Ode To The Summer Wind ( In Hours Before I Sleep )

Gentle sleep, this shiver, a sweet embrace.
Sweet as nectar on budding rose of May.
From a window, a wind as sweet invisibly traced
Though the night is a long road we find
Memory surging, but this night is blind.

Oh Summer Wind! at night you taught us love.
Who must be taught as though you thought us not.
And love unknown proposed as love forgot.
Teach not to doubt, if doubting is all we sense.
Doubt not a love, a love known intense.

Oh Summer Wind, remember us, our recollection
Dig deep into consciousness your known affection
If by remembering, it is ourselves that we remember
This cold wind brings shiver! Oh Summer Wind made me love life still
We break in the past, lying, and mesmerizing in thrill

Oh Summer Wind!, whose soul had kept unseen
Who bowed down not neither to King nor Queen
The trees who held their head up high
Have kissed, and danced with the wind passing by

Oh Summer Wind!, thou art canst make me weep!
Mine is a rhyme, make not a promise to keep!
In hours before I sleep!
I felt your love so deep!
In hours before I sleep!

Reviews

[Joanna Maharis]

This is such a beautiful piece. Your writing style here is reminiscent to that of Shakespeare. It's so deep and passionate. Very lovely, indeed.

[Liz-z]

"Memory surging, but this night is blind."
Maybe it's just me, but this line sounds familiar. I really like it! :)

Favorite Part has to be
"Oh Summer Wind, remember us, our recollection
Dig deep into consciousness your known affection
If by remembering, it is ourselves that we remember
This cold wind brings shiver!..."
Really like how it sounds... and what it says! :) Fantastically written! :D

[Dressed in Poetry]

I really enjoyed this. A few things I would recommend:

Changing the line: "Who bowed down not neither to King nor Queen"
"not neither" is a double negative, and therefore incorrect. 'Neither' by itself would be sufficient.

"thou art canst make me weep" is also technically incorrect. Thou (like thee) is a subject, not a possessive noun; thy and thine are the possessive nouns. In your case, the correct phrasing would be "thine art canst make me weep," 'thine' being used over 'thy' to make the correct liaison.

[JENY]

Loved it….
A special feeling…engulfs me…
While going through the lines….
Summer wind…
In night….
Thanks for sharing…

[J.S. Pua]

glad you posted this here, my friend..
this is my most favorite work from yours..
(first read this at fb..)
you had me at the first stanza up to last one..
amazing write..

[RJ620Win]

GOOD JOB!

[Nina Kari]

Good God dude, this was beautiful! You learn from me? More like me learn from you! This was amazing! Beautiful just beautiful. I really love the last stanza here.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very gentle and beautiful poem. I like the story in your words. I agree with you. The one hour before we go to sleep is very important. The moment where two people can find peace and calm for a moment. Memories and great dreams come to us before we close our eyes to rest. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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what a wonderful poem. Truly magical feel to it..capturing the beautiful and grace of the breeze as only in the eyes of a poet could do..lovely penned piece