CLICHES ATE MY HOMEWORK

CLICHES ATE MY HOMEWORK

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Paper dolls of poorly-hewn solar patchworks
scrunch sadistically (indifferently) beneath
a drowsy main course of crunchy handwriting
cached in a honey garlic coat of
canon-friendly anecdotes and answers

Eyes and ears crash the floodgates of foreheads
like a silent auction riot for the best seats in
the amphitheater of scholastic mandates

The main event the quiet one's
vocal airbrush taming of a most
surrepititious epitaph

(Disregard him like a dying ripple
or promote him to a b*****d butler
for the Element quadruplets
parents of all history assumed
godparents of all history the future will exhume)

Letters climb in time proportionate
to the ascending accolades for the acoustics
in proportion to laments on the red performer's
sinking opportunity to tune his spirit
and remix an elementally eternal either/or

© 2012 kublakhan27


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Very well done. I love the complex rhyming scheme and meanings within the messages of your rhyming poem. Very well pinned. Man keep that up. I know their are some hungry publishers out there waiting for more of you got to offer. Great work. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thanks very much :) I haven't found the hungry ones yet but I'll keep looking lol
haha cute and i enjoyed it so much ...thanks for sharing this

Posted 12 Years Ago


kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

No problem :)
My dog ate mine ;) haha. Great poem steve :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Haha :P Glad you like it Kels :)
I have to say the words here are rather, I am not sure what is the word I am looking for :). I like the write, it is all over the place, but in a good way, like a mind gone made. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but it had my mind racing for sure. I do like the descriptions, vivid as always, and yes word choice again not sure how to describe. I read down below that you were maybe struggling with writers block? Well you sure seem to have overcome it here :) Thank you for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you so much...I've been a little down lately, so hearing that means a lot :)
The Random Writings Of Me..Kates

12 Years Ago

I feel you on the down part, anything you want me to read, send away! I get a lot of read requests s.. read more
kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thanks so much, that means a lot :) I'm sure there are I few decent ones I can send over lol :)
The manifestation of the infamous inability to form an idea or a context? Block? You admitted to have been there presently but this doesn't seem to prove it, lol. As writers always write, divine inspiration always manifests. The body burns out so as the brain. Could it be called an inability then? Or the divine exhaustion? =D Nice write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Haha thank you, and that's ok, I value all your comments :) I regret sending this out as a RR now t.. read more
Androglossia

12 Years Ago

Insecure seems to be an inappropriate term, lol. We write whatever comes to the mind and we write to.. read more
kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Yes it does, but I really have felt that way for a long time...I can't explain it...but your encoura.. read more
I tried... I really, really did. I struggled with saying something like, "I'm sorry. I failed Entrails Reading class." Then the last five lines whispered a rhyme... something about time and then I surmised it to be a form of message-in-a-bottle, cast adrift upon a sea of words in the hope that someone would mark the authors delicate situation and send rescue.

I have to hand it to you... while I have no clue what it is, I do recognize it as one magnificent pile of words. Nicely done! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Thank you^^
Heh, awesome imagery. :P It's ingenious. I like the flow, it works really well. The poem feels sort of dark as well. Good job! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Many thanks :D
Admiral Kirk

12 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)

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Added on July 24, 2012
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Tags: paper, dolls, solar, handwriting, canon, anecdotes, scholastic, epitaph, history

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review. www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..

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