Another hour hovers impatiently above the authorized allotment of my water Another open circuit stripped of recreation and reverse psychology to counteract the pangs of my crying nostrils
Without forbidden water I'm a fresh sponge slave to this sense-shredding musical of mucus
I require no feverous reminders of my role as caretaker of quiet revolutions
I see the sun thinning on the grater of shadow I see molasses season on the brook gelling up the current and I see no one enlightened by the discipline of my Byronic quietude
Is that a valid reason to rescind my water while I work?
Should the clouds of the hour pass rain the frost I babysit shall make the mock a challenge No illegal alien season will saturate the white wall of my prescribed duties I'll make the brook a mantle for the fuzzy ornaments of winter and blow off all insinuations of aquatic indiscretions
Then I'll wait with tongue tied willingly with anxious pride for a thirst-drowning glass of apology
Thank you Avy, I'm glad you do like it :D Of course It wouldn't be me without the inclusion of some cryptic bits right? ;) I wrote the fourth stanza looking out at the brook that literally flows through my backyard...the current gets increasingly slower as it gets colder, until it's frozen solid...Byronic? Quiet, moody, introverted, self-absorbed, you get the idea haha
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Molasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I kn.. read moreMolasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I know I know... Lord Byron haha
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Haha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P .. read moreHaha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P I guess I'm inclined to make everyone aware of my Byronism these days...I wasn't sure if that was a word but I checked and it is, so hooray for Byronism :D
Thank you Avy, I'm glad you do like it :D Of course It wouldn't be me without the inclusion of some cryptic bits right? ;) I wrote the fourth stanza looking out at the brook that literally flows through my backyard...the current gets increasingly slower as it gets colder, until it's frozen solid...Byronic? Quiet, moody, introverted, self-absorbed, you get the idea haha
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11 Years Ago
Molasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I kn.. read moreMolasses season is what threw me.... fall I guess? Haha idk.. wasn't really thinking I suppose. I know I know... Lord Byron haha
11 Years Ago
Haha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P .. read moreHaha yeah that was just the metaphor that came to mind seeing the brook evolve from water to ice :P I guess I'm inclined to make everyone aware of my Byronism these days...I wasn't sure if that was a word but I checked and it is, so hooray for Byronism :D
Ahhh that second stanza is brilliant. I honestly cannot grasp the fourth though....sigh. But, I got the rest and understood it all anyways (score!). So, great piece. :)
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11 Years Ago
Haha the fourth stanza is about the coming of Winter ;) Thank you Avy, I'm glad you liked and unders.. read moreHaha the fourth stanza is about the coming of Winter ;) Thank you Avy, I'm glad you liked and understood it :)
Coleridge...oh... you shed some knowledge of these poet.... i didn't know about him until i read him in wiki..:D i like the dedication... the depth of your work is to be admire... a puzzling scene you painted makes me think hard until i fall asleep...lol just joking... this is so vivid and well manage imagery that blows the mind off the board.. :D
great work my friend.
Thank you so much :D There's something about this guy that I just relate to...even my online name c.. read moreThank you so much :D There's something about this guy that I just relate to...even my online name came from one of his poems lol But I'm equally impressed that you took the time to look him up...I'm glad I was able to inspire that kind of response...many thanks again :D
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your most welcome... I'm glad you liked my a bit funny response :D... i see he inspires u... and by .. read moreyour most welcome... I'm glad you liked my a bit funny response :D... i see he inspires u... and by the way... hypno is my favorite Psychic pokemon... hehe..
11 Years Ago
Oh that's cool lol I seem to have a thing for the Psychics, I don't know why :P
Coleridge's ghost is going to need an extra helping of white powdered sugar donuts to see him through this read. I'm trying to choose between Picasso or Andy Warhol but it's beyond even that analogy. That there is a theme in the madness, to be sure, but what ward and what medication to administer to the naive and unassuming - that is the frightening question. It's like Rod Serling's into to the Twilight Zone, played in reverse and no preparation of spinning vinyl backwards under hallucinogenic seems likely to help. There is a subtle anger, perhaps seasoned with indifference that gnaws at the impatient awaiting that satisfying apology. The Sons of the Pioneers croon in the background, "Keep a searching Dan, ... water. Cool, clear water." The battery is dead. Long live the battery.
Haha how do I put it now...I wrote this after reading Frost At Midnight for the zillionth time with .. read moreHaha how do I put it now...I wrote this after reading Frost At Midnight for the zillionth time with a 90+ degree fever and heavy rain pounding on my roof...one of these days I swear I'm gonna rhyme "Byronic" and "ironic"...I'm shocked I haven't done it yet...something about Coleridge always makes me melancholy though, even without the ungodly fever and all...I'm sure his water brought out a lot of anger, indifference, impatience et al. But that's an artist right? haha Profession of eternal starving :P I do spin a lot of vinyl interestingly enough, though I listened to Stairway To Heaven backwards once and it made "Paul Is Dead" sound a lot jollier than it ever did beforehand...
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
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