Tree

TREE

Oh beautiful tree

standing tall with branches wide open

your branches linked with the forest

your branches growing together

you branches bonding together

Oh beautiful tree

you bark so strong

your barks strength stands unchallenged, unmatched

you tree has seen your enemies ax many times

yet you tree have stood against the test of time

a sign of hope for all the world to see

a sign of strength and power

oh if the world only knew

Oh beautiful tree

your secret so dark

your pain so great

the world see your size as your strength

however, where the world can't see, the truth remains hidden

hidden in a place where no eye can see and no ear can hear

oh poor tree if only the world could see

the nightly terror of fallen friends

but you tree bare a much worse fate

you tree bare the mark of death

you tree bare the curse

the curse of everlasting life

oh what a beautiful tree

Reviews

[fiery-san]

Such a rare subject you've chosen, I don't often get to read environment friendly work...

but may I suggest to recheck your work for grammar errors because it has a tendency to confuse the reader and disrupt the flow of the poem... (your use of you and your got a bit mixed up... you should show possession like this... enemies' instead on enemies alone because this denotes a plural form)... also, may I suggest on to repeat the same word too much because it has a tendency to sound redundant which alters the atmosphere of the poem...

Btw, really like the last lines "you tree bare the curse... the curse of everlasting life... oh what a beautiful tree"

I hope to see more of your works soon as you continue to write and improve your style... ^_^

[wantabe2013]

thanks much, yeah this was just a rough draft. Thanks much for your thoughts an opinon.

[wantabe2013]

thanks for reading it. I wrote it after a bad break up when I felt i lost something I'd never get back. I never knew if it was any good.

[kimmy]

I have to admit I like this poem very much. Everything flows together just right and I love how you can talk about nature, killing of other trees. This was a wonderful read:)