TOO MANY FRANKENSTEINS

11 21 01

You made me
both of you
now you make me
allocate to one of you
the credits of creation
defaming and damaging
the other with
the stigma of creating me
I choose neither
I who was made
in ephemeral pleasure
You were so nonchalant
in assuming what I want
Now you know what
I don't want
Too many Frankensteins
scouring the land
like garbage truck drivers
absently offering wayward
scraps to the wind
all for the plain
ephemeralness of pleasure
Mine was ephemeral too
until I learned pleasure
is not like me
It is not created but claimed

Author's Note

The spell check on this site drives me absolutely batty at times...

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

In the absence of peace or pleasure, it is replaced by turmoil and grief... I certainly picked up the pain in this piece. To be torn in opposing directions and having to choose one for the other can be a wrenching experience. This is a well displayed heartbreak.... (Divorce is devastating on all levels.)

[kublakhan27]

You've hit the nail on the head here my friend. These were exactly the points I was hoping to make with this piece. So glad you were able to understand the sentiments contained herein. Thank you Robbie :)

[icelandicblue]

Ah Steve- we are more than we are perceived to be yet we are formed by expectations.

[kublakhan27]

Very true my friend, especially when it comes to parents...divorced ones as it pertains to this piece...so glad you enjoyed it.

[willweb]

This poem offers a bitterness and slight anger to me. A need to be a part of something, but not. Ths was very different but great. I really enjoyed this today.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it willweb...there was a lot of stuff swirling around in my head at the time.

[Rita L. Sev]

I am reminded of the saying that it is much better to build children than repair adults... Your final lines hold much wisdom, K - pleasure and joy are pursued, worked for, claimed as our own - no one creates it for us. Great piece here.

[kublakhan27]

I totally understand where that expression comes from. As Robert Plant once said, I don't see the point in growing up. I understand where that one comes from too. But few are better-equipped to read between the lines of this one as you, who spends a great deal of time around kids. Glad this one spoke to you my friend.

[Frieda P]

A creation made of broken fragments and pieces put together and left to flounder, I always felt sorry for the monster(s)....in his eyes you could still see his pain and the need to be whole and fit in with the others. An intriguing read from your pen, a thought provoking look delving into pleasure and pain.

[kublakhan27]

I cannot express how sympathetic your words are to my vision here love. I could not have summed it up better myself. I did have an inkling that you might relate to this one, which hurts me to know, but I'm glad you were able to understand.

[Frieda P]

Kindred souls I suppose my friend, we're on the same wavelength often, fortunately or unfortunately in some cases....x

[kublakhan27]

So very true my friend...x

[s y e]

So no Frankenweenies this time? LOL

This is great Steveroo -- I loved it! The inventors of Frankenstein were not appreciated, and the product of their imagination and inventiveness was not as appreciated as they would have liked? I don't like Frankenstein, but Frankenweenie is cute...... ;-P

[kublakhan27]

LOL Frankenweenie...that made me laugh. I'm shocked at the different interpretations that have come in regarding this piece. I'm totally fine with that, I just wasn't expecting it cuz I did have one distinct idea in mind when I wrote you. I think you've come the closest to that idea haha Glad you enjoyed it Noodlebop :)

[Sheila Kline]

And so the creators of Frankenstein were not appreciated and the product of their imagination and inventiveness made that which did not ask to be - a Monster who learned that he could find happiness on his own? I really like this! Pleasure cannot be created - it must be discovered!!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it Sheila :)

[Jack...]

Funny, I don't have spell check on this site when I am at work, but at home I do. ( I'm sure you have seen it in my reviews)

Now, on to your poem...pleasure I'm sure can be claimed, but in my mind it can be created more easily. Your piece was fun to read and a different approach. Reading deep into this I believe I follow you, and what a trip your footsteps produced.

[kublakhan27]

Well at least that's one positive about being at work :P If I had a nickel for every time this site has told me I misspelled a very common word, I'd buy Microsoft AND Apple...

The odd thing about this piece is that I was in a dark frame-of-mind when I wrote it, and was sure the poem reflected that, but it's been interesting cuz this is the most widely-interpreted piece I've featured in some time, even though there are only four reviews as of now (such a big surprise). I suppose there is no outrunning the tongue-in-chief motif when I sit down to write something. You definitely follow me more than most when it comes to sympathizing with my voice...many thanks as always my friend.

[TLK]

I wonder how this would look as a prose poem. I can't help but feel that the staccato nature of the line breaks does not help in crafting the sinews of meaning that tie this piece together.

I like it that I am left unsure as to whether you are talking about Dr. Frank (the creator) or Frank's Monster (the creation). It seems to work either way. Perhaps the clue is in the first two lines.

[kublakhan27]

I actually hadn't looked at this one for a while before posting it so it probably could be tinkered with in terms of structure and stuff...I tried to leave it vague with regards to who I was talking about so I'm glad that came through :)