THE VICTIM

THE VICTIM

A Poem by kublakhan27
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From the victim's inside pocket he derived a wallet-sized coil notepad drenched in blood, coalescing with the dim blue ink neatly settled on the pure white pages within.  It reminded him of some sick, diseased American dream, dying a merciless death in the vice grip of his pink-sweated fingers.

It was not the precision of this image that drove him to drop the notepad in a wince, but a scent, not of fresh blood or of sweat now dissolved, but of words, burning like rubber in the tempered friction of his skinless grip.

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
Another one dredged up from the murky mists of a time.

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This draws such a vivid picture of a blood curdling moment where you need to get your message out but it might be too late. Such amazing imagery and so well penned. Loved it sir, you're a true blessing to this website , for me I have much to learn through your writings. I want to be able to have a style similar to yours someday. Much respect.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you Keegan, that truly means a lot :)



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Intriguing title, poetic words .... all done perfectly .... for that this deserves thumbs-up:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks I'm glad you like it :)
If the quality of the rest of this is of the same standard then we need to see it, very high calibre of description I think, more please

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

No these are the best parts, honest haha Thanks very much^^
Jesus even your author's notes are poetic! lol

Imagery is spot on, lovely job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha because I had nothing else better to think about ;P Thank you Avy :)
Nicely done...the images will linger.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you Kim, be well :)
interesting imagery I dig it

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thanks very much^^
This draws such a vivid picture of a blood curdling moment where you need to get your message out but it might be too late. Such amazing imagery and so well penned. Loved it sir, you're a true blessing to this website , for me I have much to learn through your writings. I want to be able to have a style similar to yours someday. Much respect.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you Keegan, that truly means a lot :)
for all i know this is about a mugging victim who is anguishing over an unfinished grocery list, but i feel it goes much deeper. at any rate, it is a spellbinding instant in time.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

A writer is never supposed to admit to this but your guess is as good as mine haha all I know is a c.. read more
Gahh! Argg! !_! ...what is this?! It's way over my head but Kudos on the author's note. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Haha well it's over my head too, that's why nobody saw it till now :)
paints an interesting pic...would like to see more, read more

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thanks very much...I opted for mystery in this one as I couldn't really come up with anything else, .. read more
gombeggar

12 Years Ago

give it some time...i often come back to a page or just a fragment and work on it more
Reads like a flashback and trying to put something to rest in my convoluted brain mass of misfiring electrons. Whatever it means, it's mesmerizing in it's content.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you Frieda, this one is pretty dated at this point in time but I love the open-ended style of .. read more

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Tags: victim, death, mugging, robbery, words, pink, red, blood, white, ink, burning, friction

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kublakhan27
kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review. www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..

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