The lonely boy knows The feelings of the haystack needle The fear of the pawn at the knees of the king The cower of the lowly Baltic under the massive Boardwalk The shadowy edge of night life The friends who defy loneliness with seeming ease The schizophrenic cyberspace The isolation of the ace
The lonely boy wonders If a man is a man who writes of daffodils If there is a partner for everyone If the partner's half a world away If there is something wrong with him If lonely girls exist If love is true or just fictitious If he's tendered or just vicious
this write has touched my very core. it speaks of the many lessons i have learned from the many nuances of love and life's experiences. it also ponders many of the questions which haunt and plague my very existence. i don't think i have ever read anything more beautiful and profound by your pen...awesome. nice accompanying song by journey, i would like to suggest another by them from the Trial By Fire album "it's not the rain".....enjoy
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much my friend...just as this poem is significant and relevant for you, it is the same .. read moreThank you so much my friend...just as this poem is significant and relevant for you, it is the same for me all these years later, as I still find myself asking the same questions...I remember when that album came out but never heard it, I will certainly look it up though...but I can't thank you enough for reading and sharing feelings that are not easy to share...you are a friend indeed.
11 Years Ago
khan, it is, in my opinion, the best album Journey ever made...so many great love songs, and so beau.. read morekhan, it is, in my opinion, the best album Journey ever made...so many great love songs, and so beautifully written and produced....check it out.
11 Years Ago
I remember when it came out...it was a bit of comeback album for them and I remember the reviews bei.. read moreI remember when it came out...it was a bit of comeback album for them and I remember the reviews being very good, so I'll definitely be looking it up...I do have that greatest hits and Escape on vinyl though ;)
11 Years Ago
you'll thank me later, my friend....i know you're gonna love it.
I've been reading a lot of your work tonight--it's highly addicting--and not feeling the need to comment on each piece I've read, but this one is just so good I had to take a minute and tell you that.
Thank you, I do appreciate that :) I'm helping a friend with an assignment tonight but I certainly p.. read moreThank you, I do appreciate that :) I'm helping a friend with an assignment tonight but I certainly plan on visiting your catalog as well, so I'll add you to my subscription list for now and will stop by soon :)
12 Years Ago
...do I need to hurry up and clean the place up?? *laugh* Thank you so much; I look forward to your.. read more...do I need to hurry up and clean the place up?? *laugh* Thank you so much; I look forward to your views...
12 Years Ago
LOL No that's okay, I'm as much of a mess as anything :P
Nice repetition of the first words. It really keeps the piece together. Everything ties together with the emotional theme in a way that is very compelling.
I'd be tempted to turn "The feelings of the haystack needle" to "haystack'd needle", but that might just be me being too whimsical.
I am rather impressed that you wrote stuff this good 12 years ago. I am minded to eat your delicious, nutritious brains to gain these powers.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
I am honoured to hear that, as I posted it as kind of a whim with no preconceived notions of how it .. read moreI am honoured to hear that, as I posted it as kind of a whim with no preconceived notions of how it would come across :) I did consider touching it up, which may or may not have led to haystack being haystack'd, but I decided to stick with the Hail Mary approach...of course, that's not to say I won't go back to it :)
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
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