Consider the slivers of flame in the cage and think about it
Stardom waits patiently enough in the vision of a maid waiting on a warm poker like a melting baton Is submission a gratuity willing to be left on my night stand for an audience with a lonely man's cliche of choice?
Why be satisfied with a maid's itinerary when stardom fidgets all the more anxiously for a maiden? All I'd ask on a whim of stipulation is a donning of a loose white toga to whitewash the winks of your exposed tan like a sheer smile of silk
Unless you wish to come and feed the fidget in the flesh envy is a fruitless answer to the wooden documentary I direct to keep my uniform fetish on ice
A note on the avatar: I didn't find that pic till after I wrote this, but if I'd seen it beforehand, it may very well have inspired this writing anyway.
I'm not sure if this happens anywhere else but in Canada we have this thing called Casual Fridays, when people can go to work wearing casual clothes...cuz it's Friday, I guess...
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Haha uniform fetish :D this poem is a little more deeper than just causal clothes on Fridays haha but don't all your poems have deeper meanings and secret agendas to them :D i love your flawless use of words. Good to read you after a long time, awesome awesome awesome!
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Haha yes that was a late addition :D And it's true that there's more at work here than what is said .. read moreHaha yes that was a late addition :D And it's true that there's more at work here than what is said literally...thanks as always my friend, nice to hear from you again :D
You have created a remarkable piece, Love! I absolutely can feel the connection you are developing with another as your words give questions in subtle seduction. Expressing yourself in this way is a fabulous change! I believe exploring passion and expressing it in your writing as opposed to being cemented in the often negative aspects of life's curve balls will free your mind more. Take a break, breathe in the fire and embrace the journey of freedom from the mundane. You are so wonderful and cherished, I only hope for you to find a place where you can soar above what ails you and come forth anew:)
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I've said it before, but you are one of my greatest sources of inspiration, both in literary terms a.. read moreI've said it before, but you are one of my greatest sources of inspiration, both in literary terms and beyond :) Whether it's your own writing, or your reviews of mine, I always come away from your words feeling better about the day at hand...this two-week stint away from my place has unquestionably unlocked parts of my imagination that I always knew were there but never believed them to have any words...I was definitely breathing fire when I was writing this, and apparently I left enough smoke in my wake to raise the question of what the heck I was thinking in the process haha In the meantime I will continue to look for that happy place with your support in mind, and do it with a smile :)
I can`t help it, Kube - I have the distinct impression it ain`t just casual clothes you`re wearing. This smacks of artistic anarchy to me. My guess - wrong probably- is that this is biting our bums with the bared teeth of barmy metaphors for red herrrings! The whole has it`s own sort of authority, because it could be all things to all men! It sure makes you masticate on possibilities! P.
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Oh I'm casual enough, I'm just not thinking casual thoughts haha I always wait with bated breath to .. read moreOh I'm casual enough, I'm just not thinking casual thoughts haha I always wait with bated breath to see how women respond to the ones that are addressed to female characters, but I really seem to have gotten the guys' attention with this one :P I never claim to speak for large groups of people with my work cuz it feels pretentious, but I suppose there is an Everyman feel to this one in its documentation of the male psyche...still this is very much me, artistically speaking...I didn't intend to do any biting but I do specialize in red herrings haha Thank you for the insights Pete.
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Y....eah mmm OK. I`ve had another look....and maybe I`ll leave it to the girls to tear you apart. P.. read moreY....eah mmm OK. I`ve had another look....and maybe I`ll leave it to the girls to tear you apart. P.
Every visitor needs a map and the notes are welcome. But that doesn't stop the random tourist from transmogrifying reality to suit themselves. It's not a statue with pigeon poop on it; it's a work of art. Let the transmogrification begin... from office to rink.
So, again we see... as you've implied before, you don't always keep your eye on the puck while the game is in progress, do you? Sometimes you daydream... those curious little twisted beasties that we've all come to know and love. The ones that make you a U-U (wuz gonna say yo-yo but it sounds like I be rapp'n, dog, ya know?) on a string of up and down merry-go-round cardboard cutout carousel figures. We hear the music of the Calliope and are drawn to the garish primary colors that, at once, both illuminate and silhouette the riders as it diverts attentions and masks the the interior motor; the mind that is you my dear Kahn.
I wonder, if you carve little animals out of soap and use them in the shower, will it imbue one with the characteristics of the carved effigy? ~ Bob, the angry flower.
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Haha I'm all about transmogrification...bring on the transmogrification :P I must carry some of the .. read moreHaha I'm all about transmogrification...bring on the transmogrification :P I must carry some of the element (unconsciously) to the ice with me cuz guys say they can tell when I'm on the verge of spouting off way before it actually happens...and I played three times this week so there was ample time for beasties to formulate in my head...I haven't started speaking to my soap yet though they may be hope for me yet...thank you for another entertaining review my friend.
I don't see the relevance of casual Friday with the content of the piece. Sorry but I was really thinking hard about the relevance. Unless becasue you wrote it on a Friday and you were not wearing uniform or not wearing something at all, lol. Who knows what was on your mind when your scribbled this down? Okay, well then I guess all men has their own little fantasies just like women do. I think everybody is guilty of it. Different fantasies, some shallow, some deep, some sky high. I think what this piece implies is how someone can completely obtain the real essence of satisfaction whether it's bodily satisfaction, spiritual satisfaction or the satisfaction of inordinate desire to possess fame. There might be humor on this piece which I am unable to determine, sarcasm maybe? I'm not sure. Sensuality? It has been made apparent but not directly implied, maybe intended for another meaning. This piece definitely made me think. And by the way, I am having a casual Friday. Just saying...
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I had to save your review for last Maryanne, hope you don't mind...it's a compliment though ;P Being.. read moreI had to save your review for last Maryanne, hope you don't mind...it's a compliment though ;P Being one of my most sympathetic readers and thoughtful reviewers, I often have to stew over your insights for a while before I answer them, much in the same way my writing makes you think ;P
It's hard right now for me to put a context around your thoughts, as I have not gotten a whole lot of female feedback on this one, contrary to my expectations (maybe that's a good thing in this case haha)...I seem to have spoken more to the guys with this one...but sure, we all have our own inner movies that we attend once in a while...and remember I've been away from my place for almost two weeks now so I'm sufficiently shack-wacky and highly susceptible, not only to my movies, but the cinematography and production ;P I don't wanna call it full-blown sarcasm but there is most likely some element of sensuality served with a snarl because I wrote it...I should also mention that I really debated on the word "fetish" at the end...it would either be the cherry on top or the millstone around its neck...I can tell you one thing, I had no idea I was writing such a deep piece until the reviews started coming out ;)
To tell you To tell you honestly, this poem induced a great deal of topics in my head that I went cr.. read moreTo tell you To tell you honestly, this poem induced a great deal of topics in my head that I went crazy delivering all of them at once. Yeah you had guy reviews pouring in that's why I'm here because I'm neuter, lol. Don't you ever forget that=D
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Haha don't think of it that way, you provide a very unique perspective amongst my readers that I val.. read moreHaha don't think of it that way, you provide a very unique perspective amongst my readers that I value immensely ;) Sometimes I wonder if a piece like this makes female readers consider the possibility of taking on that role though o_o If I'm really channeling a appetite for submissiveness here, let me make it clear that I'm speaking to willing participants only...I am not a dominatrix ;)
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Isn't it amazing how words can bring different thoughts to everyone? Honestly, I was very hesitant o.. read moreIsn't it amazing how words can bring different thoughts to everyone? Honestly, I was very hesitant on bringing the sexuality issue up because I wasn't really sure. Fourth to sixth lines gave me a hint but I was thinking there is more to it than sexuality alone. Now I realized I was overthinking, lol. When I read Priscilla and Robbie's review, I was astounded as how precise their views were. It might be because they are more inclined (I'm not sure if it is the right word) toward its nature.
we have casual "whenever" days in the u s of a...although not quite like this scenario...though i am sure it happens somewhere. still can't decide whether or not this is kinky...maybe it's just my warped mind. awesome write though, as per usual, khan!
Ah okay, I was pretty sure they were common in the States as well but I didn't want to assume haha I.. read moreAh okay, I was pretty sure they were common in the States as well but I didn't want to assume haha I offer this piece to the WC readership with a zipped mouth...just remember, it takes a warped writer to get the ball rolling :P However this one made you feel, I'm glad you like it :)
Ha! I can't give this one a review!! Maybe once I calm down, sorry....xo Lol
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And I am absolutely clueless in how to interpret that haha Are you laughing with me or at me? :P Or .. read moreAnd I am absolutely clueless in how to interpret that haha Are you laughing with me or at me? :P Or have I left you at such a loss for words that all you can do is giggle? ;P
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Yes.
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Let's put it this way, the broom was out of gas, no matter how much the engine revved, and the toga .. read moreLet's put it this way, the broom was out of gas, no matter how much the engine revved, and the toga was slipping along with graduate. Got that? ;-P
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LOL Yes...good answer ;P Well that's a lot to deal with but I get you haha
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