ISOLATION STORM

11 20 01 - 11 13 12

A storm had its way with us.  So engulfed we were for so long that the weatherman did not report it, unaware that we were in there, and assuming no one wanted to be informed of a storm over nothing.  The rocks of our weathered foundations, washing up on neighbors' shores, finally lured senses to our existence.  The snow at first came to us as children would, innocent and pure as its crystalline make-up would suggest, tugging our attention with sporadic sprinklings of our lawns like light visitations of dandruff, only to dissolve in playful mischief by the time we had finished work.  Later it seemed as though the snow had sprouted from the ground.  We saw the stolid glare of the sleek white walls before us but never saw or heard the process of construction taking place.  It tarnished our notion of construction as something noisy and obstructionist.  We shuddered for so many years in the cold that was walled in with us in our snowbound state, but have since come to the realization that snow (like children) is utterly harmless, so we would have been okay.

Author's Note

My third published piece :) (White Ash Literary Magazine, Issue 2)

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a brillianat piece of short form. It's plain-spoken enough to understand and abstract enough to give us an idea of what that storm is like from your perspective. I like short-form that gives us a nice window into what that day was like and what that person felt.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, I'd like to do more of this kind of stuff but it's one of those things that can't be forced and has to come on its own...

[Castonovia]

Definitely should leave it... sounds like there could be more, so intrigueing and vivid as it is. Almost like a cliffhanger, wanting to know more. Nature such a force to be reckoned with at times ;)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much, I actually tried to stretch it out but I kept coming back to these lines...I think there are a number of natures this one could be applied to ;) I have decided to leave it as is though in light of some good reviews it has gotten :)

[Castonovia]

Oh okay, and no problem :p

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Brilliant

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks^^

[Dark Butterfly]

i loved it! beautifully brafted! amazing imagery! great job!
100/100
:)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much :D

[Pax]

its coming along smoothly....its already beautifully crafted... U amaze me with your imagery...

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for the support^^

[That_Girl]

"The snow at first came to us as children would, innocent and pure as its crystalline make-up would suggest, tugging our attention with sporadic sprinklings of our lawns like light visitations of dandruff, only to dissolve in playful mischief by the time we had finished work. Later it seemed as though the snow had sprouted from the ground."

That was my favorite part. Yes, I know it is like 1/3 of the piece but I don't care lol

The entire thing is filled to the bring with imagery and deep meaning. Well done.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you kindly...It's kind of constructed that way, to work like one long run-on sentence, so I'm glad to know you liked at least a third of it ;)

[That_Girl]

Oh shush! I liked the whole thing. :p

[kublakhan27]

:D

[gombeggar]

nice imagery and alternate meanings in here...looks like this could be the spark of a much larger piece of work that u r sitting on...at least a novella

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much...I am toying with that idea so there's a chance it will get extended in the future.

[Hamza]

the way you relate each situation with the common and familiar things .. marvelous..

snow is harmless yet it is the deadliest weapon mother nature possesses ...
snowstorms do cause havoc and we have witnessed them here too ..
your descriptions provide beautiful imagery ...

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :) Winter can be tough but it is my favourite season from a creative standpoint so I was certainly trying to explore that double meaning^^