A COMMON REFRAIN

09 13 97

When we're young
we run and shout
knowing what it's all about

When we're old
we reminisce
longing for the days we miss

Meeting the demands of others
Preachers, fathers, teachers, mothers
Constant pleas to clean the mess
Wanting more when you have less

Suddenly you're just a number
Outlook bleak and future glummer
Hoping that your luck will change
Hoping change is within range

We go away to find ourselves
or maybe stay and fill the shelves
with fragments of a broken past
The future's here, let's have a blast

And as we grow we live and learn
We wonder if we will return
to days when now was all we had
When being good meant being bad

Now we're old
and more mature?
Choices and mistakes galore

Were they what
we hoped they'd be?
We'll just have to wait and see

Author's Note

An extremely rare piece of youthful idealism from a point in time when I was already cynical as hell...I pulled this out yesterday after MANY years of not looking at it, and I laughed...

Captcha: creepie

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Wow, I didn't know you back when you still made sense! I knew without you saying, this couldn't have been recent, not cynical enough and I could understand it without reading it 12 times! Excellent write from whoever you were back then.... ;-)

Love that song by the way....wonder why eh?

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah I guess life made more sense to me than I did to myself...not much has changed ;P That song was embedded into my DNA at a young age and I probably had it in mind when I wrote it...whoever that person was, he thanks you for liking it, and had a pretty good inkling that you would ;)

[MOON]

Straightforward write, different when we young we yearn to be older then we are and suddenly everything changes . Lovely write.

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah it's funny to go back and find out what you sounded like when you were younger...embarrassing sometimes but funny...thank you Moon^^

[Pax]

precise and truthful...
our physical appearance may age... but there is one beat in our heart that stays young...
an excellent write my friend!

[kublakhan27]

Very true my friend...I'm glad you like it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

I never thought of growing up actually if possible I would like to stay as a child for a long time but we can't do that, right?

[kublakhan27]

I think we can...growing up is overrated ;)

[Rhianne Ney]

lolz, I hope so too

[KAOlmsted]

*blink blink* What?? Oh, okay, yeah...I see the date now ;-)

This is good. It's interesting to see how you've evolved as a poet. I lost a great deal of my older work when our boat sank up in Alaska (long story, don't even ask *laugh*) but I sincerely don't think any of it was nearly as good as this, so no great loss...I like the much more jaded and cynical you, if anyone is keeping score ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes, and that is why I put every date right up there with the title...I'm just thankful now that I did date everything I wrote when I was younger cuz it's an integral part of understanding me, not only to myself but to those that can be bothered to endure my literary bellyaching ;) I'm sorry to hear that you lost so much work though...I have also lost a couple of notebooks and it drives me nuts cuz I know precisely what was in those book but cannot recall them well enough to reproduce them x_x But yes, it seems the more cynical I get, the more acclaim my writing gets...obviously cynicism is my comfort zone in a backwards kind of way ;) Thank you as always my friend for taking the time to scrutinize me with the depth that you do :)

[KAOlmsted]

Your depths are fathomless...I'm getting the bends xD Always my pleasure, Steve...I am having a secret affair with your work. Don't tell anyone ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Oh, I like the sound of that :) Your secret is safe with me my dear ;)

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[Pete Langley]

This digs at the root, Kube. The meaning of life - not so pure and not so simple. I think this is a superb philosophical muse perfectly poeticised. P.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend...seems like I was much more philosophical when I was younger, now I'm just "whatever" haha

[Robbie~xoxo~]

awww I love the song!...it compliments this piece perfectly...
You are on point with this...a melancholy tone settles in my thoughts thinking about the past, present, and future..
Time continues and slips away... que sera, sera....

Well penned!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Robbie :) The song is one of my favourites and I think I had it in mind when I wrote this many moons ago...I guess I was setting the tone for what I would sound like in my adult years...it's sprinkled with idealism but it ends in melancholy...c'est la vie ;) Glad you like it my friend :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I do... makes me reflect on my own memories and the path not taken...(sigh)...

c'est la vie... ~xoxo~ :)

[kublakhan27]

I understand...we always wonder about the paths we didn't take, and wonder if we took the right ones...xoxo ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"wonder"... such a pleasant word, it holds so much promise, still yet... ~xoxo~:)

[KeelyJane]

you definitely have a gift my dear. Nice pen!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Keely, I appreciate that :)

[quinfinn]

i absolutely fookin' love this write! this is a departure for you...your usual style is not here but this is so good it rocks. the meter, the rhyme, the message....all are brilliant! outstanding write, my friend!

[kublakhan27]

Haha thanks so much my friend...it's not my usual style cuz it's old haha I'm really glad you like it though...I feel better about it knowing that :)

[quinfinn]

be proud...it is golden

[kublakhan27]

:D