My sense of fellowship periphery is artificial as a scene of plot to spread a porno's options. Some movie to pass for nothing but a rope to knot my wishful thinking into realist aloneness. How I wish my online friends were here to nullify to quiet gist of television soiled with sad ends. My God, what would I do without reviews of adulation from your eyes and hands; an alchemy of heart to tie the bruise of isolation up in golden strands?
Alas, the midnight lamp may still construe a dream's reprieve from days of missing you.
LOL Well, here is your first review...may your evening be filled with love and light my friend. I quite liked this, because it was honest and didn't take itself too seriously. What would we all do without our "readers"; those people who find what we do beautiful, and thus in turn find us beautiful as well? It is a question...I'm not sure if there is an answer.
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11 Years Ago
Haha and I thank you for being the first to visit and read it :) In the spirit of a Shakespearean so.. read moreHaha and I thank you for being the first to visit and read it :) In the spirit of a Shakespearean sonnet, the first eight lines present one sceanrio and can or cannot be light-hearted, but the next four offer an upturn or downturn in mood, and in this case, it was the latter...the last two sum up the overall mindset of the reader, and by the time I got to those last two lines, I was quite sad...but just like the poem said, your well wishes make it all worthwhile, though I'm constantly pondering the question you've presented, and likewise have no answer...thank you Sarah for your in-depth observations, and again, for your kind words :)
i was just listening to this album yesterday..awesome music. your poetry speaks as loudly and with as much clarity as jimi's guitar. khan is one of the finest weavers of metaphor i have ever read...this is superb!
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11 Years Ago
It's my favourite Jimi song...it's the one song in his catalogue that I can listen to without being .. read moreIt's my favourite Jimi song...it's the one song in his catalogue that I can listen to without being under the influence of something...it doesn't speak volumes to me, it's more like white noise...thank you Quin^^
wow ~ honest and sincere in poetic isolation ~ I learned from my time in wc that i am not alone in my thoughts here not only i got t explore my creativity and life's weariness ~ i got friends like you that supports each other ~ my friend i hear yah loud and clear ~ the way you use words is always a mind blowing experience, just to clean the rusty brain of mine :D ~ excellent work!
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11 Years Ago
Thank you my friend for reading and understanding...you have a way of tapping into my words on the d.. read moreThank you my friend for reading and understanding...you have a way of tapping into my words on the deepest level, and just like the poem says, I don't know what I'd do, or if I'd even be writing, without that support...I'm glad you enjoyed and understood this one :D
we need to get that feedback...otherwise we are poets in complete isolation with our own thoughts bouncing off the walls of our mind..
quite a good piece here...i feel it.
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11 Years Ago
There's a very distinct possibility that I may have packed it in a long time ago if not for the supp.. read moreThere's a very distinct possibility that I may have packed it in a long time ago if not for the support I've received here at WC...it's the first time I've met people that show a true interest in what I have to say...this sonnet was a way of thanking you all for that, and offering a reminder of what I might be without it, which wouldn't be much...thank you Jacob :)
Holy smokes Benji, love this new blood & guts, take no prisoners approach you put forth with this one. I see your soft underbelly, just saying. ;-)
I could actually hear your voice speaking to me on this page...no going back now, you've crossed over, if you know what I mean? Bravo! x
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11 Years Ago
Haha congratulations on finding that soft underbelly Mrs.R ;P There are two distinct states of mind .. read moreHaha congratulations on finding that soft underbelly Mrs.R ;P There are two distinct states of mind at work in this piece, and the fact that you could hear my voice in it means a great deal to me, the world to be exact...no, there is indeed no turning back from such sentiments, and of course I know what you mean, cuz I always know what you mean ;D Thank you Frieda :)
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Ha it's a concern that we do...I knew it was coming anyway so not much of a surprise, I just didn't .. read moreHa it's a concern that we do...I knew it was coming anyway so not much of a surprise, I just didn't expect to catch you with your pants down! ;-P
(: Well, here I am to review also, yeah, sometimes there's this underlying feeling of asking your online friends to join you here but we can't sadly... Anyways I like the poem (:
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11 Years Ago
:) Yes, it is indeed a dream of sorts...it's all part of online interaction, especially when in the .. read more:) Yes, it is indeed a dream of sorts...it's all part of online interaction, especially when in the company of friends...I was pretty sad when I wrote this piece but the response it has received has certainly provided a much-needed pick-me-up...thank you Rhianne, I'm glad you liked this piece :)
I hear ya, isolation does strange things to the brain. Sometimes even the small amount the five seconds in here of human contact and acceptance can help someone not feel so out of touch with the world, that's why I like this site, it's got a bunch a kublas in it that need someone to talk to. "People who need people are the best people" lol
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11 Years Ago
I couldn't agree more with all of your sentiments, you've presented them perfectly :) My WC friends .. read moreI couldn't agree more with all of your sentiments, you've presented them perfectly :) My WC friends are my link to a happier world than the one I'm usually stuck in...we are indeed all in this together, and knowing you were able to derive that feeling from this piece makes me happy :)
I loved this honest write, it was amazingly well written as always! :) as always an amazing write from you, you never fail to amaze us all with your wonderful talent.
Love it, great job
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Thank you so much Noodle...I know I say it all the time but your support is a chief motivator in enc.. read moreThank you so much Noodle...I know I say it all the time but your support is a chief motivator in encouraging me to keep writing...without it, I may have packed it in a long time ago...I'm glad you enjoyed this, and I thank you :)
LOL Well, here is your first review...may your evening be filled with love and light my friend. I quite liked this, because it was honest and didn't take itself too seriously. What would we all do without our "readers"; those people who find what we do beautiful, and thus in turn find us beautiful as well? It is a question...I'm not sure if there is an answer.
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Haha and I thank you for being the first to visit and read it :) In the spirit of a Shakespearean so.. read moreHaha and I thank you for being the first to visit and read it :) In the spirit of a Shakespearean sonnet, the first eight lines present one sceanrio and can or cannot be light-hearted, but the next four offer an upturn or downturn in mood, and in this case, it was the latter...the last two sum up the overall mindset of the reader, and by the time I got to those last two lines, I was quite sad...but just like the poem said, your well wishes make it all worthwhile, though I'm constantly pondering the question you've presented, and likewise have no answer...thank you Sarah for your in-depth observations, and again, for your kind words :)
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
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