Awakening

Greeted by the breaking dawn

Dogged, eager, greedy in its persistence

Its touch is radiant, bright, deliciously unadulterated

            -This is an awakening

 

Hear the wild cries of an untamed soul

As it seeks safe passage through rocky shoals

Never asking, yet with stoic grace

- Always knowing the way

 

With eyes wide open the bow plunges into uncharted waters

As Captain of this mighty vessel I swear, I will not falter

Thick layers of salt may corrode tender flesh, but I can see

-Nothing lasts forever

 

Sweet, hot breath rife with life passes Heavens lips

Peeling back my hearts cocoon leaving me exposed

I am a petulant pearl of innocence

            -Fresh as the day I was born

Author's Note

Experimental piece all the way around. Thoughts are welcome.

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

I am a petulant pearl of innocence
-Fresh as the day I was born

Certainly fighting to stay that way. A passionate write, Kristin.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I liked this one...your experimentation with form really made the impact of this one all the more gut wrenching, I think. I like those off-set lines, because they speak in a slightly different voice, which sets a nice tone. Some really great imagery too..."I am a petulant pearl of innocence"--this line alone says so much, and can be interpereted in so many ways.

In the 2nd stanza your dash got turned into a (") -- I hate when then happens in the transfer.