SONNET 101

This is not the one hundred and first sonnet I've ever written, it's the first. The style is Shakespearean, and the title is a reference to Room 101, the interrogation room in Orwell's "1984." 04 12

Miracles hide their realism in
the shelf life of biodegradable
skin threads, a proud feat in light of how thin
it strains to not be seen available
by all who ever wished upon a star
or snuffed a candle in the name of hope.
It knows the sole place where the answers are:
a room of two fiends and a misanthrope.
Blood's twins, seamstresses of judgement's fabric
and the Miss with the guillotine for thread
fetched from the shelf of life in syllabic
shrugs by her sisters, fitters of the dead.

Miracles are cooing one-way changelings
given realism for their playthings.

Reviews

[Belle]

A three quatrain with a rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF followed by a couplet ending (which normally summarizes the whole content of the piece) with a rhyme scheme of GG. Syllabic meter is Pentameter ( five foot each line), not quite sure about the accents for I am not really good in Scansion. I can not yet clearly identify Accentual Meter for me to say fairly that it followed the Iambic accentual pattern. But definitely this is a Shakespearean Sonnet--one of the most fascinating form. I AM IMPRESSED!! :))

How funny, when I submitted my Solemn Burn in the Rain poem for book publication I titled it with a SONNET 11 though it was not my eleventh, it was my first actually!

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes I did deviate from the accentual pattern a bit in some places, but in terms of the meter and the rhyme scheme, I was very careful to make sure I got those right, cuz those are essentially the points that define the Shakespearean form moreso than the accents. It took a lot of work to piece it all together but I felt good about it when it was done :) So thank you for the comments, and I'm glad you liked it so much :D

[Belle]

Ah- nah. I thank you for I enjoyed reading this much! :D
Working with form really needs time and amount of patience, but you are so right, the level of blissfulness is totally different when the piece is done. :D... I am thrilled to read more from you!

P.S. I see you are into English Literature.
I am just done reading Molière's Tartuffe which I think you are most familiar with :D :D . It is a play, yes it is supposed to be watch not
read ( LOL) but the theme and the intellectual value is very engaging so I took time to read especially that no staging of this play has been or will ever occurred in my country:)).... Just made me think how'd you find Molière as Shakespeare's contemporary...

[kublakhan27]

:D I'm somewhat embarrassed to say it but even though I've heard much about Moliere I haven't actually read the play, though I certainly intend to look it up now in light of what you've told me...I have no doubt that it is something that will certainly resonate with me :D I've gotten kind of lax with my reading in the last year or so cuz of various issues but I'm slowly trying to catch up now, and this is certainly one of the things I will look for :D I have written a few pieces that are inspired by Shakespeare though...but I would definitely be honoured if you checked out more of my stuff...thanks again for the support and the info :D

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Kudos to you, my friend...a Shakespearean Sonnet indeed! Let me begin this by saying that I do NOT enjoy writing these things; had to muddle through an entire semester in college dedicated to this stuff and I completely sucked at it...horribly so. With that said, you followed the rules, as far as I can tell, and that is commendable.

Now a word on the content...brilliant! Totally awesome, loved it...love Orwell, the idea was fantastic. Can I say "fantastic" in another way? 1984 was a scary bit of writing indeed. Sheesh, what a world that was "fantasized" and now these things are actually happening...scary. So, kudos to you. I'm totally impressed right now, as you have done something I could not have done!

[kublakhan27]

Wow, you've left me truly speechless with your kind words my friend :) I've written one more of these since, which I think you did see, but I have no intention of making a habit of it ;)

1984 continues to creep me out increasingly with the passing of time, and it seemed to fit with the fates theme here so I put them together...mind you, I highly doubt that I could do something poetically that you can't ;)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Creeps me out too! As for the write...I loved it, but I think I enjoyed it most because I hate this form and was never any good at making anything coherent in said form. lol

[kublakhan27]

When I started scribbling ideas down for this piece, I noticed I had a few lines that fit the format and I just went from there...actually the final couplet was where this whole thing started :P otherwise, you'd probably never see one of these from me haha

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Sorry, Kubi. I wanted to review this but just didn't feel qualified. I procrastinated and it was well I did. Belle provided the essence of my review of the form. The only thing I was going to point out was the accent deviations but as mentioned, those are minor issues if we disregard the alternating between unstressed and stressed syllables. However, I think the couplet summation is real boggler (NAW - not a word) for me. I like the meaty vocabulary though; now if I can just find some condiment for the steak fries.

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's alright...a great deal has been made about my accent issue but I really don't know why cuz if one was to go through Shakespeare's sonnets, very few of them follow the accent pattern to perfection. But it seems to be the only thing that's been problematic for the people that have offered reviews, and everything else has been really well-recieved, so that's all that matters to me :) As long as you like it, that's the important part lol :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Rest assured, I _did_ like it! :o)

[kublakhan27]

:D

[Poison Ivy]

absolutely gorgeous!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much :)

[Cerise]

Awww...very wonderfully written....:)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :)

[Ella]

I love this, very well written, you created a beautiful image. I envy you for your writing abilities.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much, and don't be too envious, this was HARD to write lol :P

[Ella]

I bet it was, I can say it was well worth it! :D Still envious :3

[kublakhan27]

:D

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

wow, can't even put into words how profound this is,great write.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, that means a lot to hear that^^

[B-poet]

Nice depicted images. Emphatic, poignant, and illustrative diction. Good originality as well. Great poem. :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks :)

[afra]

awesome i love it ...one of ur best ...well done

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, that means a lot^^