i know when you're alone you don't think of him, you think of me, tell me you think of me

Burt's Bees, and
A better understanding
Of what sea strung
Cold can do to skin

Let alone eyes, and
Heart


I need a drink and
It's only three in the afternoon
And this tee shirt wrapped around
This ribcage is little shelter from
The cold

Even when paired with henley and
Hoody; jacket and hat

My body shakes as i take
Another step into nothing, thinking
Of you across a continent or two

You, lying half naked in the afternoon
Black underwear and a cup of tea, do you
Walk to a window framed winter
And think of me?
 

Reviews

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

another excellent piece, love it

[*SacredWriter*]

Aww this is a really nice poem

"You, lying half naked in the afternoon
Black underwear and a cup of tea, do you
Walk to a window framed winter
And think of me?"

This stanza was very well-written. The title is very interesting. I had that happen to me once. I liked this guy who had a gf, but he would always look at me differently and always talked to me and even when he was with her he would stare at me strangely and I always knew he was thinking of me (obviously) lol but that sort of infatuation always leads to trouble and confusion. Anyway great poem.

[Rachel DeHart]

This is amazingly original. I really really enjoyed this stanzas
"My body shakes as i take
Another step into nothing, thinking
Of you across a continent or two

You, lying half naked in the afternoon
Black underwear and a cup of tea, do you
Walk to a window framed winter
And think of me?"

I love the imagery throughout the entire poem, but enjoy it most in those last two stanza.
Keep up the amazing work.

[Rachelah]

I love the mention of Burt's Bees! I am not complete without it. I've found that most boys don't like the tingles from it though...
I liked the imagery in this. It was very clear what you meant, and that was nice. Too many writers try to be mysterious, and I prefer straight-forward.
A good read!
And thanks for the review. ;)

[LacyBug]

I liked this! Keep up the good work!

LacyBug :)