HOW I VISION YOU

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I.

Can I swim through your ripples
of cleansing azure
Stand up to your tempest?
Wash up on your shore?
Embrace the polarity
of your allure?
Can I try on your silhouette
like a lost contour?

II.

Your skin is a breeze
and my hands want to fly
My fingers are wings
in the flesh of your sky
You're stars and I'm stripes
on the peak of July
when your dunk tank ripples
suck my fireworks dry

III.

Tell me that I'm overboard
or that I'm not too bright
It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true
Flawed only in your flawlessness
That's how I vision you

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same week, I wanted to work a Maple Leaf into that particular image but couldn't get it to go...once I had those lines down, I knew they were down to stay ;)

[KAOlmsted]

wtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines; glad they stayed.

[kublakhan27]

LOL You know, I had a feeling you'd say something like that ;D

[KAOlmsted]

:-D I kid because I love...

[kublakhan27]

Haha oh it's all good...I have a good grasp of your style of humour now :D

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[kublakhan27]

;)

[Androglossia]

Wow! Awesome! The rhyming is classic. I liked the flag reference, it's somewhat unexpected. The poem itself is unexpected, if you know what I mean:) But it still got a touch of your writing style which is a good thing. A++++

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Maryanne, I'm glad you like it :) I'm not sure how to explain it, it kind of came out of the blue and it was probably as unexpected to you as it was to me haha I tried to work in a reference to my flag too, but once those lines went down I was like yeah, those lines are there to stay ;)

[Androglossia]

This made me think of a hugeWrangler ad campaign billboard on my way home from work, lol.read more
This made me think of a hugeWrangler ad campaign billboard on my way home from work, lol.

On a more serious side, there are things that are meant to be written even if they are less to our liking because are simply meant to be. Just like lovers.

[kublakhan27]

lol I'll take that as a good omen ;P Contrary to what the poem says, you know I am most certainly a poet and not a lover...I just think about being a lover a lot...but everything happens for a reason I suppose.

[Androglossia]

I don't even know why I spoke of lovers lol. I tried posting a hoto of the as on the reply box, unfortunately HTML no longer works on comment boxes so. And I agree with "everything happens for a reason." Maybe its about time, lmao jk. Raccoon! Errr... Rock on!

[Androglossia]

hoto means photo, heh..

[Androglossia]

as was suppose to be ad, gawd..

[kublakhan27]

Oh I'm not joking, it's definitely about time LOL It's okay, I've seen Wrangler ads so I have some idea of what it might be like :P

[Androglossia]

Lol, good:) I can be obsessive sometimes and today unlike some other days, I feel high. o_O
I felt too driven. I'm not sure if it's the lack of sleep or the caffein in my blood.

[kublakhan27]

:) That's a good way to be...I could use some highness these days :P Well you're talking to Mr. OCD so I'm sure I know what you mean to at least some extent...some people chain-smoke, I have been chain-drinking coffee the last several days, but I'm also an insomniac so sleep is a moot point anyway lol

[sheila.j]

I love it!! I like the lightness of it and how you can feel and really envision what youre saying...good job!!

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks, I'm glad you like it :)

[Frieda P]

Holy, this is good. It has a playfulness and sensuality all it's own. So many great lines, 'your skin is breeze' love it...

when your dunk tank ripples
suck my fireworks dry

Can't beat that one though. Woo, I need a cold shower.

[kublakhan27]

Hehe yeah, I think I need one after writing it...

[Frieda P]

I read this one before the RR, just noticed James, wanted to say good choice. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha that was a late addition...I just happened to be listening to him last night and I thought yeah, that'll work ;)