MY FAVOURITE MYSTERY

05 20 12

The coming of my sense of mystery
will not be undone in tune
with the liberation dance your skin
executes on the carcass of
your hardline clothing

The only mystery
I conjure from the uniformity
of man's and woman's anatomies
is where your line of vision will reside
when I come with mind-sharpened shear
to pluck the sweet roots
of your virgin vineyard

My ascending ecstasy will not stumble
should you keep your vision to yourself
in compensation for the lid
you let me peel like an orange
in the sunlight of fundamental Eden

Should you keep your vision to yourself
mine will be fulfilled by any hint of
synergy between your breathing mouth
and my jackhammering hips
or the textural strobe lights
of my seeking palms and the
follow-through of my corralling fingers

All I strive for in the sheet
swaddling your goosebumped shell
is illuminating clues from the
smuggling of your fugitive desire

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

i love how your words were able to spin a web of such tender lascivious imagery that
burns in minds and sets one's imagination on fire.

incredible use of language...very unique in depicting one's awakening desires... that aches
to finally be quenched.

simply a brilliant write, Mr. K. -- i agree it's definitely gotten hotter in here lol!
thanks for sharing! :)

[kublakhan27]

Nice to see you again Miss Barrie :) So glad you enjoyed this piece...not much I can say about it really, it's all in the poem haha Let's just say it feels good to get these things out once in a while...thank you as always my friend :)

[ms. barrie]

Aw, thank you Steve, it's nice seeing you again as well :) -- I very much enjoyed it indeed!
oh it's definitely all in the poem haha! It's a great write and a pleasure to read. I hear
you on that lol -- you're very welcome, my friend. :))

[s y e]

Well..., wow. Think you've just blown me away, hon. I am speechless, this was a great write. Your description is... Erm.. Very, very descriptive, ha.

I liked it!

~ Noodle.

[kublakhan27]

Haha oh I've got lots of descriptive ones, I just haven't written any in a while, and I never have the guts to feature or RR the ones that are there...this one is definitely high up on the descriptiveness list though ;P Glad you liked it my dear :)

[s y e]

You should! We want more!!!! :-)

Always a pleasure!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'll pick one out soon ;)

[s y e]

Woo!

[Ken Simm.]

The nystery of what she is compounded wwith the mystery of what she is thinking. Perfectly formed and multi layered throguhout.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much^^

[KAOlmsted]

It's my favorite mystery, too...(minus the u, sorry *laugh*) We're all naked under our clothes and, honestly, it shouldn't be that alluring a mystery, but it is, isn't it? I wonder what you look like naked, you wonder what I look like naked, we ALL wonder what Baby Ricochet looks like naked xD It's just human nature. I like the way you said it, though...it seems less creepy coming from you ;-)

xoxo

[kublakhan27]

I think there is a mystery behind all things intimate, even (maybe especially) the lovemaking itself...but it is indeed human nature, and I'm glad it didn't creep you out, the poem or the "u" haha Thanks love ;)

[KAOlmsted]

Ha ;-) Living with The Brit there is an abundance of 'u's in my vocabulary...just can't bring myself to write it...seems pretentious coming from a bloody yank xD Always my pleasure, Steve...but perhaps I was being too subtle? I really do wonder what you look like naked *laugh* (I haven't made you blush in a while; couldn't resist) ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha *blush* maybe I was being too subtle too, if you know what I mean ;) Actually most people up here don't ever bother with the "u" either so I wouldn't worry about it haha xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

Frieda is going to tell us to get a room xD

[kublakhan27]

Haha and I'll ask if she's coming along, just like last time one of you said that right? ;D

[Frieda P]

Not without me, I'm not. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha ;P

[Frieda P]

What would we do, peel like oranges and read each other's poetry aloud? ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

...among other things ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Sounds like a plan, or two plans if you will ;)

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure if you just made love to me or smacked me across the face Steve, either way, it's enthralling and if you unpeeled like an orange in my virgin vineyard it's all good. ;-)

Is this like death of a ladies man? Just saying...! x

Outstanding, as always my dear.

[kublakhan27]

Woooo...I like this review better than the poem itself ;) Perhaps it's me imagining I'm a ladies' man, or I was reading him at the time, this one is a bit older now so I can't remember haha Whatever the case I'm happy to know that Mrs.R approves ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Woo, what a response, and you know it's always my pleasure completely doll 'ahem', also I get to be your featured review, so another woo. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

LOL Yes, I am a doll aren't I? ;D I'm glad to see your review up there too ;)

[Frieda P]

Chuckling here, you know what I mean. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

I do, I do ;P

[EMMIE]

Oh, wow. All of your poetry has like the perfect flow and this concept is very unique definitely something that really needs to be heard. You are so creative with the subject and the imagery is out of this world!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Emmie, that means a lot :) Trust me, these things don't come overnight...I haven't mentioned this too often, but I rarely write more than one stanza on any given day, and I've been known to spend several days on two or three lines. It probably sounds like a boast but it isn't...in fact, it's the opposite, as I don't consider myself a natural writer on the basis of these methods of mine haha :P

[EMMIE]

Well every writer is different but at the end of the day hard work shows. Don't look at it as being stuck look at it as taking your time to do some justice and perfection to some unique idea ;)

[kublakhan27]

I will certainly keep that thought in mind :)