the disco era, but must be handled with the utmost care within my imagination. Glad you enjoyed this one my friend.

[Paige H]

This is just a really interesting poem. All I could think about while reading it was; wow. I really wish I could write poems like that. This piece was really biting and I quite enjoyed that aspect of it.

[kublakhan27]

I make that wish very often myself when I read the work of others, including many of the writers here...I'm glad you liked this one, thank you Paige :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The wordplay in this piece is outstanding...I'm completely jealous right now! Such a strong, effective and powerful write that provoked so much thought and emotion. I love the way that you can take a reader on a journey--sometimes into the darkness and sometimes into the light; you are a chameleon, my friend! One of my favorites of yours!

[kublakhan27]

Wow, what can I say...you humble me with your kind words my friend...trust me, there is no need to feel jealous, as I feel the same way when I read your work :) Truth be told, I didn't have a whole lot of confidence in this piece, but when a writer of your caliber singles it out as a favourite, I feel so much better...thank you Sarah :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Honestly, I would never have believed that a poem could come from such a novel concept. If I have it by the short hairs then this is surely about an addiction for confliction. I am forced to see these goosebumps marching in parade ground formation, illumined from the sidelight and magnified by a simple glass-loop dropping of heady sarong sweat. The fourth stanza surely supports this thesis: seductive intentions are just place holders for an imagination that is insulting itself because of what it imagines. Wow! That's like turning a stomach inside out to see if it's done digesting. And that last stanza... well, that's just off the wall - and at that point I imagined the tone arm on the platter scratching to center by an unseen force. Keep this up and we're going to need new methods of mental calibration and instrumentation to compare these monopole poeto-magnetic memes, Khan old man.

[kublakhan27]

Your reviews have always had a way of encouraging and entertaining me (in a good way haha) at once, and this is one of my favourite Ufo reviews for sure...funny thing is, my mind does not respond well to conflict...I'm even prone to panic attacks when there's an argument going on near me that I'm not even involved in :P You've really tapped into the soul of this piece and articulated it better than I could ever have...many thanks my friend.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Perhaps your poem, this cloaked expose, provides some insight into this situation? Keep in mind that I am not talking about an addiction to conflict but rather an addiction to being in a conflicted state; these are two entirely different things.

[kublakhan27]

Very true...that's my current state-of-mind talking, the very one you refer to actually haha It's like I'm genetically programmed to put myself into these states, though I may not want to admit or acknowledge that reality. I suppose my writing is the manifestation of that denial :P

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

So, is it a pain/pleasure or fight/flight addiction? It could be that you're simply programmed to avoid zombies. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I AM a zombie :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Well, there ya go... one part o yer brain es try'n to avoid ta other! O_o

[kublakhan27]

Haha Or trying not to eat it ;P

[Frieda P]

This sounds too sarcastic to be you, you're confusing me with this new found personality of yours Benji! I love each verse better than the last...skinny dipping in your conspiracy sounds like a plan.

Seduction is an insult
to my imagination
and my imagination
makes a mockery
of my intentions

You spin my head, in an unrelenting whirlpool of thought, your the master of disguise when it comes to emotions my dear. Exceptionally brilliant. Favorites...

[kublakhan27]

I'm not sure if it's a new found personality as much as an identity crisis...I wasn't joking when I said my mood has been all over the place lately ;P

I haven't been overly happy with my recent stuff but needless to say, your praise consoles me and makes me feel a million times better than I did when I hit the Post button on this one...thank you as always for your understanding Mrs. R...shall we book a time for the hot spring?