BARRELS

02 24 13

Willingly
would I make room for impotence
in my psychology
were it as trusty in there
as it is in my irony

Willingly
would I white impotence out
of the profane scrawlings of
those sad blokes wayward
enough in their psychology
to deem me fortunate

if
the intent transl(oc)ated
inklings of productivity
to the pale pinstriped potential
I stare down in
demoralizing durations
of regularity
frittering away the willing
productivity of
uptight quills like twins
severed at the handle

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Frustrating isn't it dear poet?!!
You have brilliantly, and may I add, intensely depicted your frustrations down to the very fiber of your being...in which you have described as "impotence" of your psychological mind...
I think you need not worry! This is one hell of an expression! Bravo!

[kublakhan27]

It is indeed dear fellow poet ;P Your assessment is flawless...this review brought a big smile to my face...thank you Robbie :) xo

[writing mojo]

what a beautiful weaved web of the writer (in touch) with the (out of touch),
which goes through spider egg shelled thoughts reeling the victim stomped at first bit...great piece as always

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks my friend...I can certainly relate to that description.

[KAOlmsted]

I think you broke my brain...in a good way ;-) This is brilliant.

[kublakhan27]

It's a relief to hear you say that cuz it sounds rather painful haha Thank you Kim ;)

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure ;-)

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Muse]

the complexities of your mind will forever intrigue me. Why barrels??? Is this a barrel of burried thoughts? A barrel of confusion? A barrel of whiskey? Whatever it may be, it was thought-provoking....and I thank you for sharing.

[kublakhan27]

As always, thank you Muse for your unique insights...I could say in all honesty that it is all those kinds of barrels and more...I'm surprised that more people haven't called me out on the title but it does have a concrete meaning haha

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a well written piece with great imagery that surely captures the eye. Great job~!
100/100

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much :)

[Rhianne Ney]

welcomezz

[Careline]

this reminds me highly of the great youtuber PewDiePie....

[kublakhan27]

I've never heard that comparison before :P

[Careline]

Have you ever heard of him? I watch his religiously on youtube and can't help thinking about him as i read this, hahaha :D

[kublakhan27]

I've heard of him and watched him a bit, I just never thought I'd be mentioned in the same sentence as him haha :D

[Careline]

Well then, hello fellow bro! :D We shall assassinate those dang barrels together with Pewdie! :3

[kublakhan27]

Haha indeed ;D

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, for sharing such a beautiful heartfelt, and enduring piece of reality here. You convey the real meaning in your words of your sentiment... and I agree with the words of sis Robbie, she sais it really to the point on this write. Sometimes, it is just that frustrating and difficult, and your ending, did explained this too well for me... shivers... excellency in your quill, and word choices... thank you for sharing poet!!

- Elisa

[kublakhan27]

You and Robbie always make me smile with your reviews Elisa...very few are able to tap into my written emotions with the depth that you two can :) I value your support and input more than you know...thank you :)

So do you to us friend!!! you're such a talent.... keep on writing, I shall keep following you ! :D

[kublakhan27]

And I will follow you as well :D

:)

[char]

I get life is a bit boring sometimes. And usually for a writer, we try to capture it. It sometimes comes out abstract. In that sense, very unique. Good job.....Kabu...?

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Anna :)

[B-poet]

Catchy stanzas, witty and cleverly unique. This piece displays the beauty of written complexity that has been put together nicely for all admirers to see. Great work. :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks, my friend :)

[Androglossia]

Oftentimes our desire does not coordinate with our mood. I've been experiencing this kind of feeling intermittently that no matter how fabulous the idea inside my head my vocabulary won't be kind enough to spare me magic. I call this in the brink of writer's block:) Does that even make any sense? LoL.. As always, there is complexity on this write and although the thought and feelings are not directly apparent it has been implied throughout the poem.

[kublakhan27]

It makes perfect sense...everything you've said here makes perfect sense...I was well into writer's block (and still am) when this was written...it took me five days to finish, and all the while, I was trying to write something lighthearted...needless to say I failed to achieve that goal...if you look at the other reviews, you'll see that complex is the word that has been used by virtually everyone...that's not what I wanted with this piece, but that's what happens when I write when I've been in the state of mind I've been in for the last couple of weeks...it came out like a throwback to my earlier stuff, the stuff that used to give you a headache haha Thank you Maryanne :)

[Androglossia]

It is throwback indeed but as you can see it no longer gave me headache, lol. You have done a big deal on sharpening my mind and not everybody can do that. It only means that your writings are effective:) You're very welcome, Steve!