the difference between minutes and moments

Blue jeaned and shirtless

I sit wasting not only minutes, but

Moments, feeling nothing

 

Grey plushed skyline

Is like sleep pushing at my eyes

Lines of static fighting back

 

I can almost hear your

Presence elsewhere; stories you

Used to tell to impress

 

My a new boys eyes, and

You'll kiss him bold, f**k

Him on the first date, and

 

Everyday after that. I'll still

Be sitting on a couch watching clouds

And that will be that

Reviews

[Janesy]

strong piece. I especially like the last line.

[Rachelah]

This reminds me very much of lines I read a long time ago. "I'm sick of writing every song about you."
It's amazing how just one line can hold so much emotion.
In this piece, I think its, "And that will be that."
Certainly my favorite line today.

[kaycee]

really beautiful. i loved the lines
"You'll kiss him bold, f**k
Him on the first date"

[angelina neves]

very powerful images and beautifully done.
there are many times in life that we have to "Be sitting on a couch watching clouds" as we can't do anything else, as much as we would like to do it... And in a way, it is a time to "reflect" and learn something new... I hope! :)

[Rachel DeHart]

This is really powerful.
I love this stanza.
"My a new boys eyes, and

You'll kiss him bold, f**k

Him on the first date, and"

I don't know something about the imagery of the sky so beautiful then mixed with the vulgarity of first date sex.

Anyway, before I ramble more, Great poem.

[LanaBell]

I really liked it ^__^

[Last Lying Look]

This is a great piece of work!
I love the sadness in this.
It seems as though the guy in the poem has just given in.
I have days like that.
Hopefully everything turns around for the guy.
-E.M.R