The story of 1947

This story is set up at the time of freedom of my motherland.It tells about the wrong practices which hollowed my Indian society. It also gives a ray of hope that entire humanity take the right path.

What light is to the eyes, what air is to the lungs,what love is to the heart,freedom is to the soul of man.Freedom brings love,freedom brings joy but freedom brings separation.

Yes, my dear readers this story is set up in the time during which my motherland India was under British rule.Yes,indeed,we got freedom on August 15,1947, but we were divided  as two nations - India and Pakisthan. Hindus and Muslims were divided forever.For centuries, the two brothers-Hindus and Muslims who lived together with peace and harmony were now divided. This freedom brought us separation. The number of people whom we have not lost in the freedom struggle we lost here during partition.The story starts on 15 September,1925.

   In the kingdom of Lahore, a kingdom of Muslims Nawabs which the Britishers  were unable to conquer was born a Prince, the son of Nawab Shahzaib Rizwan and his Begum Aafreeda  Shahzaib Rizwan. A Prince not born to rule the people but to rule their hearts , A Prince who was born for the people. "The Maseeha".After some days, this small Prince was named Shahzada Zein Shahzaib Waseem Rizwan, the one who was born for justice.

 Yes and in the same year on October 15, was born a beautiful Princess just like a lotus who was destined to live in the mud but amidst all bad circumstances to her, she was born to give the beautiful smell to other.The one born to fight for justice , for woman rights. She was born in Amarkot fort , in the blazing sun , glazing sand of Thar desert. She was the daughter of King Chittranjan Thakur , a  Rajput King and Queen Bhanumati. The little Princess was christened Princess  Krishnayani Chittranjan Thakur .

  These two souls unaware of their destiny were made for each other.Both Zein and Krishnayani grow into small , notty  children of 6 yrs. At that time, Rajput kings were scared that what  if the Nawabs conquer their kingdom.They can fight against Britishers bot about this nawabs... On the other hand,the Nawabs too hated Rajputs.This was the period of hatredness between all Hindus and Muslims.

Every day there was incident in which either Hindus killed Muslims or Muslims killed Hindu.On one .hand , all Rajputs were just waiting for one opportunity to defeat this Nawabs to know their army power and on the other hand , the brother of Nawab Shahzaib Rizwan , named Nawab Sharif-ud-din-Rizwan , the Nawab of Kabul died.

He left his two daughters Roekaya and Tazmeen to survive alone in this world . He was already a widower . Taking pity on his two daughters , Nawab Shahzaib Rizwan took decision that Roekaya , a six year old girl should be married with his son prince Zein , a six year old boy . At that time this child marriage was common . No one thought what the two little children , groom and bride wanted , only the thought was about this inhuman practice .

        Yes, this was the for the Rajput kings to have victory through some conspiracy as Roekaya and Tazmeen were unaware of their uncle Shazaib's wish about Roekaya's marriage . Rajput kings did not allowed this massage to reach Kabul to Roekaya instead they chose the most beautiful Rajput Princess who was Krishnayani  , changed her name to Razia as she refused to be named as Roekaya and she was taken to Lahore as a daughter Late Nawab Sharif -ud -din -Rizwan and their Razia was married to zen along with her Krishnayani's two elder brothers , Purushottam and Manikya disguised themselves as Salim and Sameer , the elder brothers of Roekaya . Nawab Shahzaib also died soon after. So whole Lahore kingdom main work were done by Manikya and Purushottam  and Zein became Nawab and Razia his queen . Day by Day as years passed they started living as husband and wife . 

            Salim and Sameer gathered all the possible information of Nawab's army and all the secrets of his kingdom . But one day both Manikya and Purushottam instructed Krishnayani that they will leave for Amarkot soon .Razia was unable to accept the truth that her marriage with Zein was nothing more than a conspiracy .She was used to gather all the secret information but forcibly they took Razia back to Amarkot . 

           At this time ,both Razia and Zein were sixteen year old . Ten years Krishnayani spent in Lahore as Razia . She just thought that how will Zein ,her Ammijan  Aafreeda think and react when they will know the truth . Krishnayani just prayed that please do all good to Zein , make him the greatest Nawab of this world .What else she could do .

          Four years passed by and by , Krishnayani now had just one goal and that was to stop all injustice against woman . Unlike other Rajput Princess , she never limited herself to the household chores rather she learned the warfare and became a great worrier. She made her voice bold against the age old Paradah system but while doing all this at some corner of her heart she was only Begum Razia.

          How can she forget her actual home, Lahore.But circumstances proved worst, from Lahore all courtiers and  nobles of Nawab Zein's kingdom wanted the crown of Marial - ul -  Zamrani back from Razia. The day came when after six years Zein and Krishnayani met not for any good occasion but to just take back Krishnayani's crown. That day, she could hardly control her tears.But a war on 1 August , 1947 broke between Rajputs and nawabs.

No one survived this devastating war except Zein and Krishnayani. But on August 15, 1947 when India and Pakisthan were divided , in the partition , they both too died. If Nawabs and Rajputs together would have fought against Britishers , then we would have secured freedom more easily. 

    But nothing left after freedom , all died , left were only two countries , India and Pakistan to fight against each other and to shed each other's blood whether it be in Kargil war or Taj Hotel bomb blast.............................

 

Author's Note

I hope you will like my story and this story may give a new ray of hope for entire humankind......

Reviews

[Knight Writer]

sad story behind out freedom strugle.....but yeah we both know...it was not just these things,,many more story can be written on our freedon struggle........
good work ...heep it up.....

[Riddhi]

Thanks for reviewing....

[Nigel Newman]

Hi Riddhi. You sent a friend request so I've had a look at your story. I suppose my first question is 'is it true?' or 'is it a possible story that might have happened within the wider historical truth of the period?'.

My next observation is that I loved the opening bold lines. [What light ... separation]. I think these could stand on their own as a poem.

As for the body of the story, I have two conflicting reactions. One, the good one, is that this feels like it could be a very important story because of the troubled times you describe. If there is a way we can better understand through the 'vehicle' of the couple in the story, then that could be a very good way to bring this greater appreciation to many more people. So I'll make a suggestion for improving it, but only because it feels like you have something worth working on.

The second reaction, the less good one, is that I'm sorry; I tried, but I lost track, and I lost the 'plot. My sense is that this story has been inside you for a long time, and then the time came to wrote it, and it gushed out onto the paper, almost in one breath. I think you are not explaining enough for the reader who knows nothing about the situation you're describing. The whole thing feels very compressed - not helped by the dense font and tight paragraph spacing.

But I think this comes to a crucial point - who is your audience? If it's folk like me, whose appreciation of Indian literature is through writers like Vikram Seth and Amitav Ghosh, then my advice is you should provide more explanation and background. But if your audience is another group, maybe you've got it right.

This is not the main issue, but if you do another version, may I also point out that there are several grammatical and spelling errors, so I suggest you give it a really good proof-read before re-publishing.

Riddhi, you have talent and passion, so I hope you don't mind these suggestions, which I only mention because I really enjoyed the poetry and very important story which underpin the whole piece. I would love to see a second version if you do one.

Regards
Nigel

[Riddhi]

Thanks for your review and i will definitely try to work on my weak points...and your review made me ask for one more favour from you please do view my poem also and the three poems which i am going to write her today.....

[Senn]

Never really knew such a story existed......great work...thanks for the information

[Mahi sain(Mahesh)]

Real ye story dil ko chhu ke niklti hai,
Ager is story ko dhyan se ager har men padhe to really me bol raha hu ki har koi saabasi diye bina nahi rukenge....
thank you so much,n meri taraf se all the best,
keep it up,,,

[KittyKatgirl]

Wow this is really good and very informative. I never really knew about the British control over your homeland till I read this. The ending was tragic, but it came to a strong conclusion I really enjoyed reading this and keep up the great work.