CROWDS OF ONE

?? ?? 99 - 01 25 13

Schools of thought like slime intrude heavy souls
digging cavities and wreaking spiritual havoc
Bitter undaunted in its ways
clinging to the skin and caking
like dry dead ulcers
Silence has crept steadily through time
constructing its arsenal
formulating its depth
Soon it will unleash its venomous rage
handing out damns to those with none to give
Minutes in the meantime are dropped on our foreheads
like cold and torturing beads of water
You'll never outrun a snail's pace lineup
a pent-up pocket of circumstance
threatening to explode and hurl us
into a wretched quagmire where
our only shield is the past / One shield
to be shared between all of us
Someone is bound to get sucked

Author's Note

Time to raid the vaults again to fill the creative void...this is actually a collection of snippets scribbled through one of my notebooks...I presumed them all dead but I'm now thinking about doing a revision of this.

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

It`s amazing what crowds in when you`re on your own! You leave the door open - and all manner of riff- raff fight each other to bung up your equilibrium. I have trouble fitting some of your images to my vision of your piece, but generally, I enjoy the journey. P.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Pete

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It sounds like a massive anxiety attack.
I envision a timebomb ticking, whether it is one soul, a small mob, or a school full...something is getting ready to explode. Nice creation of snippets, my friend!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Robbie, you are spot-on in your assessment haha Anxiety, timebomb, school, they were all staples of that period in my life...actually two of the three are still very much at work...oh well, makes for good poetry I guess ;)

[quixotic_rose]

"handing out damns to those with none to give
Minutes in the meantime are dropped on our foreheads"
I wish i knew how to put into words what i think about this piece. except its just so good, I dont know how to say what I'm thinking, ever get that? its ridiculous. I love those two lines in case you were wondering :). Amazing :D

[kublakhan27]

I know exactly how that feels...some days I have no problems coming up with reviews for people, and on other days I have a harder time writing them than the poetry itself haha All you have to say though is what you've said here...just knowing that you like the piece (and some of the lines contained therein) makes me happy :D

[quixotic_rose]

GOOD, i'm all about that happiness :)

[kublakhan27]

:D

[Priscilla Sayers]

Yes, raid those vaults my friend, apply you now, to you then, a creative window into thoughts that have no doubt evolved! REVISE AND CONQUER, My friend!

[kublakhan27]

Ah Priscilla, you have a knack for offering me perspectives that I'd never had in mind beforehand :) Before making my home here, I never gave the slightest thought to returning to old notebooks, but I now make a pilgrimage to them on a regular basis...that's cuz of the support I've received here, and the confidence boost I've gotten from it...thank you for reading and supporting :)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Always, my friend, always.

[Pax]

"very vivid, somehow dark in emotional distress.... "
i had one before(somehow a journal), but totally burned to ashes now... i used to write before i sleep.... then i encode them up to my pc after.. but then that was before(last 2010).... it was a start of my fascination to write... and stop in 2011(because in this year i started to paint again) and then start writing again in 2012...until now...

[kublakhan27]

I kept journals for a long time but I stopped doing it a while back cuz I found they weren't doing me any therapeutic good...if anything they were making me feel worse...I just took them all one day and devoted an afternoon to shredding them, which I haven't regretted in the least haha I'm trying to get back into drawing now as I haven't done any of that in a while...

[Pax]

hehe... oh that's good ..then show us your drawings... and create a poem out of it... i did that in one of my poems last time...

[Pax]

it was not a bit of a journal actually it a bit of a poem in fact... why is journal really frustrating to see or to remember?

[kublakhan27]

Haha some of them are in my photos...most of my journals were written around high school and the years that followed...I wasn't overly keen on life in those years :P It embarrassed me whenever I tried to go back and read them, so I just disposed of them...

[Pax]

oh...I've seen them now.. and i comment on them...
don't you think its fun to remember it and thinking how much have you change now..

[kublakhan27]

It does make me feel better knowing I have more support now than I did then...my friends on here are probably the greatest contributors to my well-being that I have...without it, I would probably never be happy :)

[Pax]

that's makes me happy as well... and i say likewise for without my friends here and that includes you.. i would not able to release my stress in life... poetry helps a lot in our struggles my friend and the responses we get from our friends is a treasure that will makes us live for the better life we have now... we must keep on striving for the better like i always said to myself... life is good and life must go on as we choose it to be...be well my friend...
and ive seen your art by the way in your photos... i comment on them check it out.

[kublakhan27]

Cool, I'll be sure to check your comments out...take care of yourself as well my friend :)

[Muse]

I love it when we can take old thoughts that were once tossed aside...recycle...reuse...rebirth...share.

[kublakhan27]

I'm glad you like it, thanks very much :)

[Muse]

I've always liked your work...original you are!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much, that means a lot :) Time constraints have prevented me from reading the work of others but I certainly plan to do so.

[Muse]

nobody cares if you just say you are there...I gave up on RR's a long...long time ago!

[kublakhan27]

Yeah they do get cumbersome at times lol

[Androglossia]

Jazmen, a friend on here told me to do the same. Combine incomplete poems to make a good piece but I was so lame and had given up since:( Yours however is awesome. No one could tell that it's a product of fragmented thoughts of beliefs and points of view had you not mentioned it on the author's note. School of thoughts it is.

You'll never outrun a snail's pace lineup - This reminds me so much of an old fable, The Tortoise and the Hare.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Maryanne as always :) It was really a perfect storm in the sense that I had some bits that just happened to gel...I don't think I have another one of these hiding anywhere but you never what I'll find going through my old books lol

If memory serves me right (mind you, that's a big if) I think I had the Tortoise and Hare in mind when I wrote that line down ;P

[Androglossia]

When we throw leftovers away, aren't we feel guilty of it? Same thing applies in writing, I think. It's nice to be free of guilt:)

And yes, that fable. I knew it:)

[kublakhan27]

That's a good point...that's why I usually save the old stuff for when I'm hurting for ideas...I guess great minds really do think alike ;)

[Androglossia]

I think so too:)

[Margarette]

The mingling of different subject matters into one is an expressive show of what the mind can do. I admire how you make this poem like a puzzle where pieces are put randomly but in their specific places. This is quite a good catch to read until the end. Thanks for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much :) I guess it does sound like kind of a "catch" the way I worded it though I never considered that possibility before haha

[Asilem]

Hm, every nice. very nice indeed

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much

[Asilem]

welcome

[gombeggar]

some nice visuals created here

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks