TASTE

09 ?? 01

Cinnamon and sugar
taste better on my tongue
than cinnamon alone

Cinnamon alone
tastes bitter on my tongue
like the sullen morning news
in my grease-jammed ears

or earth in the mouth
of a soldier dispatched by fire
to the trench

...I wonder what my words taste like

Author's Note

Oldie time again...I just thought of this as a few random images scribbled down but my school's writer-in-residence loved it and told me not to change it, so I must have done something right haha

Reviews

[Angi]

I am sometimes terrible at reviews. This may be one of those times. I really get what you are saying here, sometimes the bitter things need to be taken with something sweet so they can be digested. Doesn't ever happen that way, though. Grease jammed ears! Oh yes. As for wondering what my words taste like?....hmmm. I'll leave the savoring up to someone else. Angi~

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's okay, my reviewing skills are awful for the most part...you're as close to spot-on as one get to reading the inner workings of my mind on this one...thank you Angi.

[Zahra]

Interesting, well penned piece. Thanks for sharing

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :)

[Melobldnfr]

Fabulous! Xo. Utterly fabulous! First the observation. Then the observation births the quandary. "I wonder what my words taste like?" Love it to the max! Well done!

[kublakhan27]

So glad to know you liked it so much...thanks M :) xo

[Muse]

Some things including people can leave a bad taste in one's mouth. I liked how you played on the reader's senses. I think we can all relate.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Cobra, I'm glad you could relate to this one.

[s y e]

Sorry for the late review on your writes, exams have me busy. :( One more to go and I am a free girl again, haha! :P

Anyhoo, on to your amazing write, this was yummy, hehe. Very tasty. I love how you got to the point straight away, I love your work and I'm your number fan, lol! :P

[kublakhan27]

Haha No trouble at all...congrats on being a free girl soon :) As always, you humble me with your praise...I'm probably blushing right now haha I actually wish I could get back to being this concise, I've kinda lost that in recent months :P But I'm happy that the current stuff reaches out to you as well...thank you Sye :)

[s y e]

Awwww!!! That's so cute and made me giggle, hehehe. Cannot wait, going out for dinner tomorrow so something to get me through the last hurdle, haha.

It does, your writes are great!!

[kublakhan27]

I'm glad I can make you smile, or giggle haha ;P Enjoy the leap over that last hurdle :))

[s y e]

I don't mind my last exam, German. :-) Love that subject.

Haha, well you did :-P

[kublakhan27]

Right on, I never studied the language but I did take German literature ;P

[s y e]

I love it!!!!

[kublakhan27]

Sweet :)

[s y e]

Ja ;-P

[kublakhan27]

;)

[Pete Langley]

I think philosophically you`ve coined a truism, Steve. Raw experience has a raw taste and needs a coat of something sweet to digest. Great stuff. P.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Pete, that sums it up better than I could have done haha

[KeeD]

Your words are the sweet sting of a honey bee or the refreshing taste of lemon ice tea. All in all your words have a place in the pallet of my mind.. every time i'm hungry your words I shall come find.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, your support always makes my day :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting! I love the imagery here, and the way that you created a totally sensory experience. Cinnamon and sugar...it is funny how two things together can be great, but one thing alone can be overwhelming.

Honestly, though, the last line is my favorite..."I wonder what my words taste like"--incredible idea. To me, your words taste like the perfect combination of cinnamon and sugar, neither bitter nor too sweet. Well done!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for a great review Sarah :) In the last few years I feel like I've gotten away from concise moments like this one...maybe going back to this one will inspire me to get back to that haha

[Pax]

love cinnamon ~ our words always triggers the imagination of the readers....
well done my friend...

[kublakhan27]

I love cinnamon as well, but only with sugar or apples or something sweet haha Thank you my friend :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Hmmm.... I think your writer-in-residence was taken with the "taste" of your words. I believe it's hard for most people to connect a word with the sense of taste; especially ones that are not flavors from their usual menu. The connectives are reasonable though somewhat elusive. I've wanted to try this too; as an experiment of course. For example, what would you say if I said that this poem has a sense of Southwestern seasoning; a churro? At least that's the way it starts but then I'm teleported to somewhere in Jersey or perhaps Hogwarts where I get a taste of Earwax flavored jelly babies and then step into Dr. Who's Tardis for a trip to WW-I and the French country cuisine taste of cold mud-blood-rain soup. We need to work on contrast and presentation. They say it's best to consider the dish and then match the color of the service for best contrast. For this piece, I'd go with a simple white. Perhaps square or other line geometry; not circular. There's nothing smooth and relaxing going on here. Then either chop sticks or 3-tine silver; not stainless. This is definitely not stainless. I'm stumped though by what to serve beyond the chilled ice water. To contrast the dour mood perhaps something from a happy gamay grape? Yes, that might go well with the trench water soup.

My friend, you are (and by default, your work is) a marvelous provocateur of my silly penchant for odd verbosity and interpretive fantasies. Thank you! :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha well I'm always glad to know I can kickstart one's imagination...that's still what writing is supposed to do right? I'm light years away from school now and slow to acquire updates on such matters :P There's a great deal of poetry in your so-called silliness...thanks my friend :)