HELLO MR. HAMMER

03 03 13

Hello Mr. Hammer
you come to me
like an athlete in a trade
There's a manager in bed
an owner in my head
and a mandate for madrigal
mechanics

I can't say I don't miss my sickle
and its dutifully sly hook
informing me of fabric
for the taking
over the pedestrian tease
of my self-concealing knees
With a sickle
I could lure in the cargo for superiors
With a hammer
now I see that I can
get a job done myself
So I welcome you aboard
Mr. Hammer
deadline acquisition
Now I know my team of limbs
is in advanced transition

Thank you manager
for bolstering my prospects
Now for playoffs
when the play gets off
on winners' purpose
Now you
come to me my manager
I have a champion
that wants to come
to terms with you

Author's Note

I'm not sure if I should even mention this, but I've been writing for many years and this is the first time I've ever written something with pen in one hand and alcohol in the other...this may be gone in a few hours when I look at it with a level head...till now, I'm putting it out there to see if it makes any sense to anyone, then I'll take it from there...

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I love that song...just saying ;-) Your first drunken poem? Awesome job. I find writing drunk is just one of those things that happens *laugh* I mean, if it didn't, I wouldn't get much done xD I love the title, too, and that last line...great stuff.

[kublakhan27]

Oh that's one of my favourite songs of all-time and I think it fits ;) I actually don't like alcohol a great deal so I imagine it will not happen again for a good while even though this one has been fairly well-received...I have other escape routes that do greater favours for me on a creative level ;P

[KAOlmsted]

;-) Ah...gotcha...

[kublakhan27]

Haha I know ;)

[The Analog Kid]

Great song and album. I have trouble writing without alcohol:)

[kublakhan27]

Yeah PG is my favourite album :) I'm getting that impression from a lot of writers that have commented on this piece haha Glad you like it :)

[The Analog Kid]

yeah double album...My favorite is "The Rover" and "Night Flight."

[kublakhan27]

In The Light and Trampled^^

[The Analog Kid]

Then there's ten years gone and down by the seaside. One of the few double albums that DESERVE to be double albums:)

[kublakhan27]

Agreed :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

You want promotion!
Manager wants commission!
Let's commit sins of ommision!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Everybody wants something :P

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

I want your troubles.

[kublakhan27]

Hi sweet friend, omg... do you know how much I prayed for this Mr. Hammer in my life? lol, you are brilliant, to write about it. For me insomnia, mostly!! Greaaaat song of our LED! If you're bored of him, please send him over to me will ya... :D to knock me down, mostly.... ;) this write, was work related I know... but you gave me new insights... maybe from another dimention ha! ;) well done! :) So enjoyed!

- Elisa

[kublakhan27]

*blush* As always you humble me with your kind words...I barely know what to say :) It may surprise you a bit and I usually don't reveal these things, but work is a minor factor in this piece, at least the work you're thinking of haha I came up with the idea while listening to that song (one of my favourite all-time ;)) and that song is a metaphor :) I'm sure the central figure of the piece would love to go out on the road...I hear he's pretty bored most of the time ;P Thank you Elisa for reading and enjoying and supporting, and humbling :)

Lol maybe I did not understood it as well as I should... We have that metaphor with music incommon then... It needs to be a puzzle, if not it is too easy...

[kublakhan27]

Haha you understood very well, I was just suggesting that there was much more going on in this piece ;) I hope everything I write is a puzzle to some extent, even if it's just one of those preschool puzzles with the huge pieces that fit together quite easily haha Hope you're having a great day :) xox

:) have a great day too my friend xo

[kublakhan27]

:) xo

[stephen dillon]

man everytime i just took it as an aestheticly nice sounding word but of course my friend you have taken it to a whole other level

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoy my work.

[Frieda P]

Sounds to me like you've released the krakens, writing in gay abandon...hey, if you don't understand it, why you asking me? I know you're tired, and the cat is in heat, you get a pass, still love this! Cheers!

[kublakhan27]

Haha did you read my notes on this one? I could not write with any more abandon than I have here ;D I don't really like it but it has been fairly well-received so I must have done something right...thank you Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

Although yes I did, I didn't need to, I know where this came from...Ha you never like anything you write, maybe the trick is to not understand your own writing, works for me!

[kublakhan27]

Haha was my tipsiness that obvious? ;P I think I have no choice but to understand my stuff because I constantly have to explain it haha ;P

[Frieda P]

That's just the mystery that is you...ha....funny, how I got this one, you need to be hammered more often!

[kublakhan27]

Haha what can I say, if I didn't think you were dialed into my stuff before, I do now ;) Sadly my health does not encourage such circumstances on a regular basis haha

[Pax]

seems like mr. Hammer is doing its job... :D I'm quite the opposite when I'm hammered... lol... but this is really a good write and while mr. Hammer is there with you... your inspirations kicks in.... now the question is will mr. Hammer always be there or just coming occiasionally... ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha a very eloquent assessment my friend :D I will have to learn how to channel him cuz I don't know if I want him around too often in the flesh ;P

[gombeggar]

it is ruff and raw...good stuff...u oughta be pleased with yerself for this freely written bit

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much^^

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You were hammered when you wrote this? LOL
You little devil you! ;)
Hey, I think this is entertaining, and definitely expressed your subconscious mind...
They say that alcohol is the truth serum... is that right? I'm not sure...

Well (in the past), when I try to write after consuming a little too much, I cannot even see straight, let alone write about anything of substance! lol

So bravo! Nicely done!

[kublakhan27]

LOL You won't believe it but the "hammered" analogy didn't even cross my mind at the time...I had a whole other idea in mind ;D For better or worse, it is the ultimate truth serum...probably the last I'll have for a while though haha I have a cryptic reputation to uphold...thank you Robbie *hugs* :)

[Androglossia]

Is Mr. Hammer suppose to be a hero here? Bringing either new or old love to melt down your frozen poetic grease? Being back to your mom's place and unable to play hockey opens a new window, doesn't it? Hockey, no matter your love for it is your deviation from surreality and your constant awareness to reality thus altering your poetic lust. And I think it is a good thing. Because it neutralizes you. Well I hope Mr. Hammer and your manager wll have a good working relationship for your benefit:)

[kublakhan27]

:P Well, he's a hero for "what could be", I'm not sure how else to define his role within this piece haha Now you're always dialed into my stuff, but you REALLY nailed this one in terms of all the things swirling around in my head as of late...a whole mixing bowl of factors got stirred up in this one, and to be honest, I'm not sure if this would have got written without the five beers that preceded it, but it did clear the air to an extent...I won't say my inspiration has officially returned, but I've still got like ten days here to work on it...and don't worry, that's the end of the beers for a long time haha Thank you as always for your insights Maryanne :)

[Androglossia]

Haha well, I'd say it's good to have them sometimes. They're excellent bolsterer if that's what you're looking for:) If the poet in you could not be awaken with constant prodding then dealcoholized drinks would be a big help:) You're very welcome, Steve:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha a desperate time called for a desperate measure I guess ;) Hopefully it'll give me a creative spark, at least till I get to go home again haha I won't miss the cat, I know that...she's in heat...did I mention that? I can't remember now if I did ...that isn't doing my concentration skills any favours either haha :P

[Androglossia]

Ahahahaha! Depending on what was inside your head or what was occuring when you said that, well it might even depend on how I receive the 'cat in heat' idea, I still find caterwauling sexy, oopppss! I think you will miss her caterwauling, well.. okay.. I think that didn't do you any good. It took your time, didn't it? Haha! Oh boy...

[kublakhan27]

LOL You're cracking me up Maryanne :D I guess the door is always open for some perverse interpretation to occur in the next ten days...but okay, I'm horny too but I'm not keeping everyone awake moaning about it and rolling around O_O

[Androglossia]

LOLOLOL you are disgusting Steve Fortune! Actually, in a more obsolete way it is suggesting sensuousness. Well if it happens to me I would really use it imagining for the face of the right muse.

[kublakhan27]

LOL Look the cat is the disgusting one my dear ;P But you're definitely on to something...leave it to the cat to be in heat when there's a poet around...actually that kinda sounds like a good quote... ;P

[Androglossia]

I made it official. Look at my status:)

[kublakhan27]

LOL I know, I saw it right away ;)

[kublakhan27]

It's pretty much a given that I'm going to at least attempt something on paper now...I've built it up too much ;P

[Androglossia]

Go right ahead, I'm telling you before winter completely leaves =D