BARRELS

02 24 13

Willingly
would I make room for impotence
in my psychology
were it as trusty in there
as it is in my irony

Willingly
would I white impotence out
of the profane scrawlings of
those sad blokes wayward
enough in their psychology
to deem me fortunate

if
the intent transl(oc)ated
inklings of productivity
to the pale pinstriped potential
I stare down in
demoralizing durations
of regularity
frittering away the willing
productivity of
uptight quills like twins
severed at the handle

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Frustrating isn't it dear poet?!!
You have brilliantly, and may I add, intensely depicted your frustrations down to the very fiber of your being...in which you have described as "impotence" of your psychological mind...
I think you need not worry! This is one hell of an expression! Bravo!

[kublakhan27]

It is indeed dear fellow poet ;P Your assessment is flawless...this review brought a big smile to my face...thank you Robbie :) xo

[Pax]

how complex... even human nature has it complexity and irony at times... there is something hidden in these abstract way of presenting your words... i can only say intriguing!:)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend..I didn't intend for it to come out in such a complex way but as long as you were intrigued it's alright :)

[Pete Langley]

You are wrapping (or rapping) your self in meloncholy here, K. Bewailing the lack of flair in your stilted quill has produced an unstilted, very funny piece! Great! P.

[kublakhan27]

This one is very reflective of how I've been feeling lately...sometimes I'm not sure how I feel and those are the times when my writing gets abstract...but I'm glad you found humour in it cuz it was intended to be a funnier piece than it came out as haha Thank you Pete :)

[Frieda P]

My first thought was to ask, is this your pen or thy sword? Knowing how cunning, complex and clever you are in your poetry, you'd give me an even more abstract answer so I'll just go with it where I wish. Intriguing and always interesting, your quill never disappoints.....

[kublakhan27]

All I can say is that I tried for five days to write something light-hearted and this is the closest I got to that goal, which says something about how I've been feeling lately...but I take some solace in the fact that you're not the first person to use "intriguing" to describe this piece...I must be doing something right in that case, even if it isn't what I want to be doing haha Thank you Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

You never, never, ever answer my questions, you live to be an enigma, I know you do!

[kublakhan27]

It's not something I intend, it's just my natural way of communicating...trust me, if I could somehow train my mind to be more direct, I would do it...but at the same time, I'm hesitant to offer direct statements on my writing...I'm never quite sure if the complexity that comes out of me is good or bad...this particular work is both the pen and the sword, trying to co-exist while they get used to being in the areas opposite of where I want them to be...I guess that doesn't make things much clearer does it? Yet it makes perfect sense to me...I must be an enigma but by default, as I'm not able to author any self-argument against it as long as I ponder it :P

[Frieda P]

See, I knew it, why didn't you just say!? ha....don't be afraid, no one here bites, or hardly anyway... ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha well it goes back to what I said there: nothing ever comes out directly...I need to be forced (several times usually) before anything concrete comes out of me...this is the one place where I don't feel afraid...I'm just grateful to have you and a handful of others that bear with me through the many moods and motifs that fly out of me in unpredictable intervals...the biting I think I could handle, just don't bite down ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I take prisoners...will eat you for breakfast, ha, kidding, the person you have to watch out for is John, not me. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

;) Haha which one cuz I know a couple ;P

[Frieda P]

I think we're married, since we have this love/hate thing going on....I won't reveal who he is but I think he wears a kilt! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm not sure if I know that one ;P

[Frieda P]

Just check my threads where I'm bleeding ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'll keep an eye out ;P

[Frieda P]

Bring bandages and oxygen ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha ;)

[quinfinn]

this is clever and nicely penned. a bit in the abstract but works well and very compelling. nice write!

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah that abstract monster refuses to die no matter how often I try to kill it...Thank you Quin :)