MAIDEN VOYAGE

05 05 11

Oh how the greenery
of your embedded scenery
siren-whipped
the voyage of a young tongue,
drained of the froth of ambition,
and spin-cycled through hot-decibled
Krakens of over-achievements
and poor judgements.

Dry and abrasive as an obvious pun,
I scaled your lilac estate of purple and white.
Now with your audience laid out before my dead end,
I come to you a guilty boy,
having milked the innocence of goosebump fishing
in the salt-tickled rills
of your flannel estuary.

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

So many wild images here -

spin-cycled through hot-decibled
Krakens of over-achievements
and poor judgements...

Ah, the indiscretions of the past... For some reason, as I read "I come to you a guilty boy..." I thought of George Michael's line "Guilty feet have got no rhythm..." As always, you give my imagination a much-needed workout, Steve!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I hadn't thought of that line my friend...so glad I could kickstart your imagination, thank you Rita :)

[Traci]

Tender words, beautiful imagery. Definitely a favorite, my friend. Loved it :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much Traci :)

[ms. barrie]

I have to say Mr. Steve, that this beautiful gem of a poem has to be one of my favorites
on here! Simply breath-taking, amazing imagery of
exquisite fantastical romance weaved through out this write. I agree: WOW, indeed!
This is just too stunning to say the least! favs. 100/100

[kublakhan27]

You always make me smile with your reviews Miss Barrie...so glad you enjoyed this one considering it's three years old...I've kind of lost my voice in the last few weeks so I started revisiting some of my old ones to rekindle my creativity...the jury's still out on that, but I'm glad this has been well-received, especially enough to have people consider it a favourite...thanks again my dear friend :)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Mr. Steve, this was a pleasure to read...definitely
Awakens one's imagination, takes them away for a bit! Your voice, your pen
Will soon start blazing with those ink drops, soon enough! It's a gorgeous
Write...So of course it's been well received! Be well, my dear friend! :)

[kublakhan27]

I certainly hope so my friend haha It will come around, I just don't know when...all the best to you Miss Barrie :)

[ms. barrie]

Thank you, Mr. Steve....I hear you, I think when you don't
Think about it too much, "it will come" - like when you're
In the shower lol....best wishes to you as well! :)

[Frieda P]

Oh wow this was BB, before Benji, and you've still have Krakens and sirens embedded in your poetic bliss, you were always an abstract freak Stevearoo. Ha, it's a bit stirring with a quirky jive to it, but then again, who'd not expect that from Dali's pen? Guilty boys have all the fun it seems, 'flannel estuary' now I'm going to worry about you my friend. ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I find myself at a loss for words trying to explain this one now Mrs.R, it was so long ago haha But no, I haven't changed all that much I realize as I look back on it. How does Mrs.R feel about guilty boys? ;) Glad you enjoyed it my dear, and hope I don't worry you too much ;) xo