THE TWENTY-THIRD HOUR

THE TWENTY-THIRD HOUR

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Another hour hovers impatiently
above the authorized allotment
of my water
Another open circuit stripped
of recreation and reverse psychology
to counteract the pangs
of my crying nostrils

Without forbidden water
I'm a fresh sponge slave
to this sense-shredding
musical of mucus

I require no feverous reminders
of my role as caretaker
of quiet revolutions

I see the sun thinning
on the grater of shadow
I see molasses season on the brook
gelling up the current
and I see no one enlightened
by the discipline of my
Byronic quietude

Is that a valid reason to rescind
my water while I work?

Should the clouds of the hour pass rain
the frost I babysit shall make the mock
a challenge
No illegal alien season will
saturate the white wall of
my prescribed duties
I'll make the brook a mantle
for the fuzzy ornaments of winter
and blow off all insinuations
of aquatic indiscretions

Then I'll wait with tongue tied
willingly with anxious pride
for a thirst-drowning glass of apology

© 2012 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
For Coleridge.

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Thank you Avy, I'm glad you do like it :D Of course It wouldn't be me without the inclusion of some cryptic bits right? ;) I wrote the fourth stanza looking out at the brook that literally flows through my backyard...the current gets increasingly slower as it gets colder, until it's frozen solid...Byronic? Quiet, moody, introverted, self-absorbed, you get the idea haha

Posted 11 Years Ago


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That_Girl

11 Years Ago

Molasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I kn.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P .. read more



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You other entry nearly made the top 10 as well. I like your style of writing very much.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much, that means a lot^^
Thank you Avy, I'm glad you do like it :D Of course It wouldn't be me without the inclusion of some cryptic bits right? ;) I wrote the fourth stanza looking out at the brook that literally flows through my backyard...the current gets increasingly slower as it gets colder, until it's frozen solid...Byronic? Quiet, moody, introverted, self-absorbed, you get the idea haha

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That_Girl

11 Years Ago

Molasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I kn.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P .. read more
Ahhh that second stanza is brilliant. I honestly cannot grasp the fourth though....sigh. But, I got the rest and understood it all anyways (score!). So, great piece. :)

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kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha the fourth stanza is about the coming of Winter ;) Thank you Avy, I'm glad you liked and unders.. read more
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Pax
Coleridge...oh... you shed some knowledge of these poet.... i didn't know about him until i read him in wiki..:D i like the dedication... the depth of your work is to be admire... a puzzling scene you painted makes me think hard until i fall asleep...lol just joking... this is so vivid and well manage imagery that blows the mind off the board.. :D
great work my friend.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much :D There's something about this guy that I just relate to...even my online name c.. read more
Pax

11 Years Ago

your most welcome... I'm glad you liked my a bit funny response :D... i see he inspires u... and by .. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Oh that's cool lol I seem to have a thing for the Psychics, I don't know why :P
Coleridge's ghost is going to need an extra helping of white powdered sugar donuts to see him through this read. I'm trying to choose between Picasso or Andy Warhol but it's beyond even that analogy. That there is a theme in the madness, to be sure, but what ward and what medication to administer to the naive and unassuming - that is the frightening question. It's like Rod Serling's into to the Twilight Zone, played in reverse and no preparation of spinning vinyl backwards under hallucinogenic seems likely to help. There is a subtle anger, perhaps seasoned with indifference that gnaws at the impatient awaiting that satisfying apology. The Sons of the Pioneers croon in the background, "Keep a searching Dan, ... water. Cool, clear water." The battery is dead. Long live the battery.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha how do I put it now...I wrote this after reading Frost At Midnight for the zillionth time with .. read more
Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat

11 Years Ago

Ah ha ha! ...clarity. Thank you!! :)
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

:)
"I see the sun thinning
on the grater of shadow
I see molasses season on the brook
gelling up the current"

very artistic .. :)

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kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Good work. Love the conclusion, never heard of apology waiting in quite those terms before.

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kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Many thanks.

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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