Can I swim through your ripples of cleansing azure Stand up to your tempest? Wash up on your shore? Embrace the polarity of your allure? Can I try on your silhouette like a lost contour?
II.
Your skin is a breeze and my hands want to fly My fingers are wings in the flesh of your sky You're stars and I'm stripes on the peak of July when your dunk tank ripples suck my fireworks dry
III.
Tell me that I'm overboard or that I'm not too bright It gives me further reason to seek out your guiding light I may not be a poet but these lover's words are true Flawed only in your flawlessness That's how I vision you
When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same wee.. read moreThank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same week, I wanted to work a Maple Leaf into that particular image but couldn't get it to go...once I had those lines down, I knew they were down to stay ;)
11 Years Ago
wtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines;.. read morewtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines; glad they stayed.
11 Years Ago
LOL You know, I had a feeling you'd say something like that ;D
I'd never guess you were Canadian if kimmers didn't mention it. This piece speaks in so many volumes of beauty, grace and humanity. It (the subject) is perfect in it's imperfection. Beautiful poem sir
Haha yeah we've always had this artistic stigma about us that compels all our best artists to go to .. read moreHaha yeah we've always had this artistic stigma about us that compels all our best artists to go to the States for recognition before getting it here...that's why American imagery is so prevalent in a lot of our art...but that's not to say I haven't written a fair bit of Canadiana as well :) Thank you as always for the support my friend.
11 Years Ago
Haha hopefully i'm moving to Canada this year. If I do happen to make it there, sometime in the futu.. read moreHaha hopefully i'm moving to Canada this year. If I do happen to make it there, sometime in the future I would love to share a cuppa' with you and just talk. You seem like an amazing person who I could learn a lot from :P plus have a laugh or two.
11 Years Ago
Absolutely :) We're actually the second-largest country in the world in terms of land mass (I'm not .. read moreAbsolutely :) We're actually the second-largest country in the world in terms of land mass (I'm not sure how well-known that fact is) so there are all kinds of beautiful bits to see. Mind you, I live in one of tiniest parts so you need a real good map to see it haha
It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true.
My faves in this awesome poem and well written...:)
Oh, you're a poet. No doubt about that.. and a damn good one too, IMHO. Wow, khan. This is really a good one. You know me, the way I read things... still, there's an organic precision, a may-i/can-i that puts the reader in the launch booth just before the lift off of the first celebratory salvo from the water-barged munitions. Then, that illumination of the corporeal elements of air, earth, fire and water; like a forgotten passage from Handel's Waterworks. The finale of honesty is a bare naked telling of an inner soul paying tribute to guiltless admiration. Trust me. If (ever) you say you made this up on a whim, or as an experiment, I may be forced to impale you with this masterpiece.
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11 Years Ago
You humble me with your praise, my friend...I am pretty proud of this one, but I never would have pe.. read moreYou humble me with your praise, my friend...I am pretty proud of this one, but I never would have pegged it for a masterpiece...I probably did smirk my way through the last part, and I do have that way of wading into the things I write, but that's quintessential me: cautious to a fault in real life, which bleeds into my paper-based alter-ego...trust me, it's definitely an alter-ego haha...you can also trust me when I say I do nothing on a whim, which irritates me at times cuz at this point in my life I hardly know what spontaneity means...this is a response to a friend's poem (a female one, mind you, but a friend :P), one of the rhetorical variety I guess you could say, taking the general tone into consideration...anyways I shall sign off by reiterating how important your support is to my writing and my self-esteem for that matter...both would be pretty weak otherwise :)
When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.
Posted 11 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same wee.. read moreThank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same week, I wanted to work a Maple Leaf into that particular image but couldn't get it to go...once I had those lines down, I knew they were down to stay ;)
11 Years Ago
wtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines;.. read morewtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines; glad they stayed.
11 Years Ago
LOL You know, I had a feeling you'd say something like that ;D
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..