White Lies

He didn't bother trying for her,
For he did not expect her to love him as such.

When she told him,
He fell for it,and he fell hard.
Heart beat faster,
Mind stumbled like a pack of cards.

She said she loved him,
He mattered to her most,
White lies is all she ever told,
White lies that left him cold.

"I never loved you", she blurts,
She has no idea how much it hurts,
She says she wants to be friends,
For this has been the new trend-
Befriend someone whose broken heart you can't mend.

White lies is all she ever told,
White lies he believed.
White lies is all she ever told,
White lies that left him cold.

Author's Note

Poem the second.
PS: A few lines kinda sound more depressing than they actually are.

Reviews

[Tom McRoberts]

Strong message here. Would be interesting for you to explore the phrase itself, 'white lie', keeping in mind blackness/emptiness etc. As it stands though, I love how lines from midway in the poem are repeated in your final stanza. It adds a real weight and significance to them. Great stuff, keep it up!

[John L. Blackman]

I can relate to this poem, it captures the feeling well.

[Kshitij Gupta]

Yes, thank you :)

[C.C.Summerwit]

I am not the best for critiquing poems as they are out of my realm. But I can say this is a poem a lot of people can relate too.

[Kshitij Gupta]

Thank you so much :)

[Sydney]

This is pretty good! My only comment is that there is a lot of pronouns. I would work on finding other ways to write the lines without using so many pronouns.. but that can be difficult. Very good though, keep it up

[Kshitij Gupta]

Ah thanks a lot, I'll try to improve upon it in my next poem.

[Sydney]

I think my poem "Gunfire" relates to this, you should check is out :)

[Andrea Flores]

Wow! Strong for only your second one. Loved it!

[Kshitij Gupta]

Thank you ^_^

[Perkele.7885]

No jitters for you. Strong second addition. Good luck on number 3

[Kshitij Gupta]

Thanks a lot :)

[613]

This poem was written so well. This actually reminds me of a friend I used to have; kind of sad.

- Brittney

[Kshitij Gupta]

Thanks. Yes,it is depressing indeed.

[613]

You're welcome.