VELVETEEN MACHINATIONS?

06 11 13

Are the goosebumps
an authorization
of velveteen machinations?

Sweat envelops you
into its litmus sarong
threading you with more chic
than Le Freak set on repeat

Are the goosebumps
a chilled phalanx of resentment
beneath the A/C rendered
unattended in my new
pantheon of spontaneity?

Seduction is an insult
to my imagination
and my imagination
makes a mockery
of my intentions

Make the demand
for a skinnydip
in the hot oil springs
of July humidity
and I will gladly offer you my nudity
like sandpaper for your bristle

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack...]

My friend, this bleeds before my eyes. Seduction is an insult to my imagination. well, left out in the cold there is no telling where the imagination is bound go...slip sliding down to that oil based hot tub perhaps.
Now, Le Freak on repeat may be ging just a bit too far I think...oh the thought...I think my mind might explode sending my imagination to an old shut down disco on the east side.

Still I get this and it hits home...on that empty street where doorbells have been outlawed and that's not a knock on anyone.

Very cool my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well it took a while to dislodge my tongue from my cheek after writing this one. This came from a part of my psyche that is not easily accessed, which is unfortunate because it appears to be the part that people most like to visit, myself included. Hedonism was safe in the disco era, but must be handled with the utmost care within my imagination. Glad you enjoyed this one my friend.

[writing mojo]

more to this than carbon to skip cylindrical patterns on with an ebb groove needled by seismographic pops of this earth shaking inspired piece..excellent

[kublakhan27]

It must be a hell of a poem if there's still more to it after all those events haha...I'm being facetious of course, but you know I appreciate the kind words as always, many thanks Mojo.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Well I'm seduced! lol
You have a way with words my friend..yes you do!
On here, you have schooled the pragmatic...taking an artistic approach to chillaxing with some classic vinyl tunes...
The last two stanzas have me on my toes... I'm thinking YES! ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha well as you know, music is a great tool of seduction ;) Always glad to keep you on your toes love...glad you enjoyed this one :) xox

[Traci]

Steve this is definitely one of your best. Well penned, my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Traci, it means a great deal to me to hear that from you...I was kind of indifferent about this one for a long time but it's starting to grow on me in light of the positive response it has gotten ;)

[Traci]

You are your own worst critic, we all are. I very seldom like anything I write, lol. The thing I enjoy the most about your writing, Steve, is the variation. You have the ability to take your readers on a journey, from start to finish, and do it so beautifully through your imagery. I not only read, but feel, the vast array of emotions you portray in each heartfelt piece. So please never under estimate your ability to touch lives through your words. You have a God given gift, pen on!

[kublakhan27]

We are indeed our worst critics, and it's true that I rarely if ever like anything I've written until I am uplifted by such words as the ones you have offered me here...it's like I need the approval of others before I can actually like my stuff, you know what I mean? ;) But your review here really made me smile, and I will even keep a copy of it to look at when my confidence is lacking :)

[Traci]

I'm glad I could make you smile :) I do know what you mean, I am the same way. I lack confidence when it comes to writing as well as other aspects of my life. Oftentimes I even have someone read before I post, just so if it's bad, only 1 person sees it, lol.

[kublakhan27]

Well you know you have a fan in me :) I know how it feels to have low self-esteem...it's haunted me my entire life, but thankfully I have found a small group of friends here who make me happy simply by reading me and offering support such as that which you've offered here...sometimes I get lonely, but not when I'm here :)

[Traci]

You will always have a friend and fan in me :) I'm happy this is your safe place, where you feel less lonely and loved by many.

[kublakhan27]

I do love all your well spelled contradictions my friend, they always are "it seems" in fight lol...
For that makes this so brilliant, as a piece of poetry. Your questioning is fantastic. The music is fantastic... at 3.24, I can hear why Biggie Smalls. was inspired ;-) with Hypnotize... :) " Seduction is an insult to my imagination and my imagination makes a mockery of my intentions" Yes! true! Always be as clever as you are, and stay out of all the mean/gossips/turmoil, as you really know better. (you don't have to be a sensitive person for that, just a wise one". :) xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Yes this one took a little longer than ten seconds to compose ;) I seem to be asking a lot of questions lately...I just hope I'm not overdoing it haha Then again, the questions I'm asking here aren't quite as heavy as the ones I'm asking in subsequent writings ;P I actually have the 45 of that song so I did catch on to the Biggie connection after a few spins ;) I do my absolute best to stay clear of drama as much as I can...actually I'm not exaggerating when I say my mental state depends on that...the sensitivity issue might be a tougher one to shake off but I'll do my best to counter it with as much wisdom as I can ;) Thanks Eli :) xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Actually I forgot I have a 12" copy of that song as well, an extended mix haha ;)

Sorry for not replying earlier, my internet connection doesn't love me tonight LOL... It's wonderful to see you as variate as you are in each and every writing you come up with, for I do love variety as you know. And I think this one is worth the effort. I know your questions are varietive too, for as they would be all on the same level, it definitely get's boring. I'm lame tonight, I know... ha! I just woke up at 3.24 lol, my absolute ears failed me. LOL. I'm proud of your not-exaggerating personality, for as far as I can concern, it's one of the wisest. Thanks to you Steve. :) xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Haha not a problem...my connection has a way of misbehaving at unforeseen times as well ;P It's such a difficult task trying to balance varied styles with a signature voice, probably the toughest task I face when I'm writing, and it's probably how a musician feels as well, to continue the musical parallels ;) You are never lame my dear, trust me...your insights upon waking up at 3:24 dwarf mine any day haha Thank you for humbling me with your kind words Eli, I can't stress that enough :) xoxo

Our connections are such bad-asses!!! that being said, HAHA lol, you're so psychedellic, for I love that. :D lol xo thanks for the humor my friend, and the wise struggeling as we all live... for that's why i put a final quote in my "about me" hahaha

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure being able to make you laugh :D xo

The feelings are mutual my dear! xo

[kublakhan27]

:) xo

I still can't get enough of that song lol...... it is a stay-er :P

[MOON]

Love your turn of phrase and the music complements the mood ha!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always Moon, glad you liked both :)

[B-poet]

A entertaining and lucid write. The last stanza displayed a skill all poets should possess. Dare to challenge the imagination of your reader. You did that beautifully. A fine write and read. Great work. :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks B :)

[Pete Langley]

Hahaha. This is as confused and contradictory a response to a sexual fantasy as I`ve read in a long time, Steve....and I love it! Why, I don`t know, but it reminds me of that old Aussie joke about the farmhand who hits town after six months in the Outback, walks into the empty bar, downs three Fosters, then asks the barmaid "Hey Sheila, d`you f..k?" and she replies "Well not normally, Bruce...but as you`re such a sweet talking b*****d....." Well done, mate. P.

[kublakhan27]

Haha thanks so much Pete...that joke brought a smile to my face :)

[KeelyJane]

Im not sure if its intended but the emotion in this is heavy but hard to distinguish whether or not its passion, love, shame, resentment....maybe a combination of many? Either way you open the mind to ponder on this one. Its very thought provoking and your word selection is brilliant. Thank you for sharing and being such a poetic inspiration.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Keely...things have been kind of topsy-turvy with me lately and it definitely came out in this piece...I think this can go in any number of those directions...I'm glad you like it, and thank you as always for the support :)

[s y e]

Such a strong, effective and powerful write that brought out so much emotion and though! I loved the way that you can always take the reader on a journey, and it's like your write is a movie playing on my screen. (: It was great, bud!

~ Noodle.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, it feels good knowing I can take a reader on that kind of journey...I'm glad you like it :)

[s y e]

Pleasure.