Distilled Spirits

Carpe diem! Clock is ticking!
Out of carmine bottle lying
A distilled spirit of carouse
Intoxicating chant of lavished dose

Cheroot's brush painted in chiaroscuro
Pitched yarn, an astral body
Chianti mist, frigate of soul
Asudden blandished into scoundrel fowl

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

good use of meter and ryhme to tell this fire-side tale. Great job on your poem

[JENY]

Spooky…lines…!!!
Charming….
Loved it….the arrangement of words….and the entire pattern….

Wow, this is definitely a well written poem. The flow is great and it definitely paints a picture in your minds eye.

Keep up the fantastic work!

[wolfshrew]

beautifully constructed, its obvious you know what you're doing.

[Clockwork]

I really like how your work mixes beauty with a rhythm and an aggression that is influenced by heavy music. This piece that a metal vibe in the first few lines that steadily become more mellow and a bit softer to show the transition into the world of spirits.

I like how you encode the messages about spirits and spirit consumption as the piece continued.

[Ruth]

Each line literally bleeding into the next! Wow!
This is excellent love, I really adore this kind of wording, impact!
Great poem
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem was a great pleasure to read. I love words. The language made the poem a field trip into poetry. Every line strong and with purpose. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bard Constantine]

Interesting to read. It appears you're a fan of language. Nothing wrong in that, but if overly done the risk is a lack of understanding by the casual reader who doesn't care to use a dictionary. Just a thought; finely written overall.

[Liz-z]

"Cheroot's brush painted in chiaroscuro
Pitched year, an astral body"

"..., frigate of soul"
I loved it. amazing write! :D