I Never Knew

One touch, one smile

One breath of life, just for a while

I never knew, or even had a clue

But then, I hadn't met you.

 

 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading. Reviews welcome

Photograph by Kristin Lee

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting. The idea of this piece has been done many times, but you managed to word it cleverly and concisely, which gave it a different and unique feel. I don't think you needed a lot of imagery or metaphor to develop this particular piece, it just sort of grew up on its own. The flow was nice, the beat was good, and your wording is what made the piece.

[Kristin Lee]

Thank you

[Jack...]

Perfect and perfectly said and perfectly expressed feelings in a perfect package.

You know, I think this little poem was perfect. Incase you hadn't figured that out. :)>

[Keith LaFountaine]

Ah, love. Though the topic of love is one that has been done a thousand times over, I think your take on it is certainly fresh in a sense. You don't throw a bunch of descriptive cliches at us, nor do you approach the topic as others have, but instead find 3 simple lines that describe so much, but also leave so much up to the reader. Excellent work!

[Kristin Lee]

Thank you! I am of the school of thought that love is a WAY over used topic . It's rare that I write on the topic. So to hear that something I wrote actually turned out right makes my day.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Sums up the solidity of your relationship nicely :)

[Kristin Lee]

Any relationship really, the way love has the capacity to open our eyes.

[Imara]

Very cute, something clearly written for a loved one. Your few words express so much while leaving so much to the reader at the same time. The pauses we take in reading out loud brings a new dramatic experience to it.
I think you're saying that you never realized how much one touch and one smile, all those small common thing that we see and feel everyday, you never knew how special they could be. How intimate. Until you met that special someone who made it that way. Lovely work. I love it. :)

[Kristin Lee]

Thank you, they were song lyrisc I wrote when I was very young.

[Angi]

...and all of a sudden, Bam! It hits you like a ton of bricks!

[Kristin Lee]

Exactly!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Amazing what we discover in others and we can lead our lives thinking we have lived until that one special person arrives and shows us it was all sham before. Well expressed!

[Kristin Lee]

Very true. I am loves biggest cynic, but even I have to admit. Sometimes people have the capcity to amaze us.

[icelandicblue]

We often don't know what we don't know until we do. You convey so much in this piece. It is well choreographed and speaks in volumes.

[Kristin Lee]

Thanks

[B-poet]

Very clever and poignant. Love the picture as well. The cadences of your chosen diction remains the reason why this poem is in a class of its own. Great write. :)

[Kristin Lee]

Wow! Thank you for such a great review. That means so much.
The picture is also mine :) It's kind of a hobby.

[s y e]

This was short and quirky, I really liked it. I loved the ending.

[Kristin Lee]

Thanks. Its actually lyrics to a song I wrote when I was in Jr. High, that's why the words are kind of simple...but I liked them. They fit how I was feeling as I looked at my husband.

[s y e]

Wow, it was great and makes it even more special knowing it's how you felt towards your husband. :)