OUT OF THEIR INEVITABLE MISERY

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They are a firm fraternity
The remnants of the last storm
lingering like facsimiles of fossils
in a last stand against the irascible
bullets of frozen rain
and their grey pimples of abrasion
They are no match for
the crusty rock meringue I imagine
being whipped up by the plow of
the snowbound Philomelos and
blanketing the once-exquisite
drifts of despondent Demeter
like a dutiful but misguided son
They are mini-ramparts scoffing
at Spring's impatient innuendos
of 7:30 sunsets
I am happy to be human for a change
and illiterate as any other animal
against the implied though
inexplicitly declared dialect of
warring seasons
It would be an exercise in hurt
to inform these stolid hills
they can meet the challenge of
departing Winter's insistence
on joining them under the divine
intimation of hibernation
before it's too late
for behind the rain
the golden veins of Helios
prepare to feed the flex of
heat's pectorals
and will come to mock the
frozen rain's failed bravado
with its syringes of Spring rays
They are no match for the Sun
and for once I'm happy to be human
illiterate as every other animal
against the unspoken though
obvious dialect of
warring seasons

Author's Note

Sorry everyone, I had no intention of laying any more Greek myths on you for a while, but by the time I finished this, there they were, with no intention of having them there when I started...and I REALLY hope I got it all right cuz I don't wanna have to retool this whole thing...

Philomelos is the son of Demeter (di-ME-ter) and their family is recognized as the bringers of harvest...Philomelos is also considered the inventor of the "plough" though I tweaked it a bit to infer a "snow plow." One of his half-siblings was Persephone, whose abduction by (and forced marriage with) Hades led to a pact that is too long for me to willingly explain...in a nutshell, there was some sort of deal struck that allowed for Demeter to spend a few months of every year with her daughter. When Demeter is with her daughter, she's happy, signifying the Spring harvest...when she's not with her daughter, she's pissed off, signifying the annual replacement of the harvest with Winter.

Captcha: overturn
As for Helios, Apollo is widely recognized as the god of Sun, though it's also been said that Helios rides the chariot of sunrise under his supervision.

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

I have no other words regarding this exquisitely written poem
That your gifted pen has given birth to ink drops
of gorgeous landscapes that takes one a way, simply breath taking!

I'm in love with the stunning mythological references of imagery you
Portrayed in this poem...Very profound, this is one of my favorite s
On here, Mr. K. -- fantastic job! 100/100. -- thank you for sharing! :)

~ Barrie Joy

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much Miss Barrie. I thought this piece might surprise you in light of your recent poem, but I never expected it to resonate so deeply with you ;) This is the first time I've actually looked at this piece in a while, and I am pretty proud of it, but I find myself wondering where this particular voice went cuz a lot of my stuff doesn't sound like this anymore and I wish it did. But I'm always wishing for things I don't have anyway haha Again, I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for humbling me so much with your kind words :)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Steve...Yes I love fantasy whether dark or light, but am enjoying the darkness
I feel truths convey and I have always been fascinated with superstitions, folklore, etc.

[ms. barrie]

Argh, site lagged hit space bar, though it was really the post comment.
So (edit: I feel darkness conveys to me, personal opinion.) Either way, this is a
Most enjoyable read, Steve, I thank you for sharing this gem!

Yes I wish I could write on automatic like I use to instead of over thinking
Everything, now. Time to visit my b.f. Mr Thesaurus, and enjoy some wine, light some
Candles.

Looking forward to reading your and others writes when I can, Mr. K.

Take care and pen on! :)

[kublakhan27]

I know how you feel. I find myself gravitating more to the dark side as of late, more so than usual. I think it's my nature to over-think things, which is why my writing comes out cryptic or abstract a lot of the time. But that's just my voice ;) The site has been acting up on me today as well, it's really lagging...you never when the site is going to do this :P Thank you again dear friend :)

[ms. barrie]

It's my nature too, over thinking things...yep, my earlier writings were of children's
Fantasy whatever poems. Well, follow your voice, write what's in your heart :)

Ha this site always lags, clearing cookies helps, somewhat.

Thank you as well, my friend & and you're very welcome, Mr. K
Enjoy your night/ day, dear friend! :))

[Corset]

Such an intelligent and complex write, and I enjoyed the comments just as much as the poem, so articulate and original, awesome work :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Corset, I'm glad to hear to like it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Mythology is a great study and this is a good poem(: actually a better one.
It's great that you have a knack of writing this and that unintentional pop of idea (:
Great job, (:

[kublakhan27]

:) Thank you for the kind words Rhianne...I'm glad you like it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome and I never tire of liking such a great story (:

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Rhianne Ney]

(:

[Rhianne Ney]

I mean poem, sorry my brain got caught up with wires

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's okay, I understood...my brain is susceptible to wires on a regular basis as well, literally :P

[Rhianne Ney]

Yeah (:

[AYVID N]

So true...you very well brought out the fact that we humans are so small, so insignificant in the larger scheme of things...

"and for once I'm happy to be human
illiterate as every other animal" - Yes ignorance is bliss and sometimes happiness means leaving the perplexities of nature to higher powers...

Some stunning imagery had me sit up..."warring seasons" for one! Also the golden veins of Helios. Wow!

Also loved the following lines...
"It would be an exercise in hurt
to inform these stolid hills
they can meet the challenge of
departing Winter's insistence" - Just awesome!

A great thought and it made for a lovely read. Thanks!

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind words...thank you Divya for reading and understanding, it means the world to me :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This was a lesson and a poem in one...reminds me of my days in school, when learning was beauty personified. I found this very beautiful and complex at the same time. The flow was great, the tempo was sound and the feeling was very intense. I am a little enamoured by this to tell you the truth.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much, I'm glad it resonated so deeply :)

[Androglossia]

This stately signifies your indulgence of the changing of season only that this is written in a big fat greek letters:) You know I'm not a Greek myth enthusiast so I just wanna mention that you have really established a writing style and if read your poem anywhere else even without your name on it, I am going to know it's the great Steve Fortune:D

[kublakhan27]

Haha a very good description, I like it ;) I never start writing with the intention of throwing in the mythology and what-not, but occasionally a story will come to mind as I'm writing, then the poem feels hollow without a reference to it haha Thank you Maryanne for sufficiently humbling me as always :D

[Androglossia]

Oh you know you are always welcome..

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Androglossia]

wink*

[B-poet]

Interesting take on enjoying the benefits of being human as the season's are forever changing each and everyday as the world turns. Great write. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend :)

[Brookluv]

speechless. Just speechless. :-]

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much :)

[Brookluv]

your welcome! please write more

[kublakhan27]

You bet :)

[quinfinn]

brave helios, wake up your steeds, bring the warmth the countryside needs (from the moody blues "days of future passed" album). every time you wax mythological i am drawn to it like a moth to flame. i love mythology. especially the greek interpretations. this is gorgeous and engaging prose, khan. i never tire of your art. outstanding write!

[kublakhan27]

Oh wow, I totally forgot about that album...it may have been lurking in my subconscious somewhere :P I'm always happy to hear that you relate to my words my friend...thank you as always for the support, and for humbling me on a regular basis^^

[quinfinn]

always an immense and enlightening pleasure

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I think you are on to something with the mythology add-ins, it gives your work another interesting texture and interface. Neat lines to me were:

1. with its syringes of Spring rays
They are no match for the Sun

2. like a dutiful but misguided son

I find one of the strongest things about you as a poet is your choice of vocab, which is always very fresh and of a higher order than most poets. (stale vocab ruins most poetic output)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, your compliments mean a lot :)