lying on the lawn of a hospital town

Only Edgar Allen Poe

Would know

             Right now

 

Why this bottle of wine

I bought is s**t and sweet

             To the point

 

Of making me sick
Or why the sky is as black

 

As his backdoor friend, or

Why the frost seems to creep

 

F a  r   th e  r

Up the glass on nights

          Spent alone

 

But only You and Jesus

Know why i am alone in the

                 First place

 

Reviews

[Rachel DeHart]

Wow. There is so much here, so many different aspects that it would be hard to point them all out after a first read. :]

But I love these lines
"F a r th e r
Up the glass on nights
Spent alone"

I can just see an empty room with a heavy quilt pulled up over a shivering lone body, a window with frost crawling up it while moonlight pours in.
An amazing write!

[Leah Maldonado]

Right now is crossed out...like right now is never true because the moment you say it, it's gone.
really great overall poem. I liked the layout, and the ideas.

Why the frost seems to creep



F a r th e r

Up the glass on nights

Spent alone

these lines are so great..they gave an eerie sad feeling to the reader.
awesome
leah

[Last Lying Look]

Pure Perfection.
I love this.
Especially the title.
It was truly genius. Excellent work :)

-E.M.R