A LETTER TO TERRORISTS - THE MURDERERS OF PEACE

A reaction to Nice attack of France.....

Shedding the blood of innocent ,

is what happened in France in recent.

Many in Bangladesh you slaughtered ,

many innocents you murdered.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is.

Sad is the thing you get happiness by killing ,

you get happiness by blood shedding.

You are not a human ,

You are more than even a demon.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is.

Can you tell me what was the mistake ?

of the people whose lives you take.

Can you tell me what problem you had?

That terror missions you always laid.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is .

Merciless killing is what you like ,

making thousands of kids orphan by killing their parents is what you like.

Spreading hatredness is what you like ,

seeing the flood of blood of innocents is what you like.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is .

You are not the culprit of only those who were killed ,

you are the culprit of all Muslims whose soul you killed.

Allah never gets happy by seeing the graves of his children You made every person look with a vision of hate to a Muslim.

Because of a handful of you ,

whole Islam religion's respect and glory is destroyed by you

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is .

You did a sin against humanity ,

You kill all with a vast rapidity ,

But mind you the world will not listen ,

but put your hatredness in prison .

Killing you is a very easy death ,

And you are not worth of it ,

What you think by killing people you can rule this world ??

If you are thinking so , your ambition is in mud.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is.

Do you want this world under your rule?????

RULE , RULE the barren world , RULE !!!!

Because no human will accept your rule.

Do you want this world under your rule?????

RULE , RULE the soil  , air and water RULE!!!

Because even , birds and plants won't accept your rule.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is.

You think you won by killing people everywhere ??

Let me tell you the stupidity you have is rare.

I will not do the mistake by saying you an animal ,

Because the language of love and peace is known even by an animal.

Terror is what you like ,

But mind you, the day is not far when all of your lives will be on a permanent strike.

A letter to the terrorists this is ,

A letter to the murderers of peace this is...............

Author's Note

This was what i wrote after the recent attack in Nice , France and also to the attack which happened in a cafe of Bangladesh....I hope you all like it.....

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

unfortunately you can't get through to fanatics, they are brainwashed beyond help. an emotional write.

[Riddhi]

Thanks for spending your precious time in reading my poem....

[William Liston]

Hello fellow 15 year old writer,

You've expressed a very strong topic in this piece, and I think it's great that you saw injustice and put fourth your best effort to speak (or write) out against it. We need more teens like you who are willing to stand up for what's right; it would sure make the world a lot better.

As for the poem itself, I must say that I'd suggest changing some things, especially the wording and punctuation in some lines. If you do that, I think this poem will achieve its full potential.

The first thing I think you need to change is the font. Georgia size 12 font would be a great one to use as opposed to the one you've selected. The Georgia font is, I think, the most appreicable font this site has to offer. I use it for all my writings.

Also, I'd suggest shortening this piece. Though this poem has a strong voice (mostly because it expresses a strong opinion), I think taking out the second, sixth, and seventh stanza could greatly improve the readability. I know you feel strongly about the issue, but you never want to sound too repetitive.

Lastly, I'd change these lines:

Can you tell me what was the mistake ?
of the people whose lives you take.

The question mark should be after the word "take"

Hope you found this helpful, Riddhi. I'm glad you shared it, and I'm honored that you asked me to review this piece. Keep expressing yourself.

- William Liston

[Riddhi]

Thanks for your review William and yes i will surely improve what you have told me about....I am happy that you are among those teenagers who are willing to stand up for what's right.....Thanks for your review.....

[Richard🖌]

Well, Riddhi,
There is no doubting your passion or that your thoughts, feelings, and emotions mirror every decent human being's across the globe … you are a marvel of powerful conviction and belief … exactly what the world needs more of!
Poetically speaking, the refrain,
"A letter to the terrorists this is ,
A letter to the murderers of peace this is."

It is like a blade that keeps driving the point deeper with each thrust, and I only wish it could end all the carnage and unconscionably evil methodology of these Islamic mutants, who twist and distort the Koran to bolden their dysfunctionally destructive actions.

I stand with you in all you say, in every word, in every way … way to go, Riddhi … you're like a modern day Saint Jeanne D'Arc … bless your shining heart and soul! ⁓ Richard

[Riddhi]

Thank you so much richard...I am unable to express in words how glad i am feeling after reading your review and i am happy that you liked it ......Thank you.....

[Richard🖌]

How could anyone not be deeply touched by the living force of your words, Riddhi?

[Riddhi]

Oh!!!!Thank you so much richard

[Richard🖌]

Your words inspire my own, Riddhi … I thank you, too! : )

[Riddhi]

welcome......

[Julia]

A lovely poem of peace. :)

[Riddhi]

Thanks for reviewing...

[Ashwin Shanker]

I didn't like the opening two paragraphs. I felt that it was a rather ambiguous and slow start. I was about the third and fourth para didn't appeal much to me either, just as I was about to close the poem; I noticed the last two paragraphs: Both of which absolutely floored me. WOW.

Yes, terrorists would only be ruling a barren land as no human would be ready to occupy it.
Even animals and plants advocate peace in their own way. But, Let me tell you, there is rampant violence and slaughter even in the animal kingdom. Watch a few NAT GEO documentaries on lions and their pedigree to understand what I mean.

Also, I feel it is unfair to Muslims and Islam as a religion to be the only one associated with terror. There is a certain section in their ideology which is misinterpreted. THis Misinterpretation is what is causing all this violence. If you had seen 'My name is Khan'. There is a certain scene which addresses this head on.

I could feel the wrath in your voice, this poem is one written from the heart. I appreciate that.
Keep writing :)

[Riddhi]

Thanks for reviewing and i assure you that i will definitely try to improve more in my next writing...Thanks for spending your precious time in reading my poem.....

[Anindita Janhabee]

Yes, I found great knowledge and emotions reading this... Of course this poem is your best till now and is also quite realistic. Although I write very less in terms of reality but still I enjoyed reading this. The lines where you wrote - a letter to the murderers of peace this is, I think, 'this is' is not needed, cause 'peace' simply rhymes with the previous line.... All other was great...I liked how you could write so much better than me in terms of reality... great job!!!
Anindita : )

[Riddhi]

Yes , this poem came from the depth of my heart....Thanks for your review.....

[Meshalini]

What a tribute for those victims... You expressed your feelings in this poem very nice..
When people says that Muslims are terrorist, I will always tell to them that not all the Muslims are terrorist..
We must do something to stop terrorism otherwise more innocent people will die..

I love this very much... Keep writing..

[Riddhi]

Thank you meshalini and yes i am the one who believes that no religion gives birth to any kind of bad activities ...it is cruel attitude of those persons which gives birth to it....Thanks for your review....

[Meshalini]

You are always welcome...

[Jacob Clifford]

It truly is terrible what our world is coming to. Not just with the terrorist attacks, but with the retaliation from other people. Instead of blaming those who committed the crimes, people are blaming the entire religion. Saying all Muslims are evil because of ISIS is like saying Christians are evil because of the KKK. I agree with much of what you said. Unfortunately, there are those who words alone can't reach. They live in a society where ideals of hate and violence are shared. Their brains have been hardwired for the heinous acts they commit.

[Riddhi]

Yes, i agree with you and i am really happy that you liked it....thanks for spending your precious time in reading my poem.....

[Nigel Newman]

Riddhi Hi. I'll steer clear of the politics other than to say I generally agree with you. The whole thing about the oxygen of publicity is an interesting one. On my fb page I jokingly said the world seemed a lot more peaceful when the Olympics were on, so we should have Olympics all the time. Of course it was simply news editors in the UK focusing on Rio and thus having less time for 'serious stuff', but it is interesting how things felt different, just for a while.

As for your poem, I was trying to work out what it reminded me of. You have free form in every verse and then you repeat the same two lines each time. After a few minutes I worked it out - bit before your time but John Lennon's 'Give peace a chance'. It's also similar to 'The revolution will not be televised' and probably lots of rap. The free form allows the 'singer' or 'orator' to apply their own passion and emphasis, and then the last two lines are the anchor to give it just enough structure. The other specific I liked was the 'RULE' verse, where I think the repetitions really work. (Also with 'like' in an earlier verse).

Your passion and anger or frustration seep out onto the page very strongly, but at the same time you have used writing skills to heighten impact and effectiveness. Well done!

[Riddhi]

Thanks for reviewing...I am really happy that you liked my poem and yes , i do really feel that the day is not far when an end will come to this cruelty.......

[Antonio Del Negro]

I liked it. You and your poem is a vivid example of benevolence, good will, and innocence. A beautiful combination of traits that make the world, even against all the odds, a more livable place.

And for that, I thank you.

[Riddhi]

Thanks for reviewing and spending your precious time in reading my poem....