drug captive

My look at a drug/alcholo addicts life

Took 2 pills but no more thrills still trying to roll up a downwards hill cant even face myself still young but cleary im already halway to hell when you look in my eyes you can probably tell im trapped in my own personal cell doing mental pull ups because pulls have always allowed me to get my ups when I think my sentence is up I see those red and blue lights in the mirror of my pickup truck dont wanna be a victim of the mase again but whoever I befriend they just see me as a hopeless kid just killing time to my next bid so when they say hi I just say by my life is wasted and so am I

Author's Note

My first poem critique it as you may would enjoy tips

Reviews

[hannah]

"took 2 pills but no more thrills
still trying to roll up a downwards hill
cant even face myself
still young but clearly i'm already halfway to hell"

this is such an emotional piece, i love its rawness and honesty, and the way it depicts being trapped in yourself -- i really felt the pain and desperation but also the innocence and sadness within your words... great job.

"so when they say hi
i just say bye
my life is wasted
and so am i"

[SonOfaSailor]

Hello, first off I'd like to say that this poem would be much easier to read if it was in a format like hannah put it into. Although it is definitely a great piece of writing.

I can more than relate to this. I've gone through something similar and it took a lot of work to pull me out of it (from myself and others).

I hope you're doing well, and you're obviously doing well with expressing your troubles through writing :) Great job