BLUE FOR YOU

02 28 13

When the wind-threaded
shawl of gust
slid a cool caress of winter
over my reluctant flannel
I succumbed to the positive
parameters of grooves
in our goose-bumped skin

Like the King Of Hearts for a tart
a rubber mat called for a needle
with a queenly cue to flick
a pair of frantic fingers over
nubs of melodies
gate-folded
in designer transparencies

My cold toes swayed
in a tangle-up of blue chiffon
and the night thumbed a ride
on a chariot of flame
to sear the white satin flora
that was left to dance
shadowless

Somewhere in the cloud of stitches
scenery discovered stereo

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

When the wind-threaded
shawl of gust
slid a cool caress of winter
over my reluctant flannel
I succumbed to the positive
parameters of grooves
in our goose-bumped skin

Why fight love, silly. What an amazing piece and I love the stanza above. Very erotic but not blatant. This is hard to do. Great write, my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Haha that's a good question...this was indeed a tough one to write, and I was never really happy with it but it's starting to grow on me with time...glad you enjoyed it my friend.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Your language choice is always superb...I'm enchanted by the way that you are able to turn a phrase and make it really stick in my heart. Powerful stuff here...I'm going to shelf it so that I can read it again and catch the little bits that I know I have probably missed. Great imagery, by the way!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, you know I value your support immeasurably...I actually didn't think much of this one when I wrote it but it's growing on me with time...I think I'm starting to find things I missed myself haha

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"somewhere in the cloud of stitches./ scenery discovered stereo"

and played that record of seasons changing from summer to autumn to cold, cold winter

over and over in my head and heart.

[kublakhan27]

Couldn't have put it better myself my friend...thanks so much.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I came back to read this... and the music is just as sweet as your words were the first time I read them...
The chill may have been in the air, but there was certainly warmth lingering...

Loved it!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you love, your kind words always warm me :) (((hugs))) xo

[Priscilla Sayers]

What an image, no a scene you produce with your words my friend
Such a sultry piece done in such an eloquent way;0)

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it, thank you my dear :) xo

[s y e]

Ahhhh, The Beatles, awesome! This is a superb read...love the music, it was perfect! Well done!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :)

[s y e]

No problemo ;-)

[Tai Ryens]

Your diction is exquisite and sophisticated, allowing a wider range of interpretations to be felt among readers. To write of the downfall into misfortune! Oh, how envious you make me! I could never have penned it any better. Quite awe-inspiring with an elegant demeanor. I like this.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you very much :)

[ms. barrie]

This is an incredible write, Mr. k! Such exquisite imagery portrayed here, I love your choice of words and how you used them! Very unique poem that is quite breath-taking...Thanks for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Miss B ;) I'm glad you like it...and thank you for reading :) xox

[ms. barrie]

You're quite welcome, kublahkan! This was a pleasure to read. Figured that I will squeeze in some reviews, before I '"TRY" to write next Chapter. It's official...I'm a lazy sloth :) xox!

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's quite alright, you are much busier than I, and you must tend to your story as well :) You must follow the muse above all else when she calls ;)

[ms. barrie]

:) -- only busy drowning in chaotic thoughts that as of now I am unable to capture! Oh my muse...cheating on me again, :D (((hugs))) and hugs that cat as well!

[kublakhan27]

:D Yes she can be a mischievous one, but she always comes back *hugs* :)

[ms. barrie]

I hope so, well he for me (((hugs))) :P

[kublakhan27]

*hugs* :)

[ms. barrie]

*hugs and skittles* :)

[Rhianne Ney]

This is interesting and all that and it was a great read... and since it was inspired by a song I can say that you've made a job well done with this~!
100/100

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Rhianne, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Of course, I did and you're welcome

[B-poet]

A bit of cleverly written descriptive poetic imagery. Nice work. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, glad you like it my friend :)