kill

kill

A Poem by carmz
"

a surprise for you

"
heart breaks
brain aches
as you think of those mistakes

wrong things have done
is that known by everyone?
when will forgiveness come?

what is your will
is that to kill or to be killed
by your special someone





© 2010 carmz


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carmz
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Well killing the special someone may be extreme. Poem is direct and to the point. The strong lines led to a very interesting ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah. now see, this is a very good poem! you finally have something you wish to talk about, and you expressed it wonderfully. Congratulations this was really good!
The last stanza was great!

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great last verse. Really strong. This is so succinct and yet thoughtful. I like it. Especially the title.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wheeee......ka hah well tenchu jejeje patoinx ka dw dyan

Posted 14 Years Ago


Lovely rhymes!
This poem is fast-paced and exciting. Suspenseful even.
Keep it up Carmz!

Lex

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

just making a sample hehehehehe................

Posted 14 Years Ago



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